The Empty Chair
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "The Empty Chair - Chap 1"The mysterious disappearance of a childhood friend
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Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Wow! you really fooled me. Payback is a bitch. You twisted things around and back again, and this is just the start. I am in thrall. More, I must have more. Have a good week writing! I'll read, Karen
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Wow! you really fooled me. Payback is a bitch. You twisted things around and back again, and this is just the start. I am in thrall. More, I must have more. Have a good week writing! I'll read, Karen
Comment Written 15-Oct-2024
Comment from Ric Myworld
Where are all those sixes when I need one most, darn it. These two are both hand's full and I'm sure there will never be a dull moment with either of them. Thanks for sharing.
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Where are all those sixes when I need one most, darn it. These two are both hand's full and I'm sure there will never be a dull moment with either of them. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2024
Comment from barbara.wilkey
There's jealousy and murder already in this story. Off to a great start. My problem is if Fiona is in a wheelchair how could she have killed Peyton, unless she can really walk. HMMM
Sharice nodded, "Yes, Peyton mentioned a vacation coming up. I wasn't aware of the exact dates." (nodded.)
Sharice entered the room and immediately spoke. "Detective Harris, I (spoke,)
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There's jealousy and murder already in this story. Off to a great start. My problem is if Fiona is in a wheelchair how could she have killed Peyton, unless she can really walk. HMMM
Sharice nodded, "Yes, Peyton mentioned a vacation coming up. I wasn't aware of the exact dates." (nodded.)
Sharice entered the room and immediately spoke. "Detective Harris, I (spoke,)
Comment Written 15-Oct-2024
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I haven't got a six left, although I thought I had.
You have started this story with a huge bang! I'm thinking Fiona is a bit of a psycho, and I'm wondering if she can get out of the wheelchair. Does she have a dual personality? I think this is going to be a frightner--not your usual type of story, but OMG, it's going to be a nail-biter. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Well done, my clever friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xx
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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I haven't got a six left, although I thought I had.
You have started this story with a huge bang! I'm thinking Fiona is a bit of a psycho, and I'm wondering if she can get out of the wheelchair. Does she have a dual personality? I think this is going to be a frightner--not your usual type of story, but OMG, it's going to be a nail-biter. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Well done, my clever friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xx
Comment Written 15-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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Here we go again! This is the second time I have responded and if it isn't Eleanor bringing you back to me, I don't know what it is. LOL Maybe she thinks she should be in this story too, but she needs a rest before the next go around. This one isn't my type of story but I hope I can pull it off.
Your virtual six makes me happy and I am thrilled that it means I am off to a good start. Just about to post a shortie - a feel good one.
Thanks as always.
Love ya, Carol
Comment from Jacob1395
I'm excited to see that you've started another book, Carol. This is an intriguing start already. Are you setting your book in London, UK? I only ask as you mentioned the metropolitan police which is the London based police force in the UK. If your character's are English, I just thought to let you know we don't say vacation in the UK but use the term holiday. Ignore me if I'm wrong though. An excellent start, I'm looking forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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I'm excited to see that you've started another book, Carol. This is an intriguing start already. Are you setting your book in London, UK? I only ask as you mentioned the metropolitan police which is the London based police force in the UK. If your character's are English, I just thought to let you know we don't say vacation in the UK but use the term holiday. Ignore me if I'm wrong though. An excellent start, I'm looking forward to reading more.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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No, I must stay in the good ole USA or I would really mess up worse than I do. The name Metropolitan Police is something I use in my stories - a name for the city folk. I did know that the English do it. Maybe I should change it from now on. Thanks for enjoying this one too!
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
Now that's an ending with a hook - and I have swallowed the bait. This promises to be an excellent read. The sister who rarely sees him except for the dinners - but has a key to his place? Hmm. I can seee why thre sisters don't get along! Looking forward to more.
