The Squirrels Strike Back
Rhymed story in a poem17 total reviews
Comment from Tim Margetts
This is a humorous tale that proves quite captivating as you recount the battle.
I did wonder at the meter and rhyme until you explained the colloquial usage of squirrel. Unfortunately in poetry this can sometimes cause problems, when dialect and usage are not common to the reader.
Nice poem and thanks for sharing.
Tim
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2024
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This is a humorous tale that proves quite captivating as you recount the battle.
I did wonder at the meter and rhyme until you explained the colloquial usage of squirrel. Unfortunately in poetry this can sometimes cause problems, when dialect and usage are not common to the reader.
Nice poem and thanks for sharing.
Tim
Comment Written 26-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2024
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Thank you for stopping by to read and comment!
Comment from Colorado Owl
This is a fun story. I'm wondering is the squirrel accidentally dropped the acorn, and it wasn't an attack at all! Why would the squirrel throw away his food? Around my house, the squirrels are bold and chase the birds away from my feeders.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2024
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This is a fun story. I'm wondering is the squirrel accidentally dropped the acorn, and it wasn't an attack at all! Why would the squirrel throw away his food? Around my house, the squirrels are bold and chase the birds away from my feeders.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your five-star review. Of course, this was just a story in a poem, as the contest prompt said to do. Squirrels are definitely smarter than we might give them credit for.
Comment from ESOSTINE
Your poem is a story of an unproved war with the squirrels. You penned it with a touch of creativity. I am glad you showed wisdom and tactfully evaded the war. You never know with nature! Well done, Crystie for sharing your experience. Remain blessed.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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Your poem is a story of an unproved war with the squirrels. You penned it with a touch of creativity. I am glad you showed wisdom and tactfully evaded the war. You never know with nature! Well done, Crystie for sharing your experience. Remain blessed.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your great review.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
This is a great story about your war with the squirrels. They had you outnumbered and probably would have won the war. The picture is adorable.
Well done and good luck in your contest
Cecilia
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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This is a great story about your war with the squirrels. They had you outnumbered and probably would have won the war. The picture is adorable.
Well done and good luck in your contest
Cecilia
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your super review.
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You're welcome
Cecilia
Comment from Jacob1395
I think you captured their mischievous nature really well in this piece. I always find it fascinating watching squirrels, we get lots of them in our garden around our bird feeder. An excellent piece, I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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I think you captured their mischievous nature really well in this piece. I always find it fascinating watching squirrels, we get lots of them in our garden around our bird feeder. An excellent piece, I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your positive review!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a jaunty, well rhymed and metered poem full of fun with the squirrel as you interact with them outside. I enjoyed the humour and the well described antics of those squirrels. A magical poem.
A suggestion for these line to help with the metre Crystie:
(Perhaps a bird? A chipmunk? Nope. A squirrel I have found).
(The squirrel scolds me--I look up, and then I spy another).
Love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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This is a jaunty, well rhymed and metered poem full of fun with the squirrel as you interact with them outside. I enjoyed the humour and the well described antics of those squirrels. A magical poem.
A suggestion for these line to help with the metre Crystie:
(Perhaps a bird? A chipmunk? Nope. A squirrel I have found).
(The squirrel scolds me--I look up, and then I spy another).
Love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your generous review. I will go back and look at those lines a bit more.
Comment from lyenochka
You convinced me! I think squirrel rhymes just fine with girl. And what a cute story of a friendly battle with squirrels. I wish we could speak their language so we can verbalize a truce. But I'm sure they appreciated the pistachios! Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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You convinced me! I think squirrel rhymes just fine with girl. And what a cute story of a friendly battle with squirrels. I wish we could speak their language so we can verbalize a truce. But I'm sure they appreciated the pistachios! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review.
Comment from judiverse
Squirrels are so cute, except when they're lobbing nuts at you. Maybe they were throwing down the nuts they intended to store. It's funny there were two involved and that they joined forces. I loved your description of them and your reaction. Squirrels have been raiding my bird feeder, but a squirrel's gotta eat. Great story telling and excellent rhyme. Best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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Squirrels are so cute, except when they're lobbing nuts at you. Maybe they were throwing down the nuts they intended to store. It's funny there were two involved and that they joined forces. I loved your description of them and your reaction. Squirrels have been raiding my bird feeder, but a squirrel's gotta eat. Great story telling and excellent rhyme. Best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 23-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your super review and well wishes.
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You're welcome. Squirrels are such fun creatures. judi
Comment from Tom Horonzy
My favorite line from this piece is I am outnumbered--two smart squirrels against a human girl. You painted an image without paint or charcoal and yet the image is very clear.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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My favorite line from this piece is I am outnumbered--two smart squirrels against a human girl. You painted an image without paint or charcoal and yet the image is very clear.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your specific review. It's always appreciated.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the Share a Story in a Poem contest. This is a very cute story and you did a good job with the poem as far as meter and rhyme went. Love the photo of the squirrel. They are so darn adorable! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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An excellent entry for the Share a Story in a Poem contest. This is a very cute story and you did a good job with the poem as far as meter and rhyme went. Love the photo of the squirrel. They are so darn adorable! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your enthusiastic, personalized review.