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Things aren't as they seem at the elderly home.

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Comment from Liz O'Neill
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I like your use of alliteration it creates a nice tone of humor: "Narcoleptic Nelly thought it meant the killer was a female. Narcissistic Nancy added that their nemesis must be a pretty gal." this is excellent I've got to read the rest of your chapters.

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
    Thanks, Liz Jumping out of my genre has been...a breath of fresh air!
Comment from Wendy G
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I wonder who else knows of their nighttime excursion as well as the writer of the note? Personally, I wondered if the earring was planted to put them off the track, and maybe this note is designed to do that as well. Interestting and good-humoured murder mystery.
Wendy

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
    We are moving at the speed of seventy year olds!
Comment from royowen
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Hattie discovers a note from an Ally saying she knew of the snooping around in Hattie's endeavour to find out who the killer is, who doesn't need money, maybe pretty, perhaps envious which is a motive, or is playing around with the investigation, great post Douglas, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
    Hmmmmm . . . .something is a foot!
Comment from BethShelby
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These ladies have found something to get them excited and make them feel they are doing something worthwhile. Is this going to be a continuing saga where once one mystery is solved, they move on to the next one like Murder she Wrote or Agatha Christi's novels?

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
    I really like the characters Beth, so we shall see!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
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And so an interesting twist comes to life, very Charlie Chan style. Do one of your sleuths have a # 1 daughter or son? Stay tuned - I will
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 Comment Written 15-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
    You da man!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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Aha! A lead for Hattie and the gang! So who's Phil? Not yet in your suspect list. And what's Hattie's next plan? I love that subtle interjection that one set of eyes was closed. Delightful comic murder mystery! Thanks for sharing, Doug. Debbie

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
    Pharmaceutical Phil Barnes. He is under Residents. Fun!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I am wondering if this message's sole purpose was to throw these ladies and how did this person know they were investigating. I was it was a secret. HMMM, I need to think about this. I love the story.

"She doesn't know, Nancy. That's why she said 'unidentified benefactor'", (probably 'unidentified benefactor',")

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
    Tee-hee!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
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Your continuation of Hattie's story is fantastic! I'm really enjoying how you build tension with the mysterious note. I especially liked the little details like the giggle and the ladies' amusing reactions to the earring. I thought it added a lot of charm to the story. Your characters are coming to life wonderfully.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
    Thank you!
Comment from Begin Again
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Not just a clue but a motive as well... though since the person is anonymous, he or she might not be telling the truth and wants to mislead the girls. But at least, it gives them some excitement and reason to keep going forward. Great chapter, Doug. Look forward to hearing what Hattie and Director Chapman have to share.
Smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
    Ha! We shall see!