Grief
The depth of grief losing your child17 total reviews
Comment from Zach Gallows
Such a sad depiction. A sinking hole exactly describes the kind of grief that can only be experienced by the loss of a child. The feeling of wanting to be whole again pulls at my heartstrings. Very good job engaging in exactly twenty syllables.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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Such a sad depiction. A sinking hole exactly describes the kind of grief that can only be experienced by the loss of a child. The feeling of wanting to be whole again pulls at my heartstrings. Very good job engaging in exactly twenty syllables.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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Thank you Zach, yes it's been sad! I've heart that you're never the same again. I'm thankful for my relationship with the Lord to help as he is close to the broken hearted.
Comment from Nicki.B
I could not even begin to think about the unbearable pain of losing a child. But you have captured it here excellent, choosing words that are direct feelings of loss and emptiness and never again feeling whole. Well done on getting so many feeling expressed in so little syllables.
If this is not a poem of fiction, I want to express my deepest condolences for your loss.
Take care
Nicki
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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I could not even begin to think about the unbearable pain of losing a child. But you have captured it here excellent, choosing words that are direct feelings of loss and emptiness and never again feeling whole. Well done on getting so many feeling expressed in so little syllables.
If this is not a poem of fiction, I want to express my deepest condolences for your loss.
Take care
Nicki
Comment Written 12-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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Thank you Nicki for your review. It has need sad as my hubby lost his 1st born unexpectedly ant 36 October 1st and watching my husband go through the grief process has been the hardest part for me.
Thank you for your condolences.
Comment from CM Pickard
Great start to your journey on FanStory. This short poem effectively conveys the void and profound feelings experienced during grief.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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Great start to your journey on FanStory. This short poem effectively conveys the void and profound feelings experienced during grief.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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Thank you, it comes from a place of experience unfortunately. My step son passed away unexpectedly October 1st.
Comment from Tim Margetts
This poem, your words; gripped me with the obvious intensity this grief brings.
The loss of a child is something that can only be truly understood by those who have sadly experienced it.
All the rest of us can do, is extend a moment of compassion and acknowledge the loss.
Tim
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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This poem, your words; gripped me with the obvious intensity this grief brings.
The loss of a child is something that can only be truly understood by those who have sadly experienced it.
All the rest of us can do, is extend a moment of compassion and acknowledge the loss.
Tim
Comment Written 12-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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Thank you for reviewing! I once was one of the "rest of us" as I have friends who have experienced the loss of an adult child, thank you for your kind words!
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One question, why do you remove your work, I looked to read other things you had written but they were deleted.
Even the ones you won contest prizes with
You have talent. Don't hide it away :
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I just went to my portfolio and clicked on some random old ones and they were still there.
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They will be there for you but for random readers and idiots such as I, the only one visible is a single poem, grief.
There is a button that allows you to disable posts, they move to the disabled section of the portfolio and are only visibe to you.
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Is there a way I can re-enable them?
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I sent a message to the powers that be to see if they can enable them.
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:) I look forward to reading them.
I am going to add you as a followed account so I can keep an eye out
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Sounds good.
Comment from Begin Again
There's no way back from the grief that consumes you when you lose a child. All deaths are brutal, but the death of a child means the dreams, the future, and the promises of tomorrow will never be. It's a spiraling pit that sucks you dry. I've been there and returned over and over, struggling to find the answer to why... My heart goes out to you or anyone who has faced the loss.
Hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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There's no way back from the grief that consumes you when you lose a child. All deaths are brutal, but the death of a child means the dreams, the future, and the promises of tomorrow will never be. It's a spiraling pit that sucks you dry. I've been there and returned over and over, struggling to find the answer to why... My heart goes out to you or anyone who has faced the loss.
Hugs, Carol
Comment Written 11-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Thank you for the review! What you said " the dreams, the future, and the promises of tomorrow will never be." is one of the things that makes this so tough.
Comment from Bill Schott
This twenty-syllable poem, Grief, has the proper formatting and creates the sense that exists after a child has been taken away from loving parents. .
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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This twenty-syllable poem, Grief, has the proper formatting and creates the sense that exists after a child has been taken away from loving parents. .
Comment Written 11-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Natureschild
Hi Lana. This poem has a haunting simplicity that feels true to the theme of grief. The imagery is strong, capturing the struggle to be whole. Nicely crafted. Good luck. Terry
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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Hi Lana. This poem has a haunting simplicity that feels true to the theme of grief. The imagery is strong, capturing the struggle to be whole. Nicely crafted. Good luck. Terry
Comment Written 11-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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Thank you Terry for reviewing this poem on grief. It was an easy writing that came so quickly when I read the contest as I just experienced this grief through losing my step son October 1st.
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Sorry for your loss
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Thank you.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Lana.
This is a very strong 20 syllable poem concerning a very difficult circumstance. It's nothing I have experienced but I could not imagine the grief of such a tragedy. Your poem is well structured to meet the requirements for the contest and I wish you the best of luck.
Robert
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Hello Lana.
This is a very strong 20 syllable poem concerning a very difficult circumstance. It's nothing I have experienced but I could not imagine the grief of such a tragedy. Your poem is well structured to meet the requirements for the contest and I wish you the best of luck.
Robert
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Thank you Robert.
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You're welcome3
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I am sorry for your loss Lana, the worst kind of grief is when we lose someone to death, when it is a child then it is most cruel, a poignant poem full of sorrow, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
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I am sorry for your loss Lana, the worst kind of grief is when we lose someone to death, when it is a child then it is most cruel, a poignant poem full of sorrow, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
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Thank you so much Dolly, it is been a difficult last month and a half seeing my husband process the loss of his firstborn. I was blessed to have my stepson for 31 years. He passed away at 36 years old a couple weeks after his birthday.
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I am so sorry to hear that Lana, grief can hit us hard and my prayers are with you and your husband, love Dolly x
Comment from mermaids
You have a vivid ude of words that captures the impact of grief and how one can feel after the loss of a child. "A sinking hole" is a perfect line to draw readers into your words
Grief is certainly a sinking hole. Many can relate to your words
You have a smooth flow of rhyming words that adds to the strength of your theme.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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You have a vivid ude of words that captures the impact of grief and how one can feel after the loss of a child. "A sinking hole" is a perfect line to draw readers into your words
Grief is certainly a sinking hole. Many can relate to your words
You have a smooth flow of rhyming words that adds to the strength of your theme.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Thank you for reviewing, I know several friends that have lost a young adult child through different circumstances, and I have seen how that affects them as well.