Wendy
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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Now that's an ending with a hook - and I have swallowed the bait. This promises to be an excellent read. The sister who rarely sees him except for the dinners - but has a key to his place? Hmm. I can seee why thre sisters don't get along! Looking forward to more.
Wendy
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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Hurrah! I love it when you like the beginnings of my stories. It's a good judge that I am off on the right foot. And you always seem to catch the little clues - things others miss. Good on you! Thank you so much.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Clark2
Wow, what a great first chapter! We know the characters already, and we have a bit of a disappearance/murder mystery. Fiona's dreams give us great backstory and possible hints of what happened to Peyton. Well done!
Have a blessed week. Carol
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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Wow, what a great first chapter! We know the characters already, and we have a bit of a disappearance/murder mystery. Fiona's dreams give us great backstory and possible hints of what happened to Peyton. Well done!
Have a blessed week. Carol
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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Wow! Aren't you so kind and giving me a great boost! I was worried about starting another so soon and wondered if I could give this one the punch it needed. Awesome! I thank you so much.
Smiles, Carol
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You're very welcome. I was surprised you started this book so soon. But sometimes you just need to get an idea down while it's fresh. Blessings.
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I've got a lot to cram into a few weeks if I am going to start the new Eleanor one on Nov. 1st. Don't know that I can do it or not. We shall see.
Comment from DonandVicki
I'm glad that I caught your story from the first chapter, I was hooked after I read this particular line: "Then, swiftly, almost mechanically, the knife plunged forward. The sound was wet, a muffled gasp escaping from Peyton's lips as his hands flew to his chest, where the blade had buried itself." I will read on.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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I'm glad that I caught your story from the first chapter, I was hooked after I read this particular line: "Then, swiftly, almost mechanically, the knife plunged forward. The sound was wet, a muffled gasp escaping from Peyton's lips as his hands flew to his chest, where the blade had buried itself." I will read on.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Awesome! Thank you so much for enjoying the beginning of this chapter. It's a bit out of my norm but I am going to try and give it my best shot. I so appreciate your reading and reviewing.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from patcelaw
This is beautifully written and I very much enjoyed listening to it as it flowed very well when it is read aloud I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I also wish you a very wonderful week and may God bless you and keep you safe.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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This is beautifully written and I very much enjoyed listening to it as it flowed very well when it is read aloud I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I also wish you a very wonderful week and may God bless you and keep you safe.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Thanks Patricia for enjoying the story. It was a tough one to get started but I hope it holds your interest. Thank you .
Smiles, Carol
Comment from pome lover
well, I'd say there's a smidge of sibling rivalry going here. And you really left us hanging. Will have to tune in tomorrow, or whenever chapter two arrives. Very good lead in to the story.
By the way, did you mean to say "crackling fire" in the first sentence? However, if you said, a cracking good fire, it would sound veddy British. :)
One thing I didn't quite get, was when Sharice brought out the key, and the detective asked her about it, why she acted all flustered. Seems to me she should have known he'd ask that and had a ready answer.
anticipation!
Katharine
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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well, I'd say there's a smidge of sibling rivalry going here. And you really left us hanging. Will have to tune in tomorrow, or whenever chapter two arrives. Very good lead in to the story.
By the way, did you mean to say "crackling fire" in the first sentence? However, if you said, a cracking good fire, it would sound veddy British. :)
One thing I didn't quite get, was when Sharice brought out the key, and the detective asked her about it, why she acted all flustered. Seems to me she should have known he'd ask that and had a ready answer.
anticipation!
Katharine
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Thanks for the chuckle, Katherine. I like the sound of being veddy British! lol That's where half my ancesters came from so its all good. Sharice was flustered because she had said she barely knew Peyton, but then Fiona said they were childhood friends and here she even had a key to his house. She was caught in lies. She hadn't expected her sister to rat on her. I am thrilled you enjoyed the story. It's another one of those "out of the box" genre for me but I am going to give it a shot. Thanks so much.
smiles and hugs, Carol
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go for it and have fun!