2024 Gypsy's Prose
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "With a Heavy Heart".
10 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This halibun, With a Heavy Heart, has the proper formatting and notes the visitation of the dearly departed's family who come to express their undying devotion.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2024
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This halibun, With a Heavy Heart, has the proper formatting and notes the visitation of the dearly departed's family who come to express their undying devotion.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written, and I enjoyed it very much. I enjoyed the fact that you give us basic instructions on how to write this format, which is the best explanation I have ever received at the format. Have a good day and a very good week. God bless you. Patricia.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2024
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This is very well written, and I enjoyed it very much. I enjoyed the fact that you give us basic instructions on how to write this format, which is the best explanation I have ever received at the format. Have a good day and a very good week. God bless you. Patricia.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much for the excellent five stars review.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am a fan of Haibun, and this one certainly didn't disappoint. This is excellent. The description and the pace are wonderful. Thank you for sharing it with us.
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I am a fan of Haibun, and this one certainly didn't disappoint. This is excellent. The description and the pace are wonderful. Thank you for sharing it with us.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is a particularly stunning Haiburn, Gypsy, and haven't you used alliteration and metaphor to its full advantage! You skilfully capture that scene of mourning in succinct and moving verse. Well done! Debbie
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2024
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This is a particularly stunning Haiburn, Gypsy, and haven't you used alliteration and metaphor to its full advantage! You skilfully capture that scene of mourning in succinct and moving verse. Well done! Debbie
Comment Written 13-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent five stars review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
I rather like the haibun, but many write a more chatty a extensive prose part, when the ones I remember short, sharp, economic prose lines, with the haiku, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2024
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I rather like the haibun, but many write a more chatty a extensive prose part, when the ones I remember short, sharp, economic prose lines, with the haiku, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent five stars review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
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Most welcome
Comment from lyenochka
Loved your haibun! Your poetic prose led right up to the summary of the haiku at the end. It describes grieving at the heart and soul level.
Questions:
warp-and-waft (warp-and-weft?)
and wooed by hauling wind (howling?)
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Loved your haibun! Your poetic prose led right up to the summary of the haiku at the end. It describes grieving at the heart and soul level.
Questions:
warp-and-waft (warp-and-weft?)
and wooed by hauling wind (howling?)
Comment Written 12-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Thank you! I fixed those errors, I appreciate your help and kind review.
Love ❤️
Marival
Comment from RJ Heritage
It sounds that is person is looking at her own funeral in retrospect of the life she leaves behind. It is a sad and yet beautiful poem that filed my imagination with several interpretations. Thanks for posting.
RJ
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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It sounds that is person is looking at her own funeral in retrospect of the life she leaves behind. It is a sad and yet beautiful poem that filed my imagination with several interpretations. Thanks for posting.
RJ
Comment Written 12-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from shelley kaye
love the imagery of being wooed by the night wind...
a great haibun with well-written prose and very imagistic haiku
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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love the imagery of being wooed by the night wind...
a great haibun with well-written prose and very imagistic haiku
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
Comment Written 12-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from GWHARGIS
I love a haibun. You are incredibly gifted with your writing. I flew through my sixes like a drunken sail in Port. This deserves nothing less than a six. It was beautiful, moody, somewhat mysterious. Beautifully written. Gretchen
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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I love a haibun. You are incredibly gifted with your writing. I flew through my sixes like a drunken sail in Port. This deserves nothing less than a six. It was beautiful, moody, somewhat mysterious. Beautifully written. Gretchen
Comment Written 12-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from kiwisteveh
A slightly cryptic Haibun, adorned with some wonderful imagery and festooned with emotive words. I am struck in particular by 'warp-and-waft woes' (although I suspect it should be 'weft' rather than waft and also the 'hauling wind' at the end which cleverly suggests the wind's power and also leads us to the sound of howling.
A very beautiful, though mournful piece.
Steve
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2024
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A slightly cryptic Haibun, adorned with some wonderful imagery and festooned with emotive words. I am struck in particular by 'warp-and-waft woes' (although I suspect it should be 'weft' rather than waft and also the 'hauling wind' at the end which cleverly suggests the wind's power and also leads us to the sound of howling.
A very beautiful, though mournful piece.
Steve
Comment Written 12-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. The errors are fixed, Helen told me too. Thank you.
Gypsy