Prayers for Wayne, Rhonda's Husband
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Tree of Friendship "Rhonda's husband had a stroke
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Comment from estory
I like the first stanza. You have these great images of life here, the green leaves and branches reaching out to wipe away the thoughts of despair and death. There is a great sense of rejuvenation there. The second stanza is a bit more realistic, it weighs down with its thoughts on the cares and anxieties of life. I would have flipped them to give it more of an upbeat trend. estory
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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I like the first stanza. You have these great images of life here, the green leaves and branches reaching out to wipe away the thoughts of despair and death. There is a great sense of rejuvenation there. The second stanza is a bit more realistic, it weighs down with its thoughts on the cares and anxieties of life. I would have flipped them to give it more of an upbeat trend. estory
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much, estory. I so appreciate your review and all your support. Poetry is not my forte, lol. Ulla:)))
Comment from F. William Lester
Very nicely said, Ulla. I think Rhonda has reviewed some of my work, but I didn't know her husband was ill. I hope it isn't serious. I'm sure they will appreciate your words. I don't know what a Sapphonic Triad is, but your poem sounded fine to me. Have a great week. Frank
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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Very nicely said, Ulla. I think Rhonda has reviewed some of my work, but I didn't know her husband was ill. I hope it isn't serious. I'm sure they will appreciate your words. I don't know what a Sapphonic Triad is, but your poem sounded fine to me. Have a great week. Frank
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much, Frank. Oh, Rhonda's husband had a major stroke. He's slowly on the mend. Rhonda is staying with him at the hospital. Ulla:)))
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Thanks, Ulla. I sent her a PM and told her that I'd keep them in my thoughts.
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Oh, she will appreciate that.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Ulla,
This is my third chapter in "Prayers for Wayne, Rhonda's Husband" book, that I read today. It's a great idea. I plan to read one tomorrow. I bet Rhonda will appreciate it.
I like the Sapphonic Triad poetic form. Yours is beatiful. It reminds me of a children's book, "the giving tree"
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
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Hello, Ulla,
This is my third chapter in "Prayers for Wayne, Rhonda's Husband" book, that I read today. It's a great idea. I plan to read one tomorrow. I bet Rhonda will appreciate it.
I like the Sapphonic Triad poetic form. Yours is beatiful. It reminds me of a children's book, "the giving tree"
Comment Written 27-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
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Thank you so much, Marival. It's been a tumultuous time of late. Ulla xcx
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
That is a lovely picture of a home unlike what we generally find in an American home. Its attractiveness reminds us of the beauty of friendship. I do wonder if you want an "s" on embrace each time it occurs in your poem.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
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That is a lovely picture of a home unlike what we generally find in an American home. Its attractiveness reminds us of the beauty of friendship. I do wonder if you want an "s" on embrace each time it occurs in your poem.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
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I know, the picture very much reflects how a home would look like where I live. Thanks again, Carol. Ulla, xcx
Comment from Charles D Ezell
AS YOU KNOW i AM NO POET HOWEVER, i DO TRY SOMETIMES. Much like you I love dabbling with various types. I find nothing wrong with this write. Made sense to me. Good one, Ulla.
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AS YOU KNOW i AM NO POET HOWEVER, i DO TRY SOMETIMES. Much like you I love dabbling with various types. I find nothing wrong with this write. Made sense to me. Good one, Ulla.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2024
Comment from karenina
You and Pam have back-to-back Sapphonic Triads in this book (which I didn't realize existed although I read "multi-author book" when I read Debi's first entry. (Sad where my mind goes...)
Your words ring so true! We can take nothing for granted. How fortunate Wayne's sons put an app on his phone that likely saved his life!
First try or twentieth, it seems, to me, you've mastered this form, Ulla.
Prayers continue, and how great this must be for Rhonda to read these messages of support!
Karenina
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You and Pam have back-to-back Sapphonic Triads in this book (which I didn't realize existed although I read "multi-author book" when I read Debi's first entry. (Sad where my mind goes...)
Your words ring so true! We can take nothing for granted. How fortunate Wayne's sons put an app on his phone that likely saved his life!
First try or twentieth, it seems, to me, you've mastered this form, Ulla.
Prayers continue, and how great this must be for Rhonda to read these messages of support!
Karenina
Comment Written 26-Oct-2024
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I don't know Rhonda and Wayne but I'm moved by compassion from so many Fastorians here. I like your using trees as metaphor here to express your sympathy toward them.
One suggestion:
Could replace one of two "embrace" with "embody".
Well done.
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I don't know Rhonda and Wayne but I'm moved by compassion from so many Fastorians here. I like your using trees as metaphor here to express your sympathy toward them.
One suggestion:
Could replace one of two "embrace" with "embody".
Well done.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2024
Comment from BethShelby
These are beautiful thoughts for Wayne and Rhonda. I know they will like this. It is true that life has its ups and downs, and nothing is guaranteed.
Forgive me if I'm wrong but foliage and life sounds singular, and if feels like the word embrace should embraces.
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These are beautiful thoughts for Wayne and Rhonda. I know they will like this. It is true that life has its ups and downs, and nothing is guaranteed.
Forgive me if I'm wrong but foliage and life sounds singular, and if feels like the word embrace should embraces.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2024
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is a lovely tribute and gives lots of energy. And it's a good opportunity to invite others to send healing and prayer to the intentions this couple. This is well expressed.
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This is a lovely tribute and gives lots of energy. And it's a good opportunity to invite others to send healing and prayer to the intentions this couple. This is well expressed.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2024
Comment from Begin Again
We walk our separate paths each day, not knowing what life will bring, but when tragedy strikes, we find ourselves bonded together, arms encircling each other and holding us safe. I could feel all the love in your words. My thoughts and love go to Rhonda and Wayne, and I hope for a speedy recovery.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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We walk our separate paths each day, not knowing what life will bring, but when tragedy strikes, we find ourselves bonded together, arms encircling each other and holding us safe. I could feel all the love in your words. My thoughts and love go to Rhonda and Wayne, and I hope for a speedy recovery.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment Written 26-Oct-2024