Inspiration
How the river rapids represent the flow of new ideas.6 total reviews
Comment from jessizero
This was a lovely poem in just twenty syllables. I liked your descriptions and the fact that they were inspiring. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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This was a lovely poem in just twenty syllables. I liked your descriptions and the fact that they were inspiring. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Jessizero. Good luck to you, too. Your poems are also inspiring. I look forward to reading them.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
I like this but would have broken into more traditional stanzas like the following
Torrential
waters
of the river's rapids
plummet to the brain.
Inspiration.
just a suggestion works fine as it is
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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I like this but would have broken into more traditional stanzas like the following
Torrential
waters
of the river's rapids
plummet to the brain.
Inspiration.
just a suggestion works fine as it is
Comment Written 04-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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Thanks for your suggestion. It sounds quite romantic breaking it up into the more traditional stanzas.
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Thanks for your suggestion. It sounds quite romantic breaking it up into the more traditional stanzas.
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Just letting you know that I've taken your suggestion and changed the layout of the poem. Thanks for the advice.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
What a striking line! The idea of "torrential waters" pouring into the brain is so powerful. I can feel the inspiration that floods the mind when you describe this. For me you've captured the moment when ideas rush in like a wild river. Great job!
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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What a striking line! The idea of "torrential waters" pouring into the brain is so powerful. I can feel the inspiration that floods the mind when you describe this. For me you've captured the moment when ideas rush in like a wild river. Great job!
Comment Written 04-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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Thanks, Michael.
Comment from Begin Again
A few short syllables to explain the force of nature and how it relates to our thoughts as well. If we allow our minds to be filled with creativity we will be inspired to write with power and energy.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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A few short syllables to explain the force of nature and how it relates to our thoughts as well. If we allow our minds to be filled with creativity we will be inspired to write with power and energy.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 04-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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Thanks Carol. Your feedback is encouraging.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Firstly, all syllables present and correct - which is always nice!
Good strong imagery and a nice denouement. Perfect pairing of picture and words.
Best of luck to you
GMG
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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Hi there,
Firstly, all syllables present and correct - which is always nice!
Good strong imagery and a nice denouement. Perfect pairing of picture and words.
Best of luck to you
GMG
Comment Written 04-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much for your review. I love constructive feedback.
Comment from Sarah Probe S.
Very inspiring poetry, evoking the power of nature: i like your metaphorical and philosophical message within your 20 syllable verse,
Well done,
Sarah
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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Very inspiring poetry, evoking the power of nature: i like your metaphorical and philosophical message within your 20 syllable verse,
Well done,
Sarah
Comment Written 04-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much for your lovely words, Sarah.