Candyland Space Race
Candyland3 total reviews
Comment from Gunner Lil
This is not flash fiction. Your short story is well over 1500 words.
Sentence structure needs help. Errors in punctuation also.
Rereading to yourself and out loud will help in your rewrite.
Good luck.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2024
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This is not flash fiction. Your short story is well over 1500 words.
Sentence structure needs help. Errors in punctuation also.
Rereading to yourself and out loud will help in your rewrite.
Good luck.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2024
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they will not accept it if it's too long. I believe it had to be under 5,000 words. This, I checked. I've looked at punctuation. I'll look again. But I don't think it will make it into the contest anyway. Reguardless of it's content and errors.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
What a wild adventure! Jazzy's determination and the quirky challenges she faces kept me hooked. The idea of "frozen time" at the end is so chilling. The twist at the end really makes the whole story feel complete. I enjoyed the fun tone throughout and how you built tension as Jazzy found these dangerous environments. So creative and such an enjoyable read!
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2024
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What a wild adventure! Jazzy's determination and the quirky challenges she faces kept me hooked. The idea of "frozen time" at the end is so chilling. The twist at the end really makes the whole story feel complete. I enjoyed the fun tone throughout and how you built tension as Jazzy found these dangerous environments. So creative and such an enjoyable read!
Comment Written 09-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2024
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thank you
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thank you
Comment from Barry Penfold
Very good entry for the contest. Love the way you have set up a whole Candyland as another planet. The contest also brings in further interest for the reader and the names attached to certain features of the planet are clever. A few spelling errors towards the beginning of the story but overall a very interesting story. Well done.
Take care.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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Very good entry for the contest. Love the way you have set up a whole Candyland as another planet. The contest also brings in further interest for the reader and the names attached to certain features of the planet are clever. A few spelling errors towards the beginning of the story but overall a very interesting story. Well done.
Take care.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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thank you