Winter*s Torment
a 5-7-9 poem11 total reviews
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the 5-7-9 writing prompt. The syllable count is correct. I agree that winter can be rough to get through without being tough. I like the comparison to a tree bending in the wind.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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An excellent entry for the 5-7-9 writing prompt. The syllable count is correct. I agree that winter can be rough to get through without being tough. I like the comparison to a tree bending in the wind.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Already I detect Winter in the wings. Many thanks, Marilyn, for your kind praise. Rod
Comment from zanya
I can empathise with these sentiments expressed about winter and how chilly it can be - interesting portrayal of winter and poet's reaction'bend but won't break.' Roll on Spring' !!
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2024
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I can empathise with these sentiments expressed about winter and how chilly it can be - interesting portrayal of winter and poet's reaction'bend but won't break.' Roll on Spring' !!
Comment Written 22-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2024
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Many thanks, zanya, for sharing my poem. Already it is too chilly around here for my taste. Rod
Comment from Wendy G
An excellent image to accompany your words. I think that tree represents one's life as well as what you wrote in your author's notes, giving your words an extra layer of meaning. Well done. Best wishes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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An excellent image to accompany your words. I think that tree represents one's life as well as what you wrote in your author's notes, giving your words an extra layer of meaning. Well done. Best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Thank you so much, Wendy, for your kind praise of this shortie.
Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet, you now have 2 votes!
On islands if you have noticed the palms closest to the beach are curved, bent .. they have learned to not resist the force of the winds and they continue to thrive.
People need to do the same .. a smart person knows when to bend and compromise when under pressure ( eg a fight) and that way they will not break.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Ciao mystery poet, you now have 2 votes!
On islands if you have noticed the palms closest to the beach are curved, bent .. they have learned to not resist the force of the winds and they continue to thrive.
People need to do the same .. a smart person knows when to bend and compromise when under pressure ( eg a fight) and that way they will not break.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much, tempeste, for sharing my poem and your vote. I treasure your continuous support.
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You are welcome 😐
I enjoy your topics , your style and often the artwork you chose to showcase your work.
Keep safe !🍀
Comment from Amelie Johns
Great entry for the 5-7-9 poem contest. You describe how I often feel in this poem. It reminds me of all the things life throws at you causing you to bend almost to the point of breaking. Thanks for sharing and best of luck!
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Great entry for the 5-7-9 poem contest. You describe how I often feel in this poem. It reminds me of all the things life throws at you causing you to bend almost to the point of breaking. Thanks for sharing and best of luck!
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much, Amelie. I am delighted you can relate to the Speaker of the poem.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A great thought and phrasing for the contest here... would suggest, perhaps, the addition of a comma after fury to aid in reading smoothly... Good entry for this limited form and best of luck to you in the competition! ;)
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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A great thought and phrasing for the contest here... would suggest, perhaps, the addition of a comma after fury to aid in reading smoothly... Good entry for this limited form and best of luck to you in the competition! ;)
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much for the high praise of my poem and suggestion.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I like the imagery and juxtaposition presented in this piece.
This is a hard time of the year for so many and likening that struggle to the weather-hardy trees is a nice metaphor.
All syllables present and correct, too.
Good job
GMG
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Hi there,
I like the imagery and juxtaposition presented in this piece.
This is a hard time of the year for so many and likening that struggle to the weather-hardy trees is a nice metaphor.
All syllables present and correct, too.
Good job
GMG
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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So pleased you like this short poem, GMG. Many thanks for sharing.
Comment from DonandVicki
Strong roots make sturdy trees, come winter winds. A lovely poem that captures the essence of strength through adversity. A poem that held my attention. Don
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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Strong roots make sturdy trees, come winter winds. A lovely poem that captures the essence of strength through adversity. A poem that held my attention. Don
Comment Written 20-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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Thanks so much for your insightful review.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
What a great 5-7-9 poem. It concise and to the point. Winter can be horrible, depending what part of the country you live. Good for not breaking. I broke along time ago and if I could move farther south like Costa Rica I'd do.
Great job and good luck in your contest.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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What a great 5-7-9 poem. It concise and to the point. Winter can be horrible, depending what part of the country you live. Good for not breaking. I broke along time ago and if I could move farther south like Costa Rica I'd do.
Great job and good luck in your contest.
Cecilia
Comment Written 20-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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I would also like to spend my Winter in a warm clime. Many thanks, Cecilia, for sharing my poem.
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You're welcome. I don't know how ya all tough out those winters. I did it too many years. Like I say North Texas gets cold in the winter, but not like all the northern states.
Cecilia
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-9, Winter's Torment, has the proper formatting and reminds the reader that the tree that bends to the wind, lives to stand taller until the wind is no longer a hazard.
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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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This 5-7-9, Winter's Torment, has the proper formatting and reminds the reader that the tree that bends to the wind, lives to stand taller until the wind is no longer a hazard.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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Many thanks, Bill!