Loss
The heartache of bereavement ...36 total reviews
Comment from Spitfire
You've captured the agony of loss with images and word choice in lines one and three especially. Excellent use of alliteration with the 's' sound. Personification of nature heightens the sadness.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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You've captured the agony of loss with images and word choice in lines one and three especially. Excellent use of alliteration with the 's' sound. Personification of nature heightens the sadness.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much Shari. I greatly value your review and comments.
Wendy
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Hi, Wendy,
This is an especially poignant poem. The photo shows a grieving man; your words portray his sadness. "Death's cold," very nice description.
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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Hi, Wendy,
This is an especially poignant poem. The photo shows a grieving man; your words portray his sadness. "Death's cold," very nice description.
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 20-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much, Cindy. Your thoughtful words and comments are very supportive.
Wendy
Comment from Terry wrote
I relate to this setting and sentiment. Your words convey your feelings of darkness and cold emptiness. It has been 7 and 1/2 years for me, after 46 years of warmth and love. I wish you peace; I wish you warmth and love ahead.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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I relate to this setting and sentiment. Your words convey your feelings of darkness and cold emptiness. It has been 7 and 1/2 years for me, after 46 years of warmth and love. I wish you peace; I wish you warmth and love ahead.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much, Terry for this fine and thoughtful review. I hpe you are gradually moving back into the sunshine now. Many thanks too for the six stars - they are an honour and a delight.
Wendy
Comment from Shanbreen
This is such a sad poem. The man is full of grief (presumably lost a loved one). The last line keeps us guessing: Was he referring to the death of his loved one or is he thinking of ending his own life and get rid of his bereavement. Perhaps, I am overthinking. Well written. Best for the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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This is such a sad poem. The man is full of grief (presumably lost a loved one). The last line keeps us guessing: Was he referring to the death of his loved one or is he thinking of ending his own life and get rid of his bereavement. Perhaps, I am overthinking. Well written. Best for the contest.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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Thinking of the death of his loved one was what I had in mind, but the other is another quite possible layer. Thank you so much for your very thoughtful review.
Wendy
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Nice 's' alliteration , good syllables count and connection between lines. I would connect lines 1 and 2 grammatically to improve the flow, but it's not necessary. Beautiful presentation and imagery.
An exceptional entry for the
3 Line Poetry Contest.
shadows shroud his grief
(as) sun's warmth and light have left -
death's cold night surrounds
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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Nice 's' alliteration , good syllables count and connection between lines. I would connect lines 1 and 2 grammatically to improve the flow, but it's not necessary. Beautiful presentation and imagery.
An exceptional entry for the
3 Line Poetry Contest.
shadows shroud his grief
(as) sun's warmth and light have left -
death's cold night surrounds
Comment Written 20-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much, Gypsy, for the positive suggestion and a fine review. Both much appreciated.
Wendy
Comment from artisart4u
Being bereaved can take time psychologically, you have to let the good things outweigh the bad. In time this will happen.
Your picture and colors are very nice.
Congratulations on be Recognized and being an All Time Best.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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Being bereaved can take time psychologically, you have to let the good things outweigh the bad. In time this will happen.
Your picture and colors are very nice.
Congratulations on be Recognized and being an All Time Best.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much - for the great review, and the congratulations and the good wishes, all greatly appreciated. Special thanks too for the six stars, an honour and a delight.
Wendy
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Loss, has the proper formatting and finds the person who has lost his world and cannot see a path forward. Devoted couples often find the loss unsurmountable.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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This 5-7-5, Loss, has the proper formatting and finds the person who has lost his world and cannot see a path forward. Devoted couples often find the loss unsurmountable.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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Thank you Bill for this understanding review. Appreciated.
Wendy
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Wendy,
I think you captured the sense of grief and loneliness that this poor man is experiencing perfectly. Too many of us as we age will come to experience these unwanted feelings. Well done gal. Good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
Tom
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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Hello Wendy,
I think you captured the sense of grief and loneliness that this poor man is experiencing perfectly. Too many of us as we age will come to experience these unwanted feelings. Well done gal. Good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
Tom
Comment Written 20-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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Yes, these feelings are not wanted, and sadly, many can relate to this painful and ongoing process of trying to come to terms with such loss. Thank you very much for reviewing. I value it each time.
Wendy
Comment from gansach
This is a beautiful entry for the 3 line poetry competition. The photo is very expressive and complements your words perfectly. And your words are poignant and descriptive of how it feels to lose a loved one. Well done!
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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This is a beautiful entry for the 3 line poetry competition. The photo is very expressive and complements your words perfectly. And your words are poignant and descriptive of how it feels to lose a loved one. Well done!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much for this lovely review. Very positive comments, and I appreciate your time and words.
Wendy
Comment from nancyjam
This is a heartbreaking poem where each line expresses the grief of
loss. A beautiful entry in the 3 line contest. Each toughing line affects the reader. Good luck in the contest. Nancy
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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This is a heartbreaking poem where each line expresses the grief of
loss. A beautiful entry in the 3 line contest. Each toughing line affects the reader. Good luck in the contest. Nancy
Comment Written 19-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much for this very caring and positive review, Nancy. I also appreciate your good wishes.
Wendy
