Comment from Debi Pick Marquette

Excellent

Hi Gaye, this is a very warm and delicious twenty syllable poem. I love it and I love soup too. Your poem is perfect, but if you wouldn't mind, I care about you so I hope you don't mind a little advice. First of all to be considered:

you can't have all that excess at the bottom of your poem. If you bring that up but still a couple lines from the words.

Make the font bigger

And bring your words down one line. They should not sit right under the picture. Just one line below is good.

I hope you don't mind me making a few suggestions, but I would love to see you win this one.

Thanks for the great poem and a few little fixes will make such a great difference.
Love, Debi

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024

Thanks for reading and your great suggestions which I totally agree with. I will tidy it up I have just entered a 3 6 9 poem Looks like some spring sunshine today Love NanaGaye

Comment from Marilyn Hamilton

Excellent

An excellent entry for the 20 syllable poem contest. Ain't that the truth! I LOVE soup. I even enjoy making it and making enough to freeze so that I can just thaw it out for dinner. One suggestion if I may. Try using a bolder font or just add bold to your current text. Your lovely words are getting lost within that background color and are difficult to read. Great job. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2024

Thanks Marilyn You're right about the text I'll have a go at correcting that and thanks for the lovely stars

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This twenty-syllable poem, Yummy Soup, has the proper formatting and reminds the readers that the simple pleasures of a bowl of soup are always available. Nice.

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2024

Thanks Bill for your lovely comments and the six stars