Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I have suffered skin damage through the sun in the past and finding shade is not easy in some places, I enjoyed your clever loop Sarah, the birds know where to find an oasis, a fun post, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024

Hi Dolly,

Thank you so much for your interest in the loop style poem,
So did i, suffer from burning in the sun, i was stuck in a hot destination longer than planned and it was a nightmare,

Loop style is great for songs, thanks for your review,

Take care =D x

Comment from jim vecchio

Excellent

I'm sorry I just have five right now. This was a really great post, more notable than being just a "rhyming poem:' I could see myself in the scorching heat (before our present hurricane) and surrounded by the cries and songs of our birds,

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2024

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is an excellent rhyming loop form and I enjoyed very much listening to it. It flows very well when it is read aloud. I would suggest that maybe you go back and make your letters bold if that is an option for you it will make it a better Read for people who have vision problems. Patricia.

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024

Thank you Patricia for your review and your suggestions,
I really appreciate this,
Take care ;)
Sarah

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

Your poem flows so smoothly. It was so well written. I love the line about being disturbed by a "birds concert". Just shows the way you are feeling in one line. The imagery of thirst and longing creates such wonderful atmosphere. Powerful word choices. Your poem was a joy to read.

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024

Many thanks for the lovely review am glad you liked my poem. All my poetry is meant to enchant and mesmerise you.
Warm wishes.
Sarah