Seasonal Departure
a 5-7-56 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
And noisy they are -- a great nature entry for the contest here - well done!! Thank you so much for sharing your pen and best of luck to you in the contest! ;)
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2024
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And noisy they are -- a great nature entry for the contest here - well done!! Thank you so much for sharing your pen and best of luck to you in the contest! ;)
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much. My heart always skips a beat when I see geese in flight heading south.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This one does it for me because I love to see those geese making their noisy getaway in their characteristic 'v' formation. Your 5-7-5 sums this up perfectly. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2024
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This one does it for me because I love to see those geese making their noisy getaway in their characteristic 'v' formation. Your 5-7-5 sums this up perfectly. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2024
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I, too, love to see those geese heading south, Debbie. Many thanks for your kind praise.
Comment from zanya
Yes - its that time of year again when Nature begins her resting or dormant season and geese depart for warmer climes - nature's rhythms are enthralling
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Yes - its that time of year again when Nature begins her resting or dormant season and geese depart for warmer climes - nature's rhythms are enthralling
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Many thanks for sharing my poem, zanya. Can I use your phrase "enthralling rhythms" as a title of a future poem?
Comment from Mark D. R.
Yes, you ably capture the moment between Fall and Winter in this 5-7-5 contest entry. They do squawk - because they don't agree this year with the Election results? LOL
Minor editorial comment, flight is singular or a collective (for geese), so 'make' should be 'makes.' Comma or dash necessary after your first line?
IMHO substitute 'their' for 'a' in your last line.
Mark
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Yes, you ably capture the moment between Fall and Winter in this 5-7-5 contest entry. They do squawk - because they don't agree this year with the Election results? LOL
Minor editorial comment, flight is singular or a collective (for geese), so 'make' should be 'makes.' Comma or dash necessary after your first line?
IMHO substitute 'their' for 'a' in your last line.
Mark
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Hi, Mark, I really appreciate your close reading of my 5-7-5. And thanks for catching that subject/verb agreement error. Yes, the election results likely scared them off.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Flying south for warmer climes is a huge undertaking for these birds and they prepare well in advance as they decide who takes the lead and who will back up the leaders. It is strategic and does not fail, but not all birds make the journey, the weaker ones fall behind. I admire these birds as they recognise the natural order of things without argument, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2024
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Flying south for warmer climes is a huge undertaking for these birds and they prepare well in advance as they decide who takes the lead and who will back up the leaders. It is strategic and does not fail, but not all birds make the journey, the weaker ones fall behind. I admire these birds as they recognise the natural order of things without argument, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 16-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2024
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Dolly, you seem to have researched birds. I like how you express their ability to "recognize the natural order of things." Many thanks for sharing my poem.i
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I wrote a poetry book on birds all around the world and I learned a lot x x x
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the 5-7-5 writing prompt. You have drawn a vivid image with your words alone but the picture you added really adds to your presentation. Good job.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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An excellent entry for the 5-7-5 writing prompt. You have drawn a vivid image with your words alone but the picture you added really adds to your presentation. Good job.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much, Marilyn. Your kind words are much appreciated.