BOOK OF RENGA POEMS
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "Hope in Winter Branches"Renga is a collective poets Japanese poem
29 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This 7-7, Hope in Winter Branches, has the proper formatting and sees the power in reserve awaiting the full return of the spring and its encouraging warmth. Nice.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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This 7-7, Hope in Winter Branches, has the proper formatting and sees the power in reserve awaiting the full return of the spring and its encouraging warmth. Nice.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Thanks so much, Bill. So kind of you to go back to this one. Hugs!
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Helen,
Fantastic addition to Gypsy's Renga Book!
Just two lines of 7 syllables each, but you use nature to demonstrate much-needed hope in this world of woe.
And the picture of a budded branch waiting for enough warmth from the Sun to open up and bloom is perfect accompaniment for your wee poem.
I fail to understand the rules, though. They seem pretty wishy-washy to me.
Can I offer my suggestion? I realize, though, that my alteration may not coincide with the rules.
"bare branches in winter's sleep
hope bursts out in sunlit dreams"
(bare branches, deep in winter's sleep~
hope careens in sunlit dreams)
In my defense, you inspire. What can I say?
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024
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Hi Helen,
Fantastic addition to Gypsy's Renga Book!
Just two lines of 7 syllables each, but you use nature to demonstrate much-needed hope in this world of woe.
And the picture of a budded branch waiting for enough warmth from the Sun to open up and bloom is perfect accompaniment for your wee poem.
I fail to understand the rules, though. They seem pretty wishy-washy to me.
Can I offer my suggestion? I realize, though, that my alteration may not coincide with the rules.
"bare branches in winter's sleep
hope bursts out in sunlit dreams"
(bare branches, deep in winter's sleep~
hope careens in sunlit dreams)
In my defense, you inspire. What can I say?
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 10-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024
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I like your version, Kimbob! But your first line has 8 syllables. The Renga book is like an ongoing conversation. So one poet writes a 575 and that poem inspires another poem that is 77 and it keeps going a chain of poems. Thanks again for the super six stars! Hugs!
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So my version was a Wronga!
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Excellent picture. It conveys all your thoughts. You write well. A lot of wet here. Odder yet It got warm again seventy two degrees. Up and down it goes. Karen
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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Excellent picture. It conveys all your thoughts. You write well. A lot of wet here. Odder yet It got warm again seventy two degrees. Up and down it goes. Karen
Comment Written 07-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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Wow, that would be hot here! Thanks for reviewing, Karen! Hugs!
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:-)
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I forgot, where are you? :-)
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Pacific NW on the OR and WA border.
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I lived outside of Portland in Milwaulkee in 1972. For about seven months.I liked it. Karen
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Ah, Portland is not the same. It was much nicer in the 70's. But in recent years, it's become much more seedy and crime is really high.
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Well, I was freshly married and had on rose colored glasses anyway. :-)
Comment from nomi338
Bare branches and bulbs await the burgeoning growth that will burst forward when the time is right, restoring the vibrant life that will bless the Earth with its brilliance once more. Beautiful.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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Bare branches and bulbs await the burgeoning growth that will burst forward when the time is right, restoring the vibrant life that will bless the Earth with its brilliance once more. Beautiful.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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Thanks again, Nomi! I had to join in the group book. Hope you will, too! Hugs!
Comment from poetwatch
Like a child growing up, learning about the world and God's love, Helen. The slate is clean as innocence faces the weather. Yet, abuse mixed with tears effect that innocence soul. It sees life, its hardships, and then the hand of God intervenes, and that innocence soul feels the light and blooms with that ray of hope. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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Like a child growing up, learning about the world and God's love, Helen. The slate is clean as innocence faces the weather. Yet, abuse mixed with tears effect that innocence soul. It sees life, its hardships, and then the hand of God intervenes, and that innocence soul feels the light and blooms with that ray of hope. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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Thanks again, Jose! I'm honored by the poetic review and many stars!
Hugs!
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Aaah, yes... those buds are promises of what is to come... A well worded addition to the Renga here, Lady H... well done! ;) Gonna try to add perhaps this evening... Thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Aaah, yes... those buds are promises of what is to come... A well worded addition to the Renga here, Lady H... well done! ;) Gonna try to add perhaps this evening... Thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Thanks so much, Yvette!
Hugs!
Comment from karenina
Beautiful 7/7 finish to the previous 5-7-5! Gypsy's idea to create a book of Renga has been a real community event!
Tis the season! Happy Holidays!
Karenina
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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Beautiful 7/7 finish to the previous 5-7-5! Gypsy's idea to create a book of Renga has been a real community event!
Tis the season! Happy Holidays!
Karenina
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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Thanks again, Karenina! Hope you join in the fun, too. Hugs!
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You never know when the muse will visit!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I love the idea of hope branching in the sunlight from winters sleep. I always enjoy all things 'hope'. This is a beautifully written poem and message. Thank you.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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I love the idea of hope branching in the sunlight from winters sleep. I always enjoy all things 'hope'. This is a beautifully written poem and message. Thank you.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Thanks for getting the message! See? You're a poet at heart! Hugs!
Comment from estory
This little couplet contains all the tenacity of life, as we feel it clinging to hope through the long, dark, winter months. In life, there is light. In light, there is life. It is a powerful image and it packs a punch in this small space. estory
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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This little couplet contains all the tenacity of life, as we feel it clinging to hope through the long, dark, winter months. In life, there is light. In light, there is life. It is a powerful image and it packs a punch in this small space. estory
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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Amen and in His Light we see light - we wouldn't know light without Him! Thanks for the review, Estory!
Oh by the way, did I tell you about another favorite Russian poet? Osip Mandel'shtam. Blessings on your Sunday!
Comment from Ric Myworld
I have no idea what a Renga poem is, but come to think of it, I don't know anything about poetry. Although, I do enjoy reading what you come up with. Prose or verse, I appreciate the words. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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I have no idea what a Renga poem is, but come to think of it, I don't know anything about poetry. Although, I do enjoy reading what you come up with. Prose or verse, I appreciate the words. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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Aw, Ric! What do I have to do to convince you that you are a poet? Just do it - as Nike says. Join in! Thanks for reviewing mine. Hugs!
