Andersonville, My Love
a tale of brokenness, a time of confusion32 total reviews
Comment from ESOSTINE
This leaves bleeding eyes on me as I imagined the torture and pains war captive are subjected to. The thoughts in their minds and the wish for an opportunity to say goodbye to loved ones could be heart breaking. Well done, dear Jim.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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This leaves bleeding eyes on me as I imagined the torture and pains war captive are subjected to. The thoughts in their minds and the wish for an opportunity to say goodbye to loved ones could be heart breaking. Well done, dear Jim.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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I am very sorry for my tardiness in responding.
Thank you for your very kind words.
Comment from gansach
Wow! This is a stunning piece for the Free Form Poetry competition. I love the construct and the absence of punctuation which adds a wonderful story-telling flow that fits the atmosphere of the poem perfectly. It's descriptive language presents clear imagery to all the senses enabling the reader to feel as if they were there. I am so impressed with this powerful and magnificent piece of writing. Congratulations and well done!
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Wow! This is a stunning piece for the Free Form Poetry competition. I love the construct and the absence of punctuation which adds a wonderful story-telling flow that fits the atmosphere of the poem perfectly. It's descriptive language presents clear imagery to all the senses enabling the reader to feel as if they were there. I am so impressed with this powerful and magnificent piece of writing. Congratulations and well done!
Comment Written 18-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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I am very sorry for my tardiness in responding.
Thank you for your very kind words.
Comment from Heather Knight
I love poems that tell a story and yours hooked me from the very first line.
Even though it has a sad ending (or maybe not?, there's hope there), it's a beautiful tale.
Unfortunately, It is based on real historical facts, people that have been forgotten now.
You say the soldier didn't know why he was fighting and I find that incredibly poignant.
I think I've spotted a typo: has been gathering (had?) an infection
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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I love poems that tell a story and yours hooked me from the very first line.
Even though it has a sad ending (or maybe not?, there's hope there), it's a beautiful tale.
Unfortunately, It is based on real historical facts, people that have been forgotten now.
You say the soldier didn't know why he was fighting and I find that incredibly poignant.
I think I've spotted a typo: has been gathering (had?) an infection
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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I am very sorry for my tardiness in responding.
Thank you for your very kind words.
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Don't worry. I've been away for ages.
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Well, then, welcome back!
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Thanks.:)
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I'll be looking forward to more.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Nice Civil War piece my friend.
This part left a hauntingly by image:
And the mournful cries of doomed men compounded by the thousands
Long but good!
D
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Nice Civil War piece my friend.
This part left a hauntingly by image:
And the mournful cries of doomed men compounded by the thousands
Long but good!
D
Comment Written 17-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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I am very sorry for my tardiness in responding.
Thank you for your very kind words.
Comment from karenina
Extraordinary free verse. The narrator captures my attention from the first lines ~ how quickly you allow us to see the hopeful heart of a young man so enamored with that fine lass the entire future seems to lay ahead of him!
How powerful, then, to weave the sadness, pain, solitary grief, and ruins of war.
This is one of your finest, Jim.
I've read it three times through and reached for a tissue to blot my eyes each time.
"So if you should run into my precious Rose
Please tell her
I tried to come, I tried my best..."
I am thinking of all the casualties in all the wars -- and of all the men who died with this very thought, possibly uttered aloud in their final breath.
Six stars if only I had them!
Karenina
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Extraordinary free verse. The narrator captures my attention from the first lines ~ how quickly you allow us to see the hopeful heart of a young man so enamored with that fine lass the entire future seems to lay ahead of him!
How powerful, then, to weave the sadness, pain, solitary grief, and ruins of war.
This is one of your finest, Jim.
I've read it three times through and reached for a tissue to blot my eyes each time.
"So if you should run into my precious Rose
Please tell her
I tried to come, I tried my best..."
I am thinking of all the casualties in all the wars -- and of all the men who died with this very thought, possibly uttered aloud in their final breath.
Six stars if only I had them!
Karenina
Comment Written 17-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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I am very sorry for my tardiness in responding.
Thank you for your very kind words. Your words mean much to me.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Wow! This is riveting. It held my attention without a pause the entire time. Great descriptions throughout. Although the ending was sad, it was honest and authentic.
There's a little spag in the sentence "broken form Mt state of Tennessee." Xo
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Wow! This is riveting. It held my attention without a pause the entire time. Great descriptions throughout. Although the ending was sad, it was honest and authentic.
There's a little spag in the sentence "broken form Mt state of Tennessee." Xo
Comment Written 17-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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I am very sorry for my tardiness in responding.
Thank you for your very kind words. Your words mean much to me. i will try to correct that typo.
Comment from Charles D Ezell
I applaud you for this. One can only imagine the moment in Andersonville. It has quiet a history, a place where hell itself fears. No doubt this write came from a lonely mind of the times. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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I applaud you for this. One can only imagine the moment in Andersonville. It has quiet a history, a place where hell itself fears. No doubt this write came from a lonely mind of the times. Well done.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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I am very sorry for my tardiness in responding.
Thank you for your very kind words.
Comment from BethShelby
This is very nicely written free poem telling the story of young man fighting in the Civil War. He has fallen in love and plans to be with his sweetheart again. He is from Tennessee, and he is fighting on the side of the Union which is unusual since most of Tennessee fought for the Confederacy. The poem ends with him dying in an overcrowded Confederate prison. I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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This is very nicely written free poem telling the story of young man fighting in the Civil War. He has fallen in love and plans to be with his sweetheart again. He is from Tennessee, and he is fighting on the side of the Union which is unusual since most of Tennessee fought for the Confederacy. The poem ends with him dying in an overcrowded Confederate prison. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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I am very sorry for my tardiness in responding.
Thank you for your very kind words. Your words mean much to me.
Comment from Teri7
Jim, This is a very well written post. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery from the artwork you chose and from your words. I always loved that song. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Jim, This is a very well written post. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery from the artwork you chose and from your words. I always loved that song. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 17-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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I am very sorry for my tardiness in responding.
Thank you for your very kind words. Your words mean much to me.
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That's ok my friend. I am kind of slow these days! Have a blessed day! Teri
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I am thankful for you and your words.
Comment from Sarah Probe S.
If I had a six star rating available it'd have been yours, and I hope you win the free form Poetry contest, I was left captivated by your ( biographical ? ) story within your poem.
It is also not lacking of lovely descriptions and close attention to amazing details:
unbaked skin in a fitted bodice
Wide flowing skirt, topmost skirt layer
revealing yellow petticoat
that perfectly suited her complexion
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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If I had a six star rating available it'd have been yours, and I hope you win the free form Poetry contest, I was left captivated by your ( biographical ? ) story within your poem.
It is also not lacking of lovely descriptions and close attention to amazing details:
unbaked skin in a fitted bodice
Wide flowing skirt, topmost skirt layer
revealing yellow petticoat
that perfectly suited her complexion
Comment Written 16-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Your words mean much to me, but thanks for an almost six. Sorry, due to illness, I have fallen behind in responding.