2024 Gypsy's Prose
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "~ Sexy Sadie ~".
10 total reviews
Comment from Neonewman
This is a very interesting style, and I love it! Sadie is a character in my book as well, lol. Live and let live, what a great sentiment. I enjoyed the storyline.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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This is a very interesting style, and I love it! Sadie is a character in my book as well, lol. Live and let live, what a great sentiment. I enjoyed the storyline.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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Thank you very much, Steve.
gypsy hugs 😊
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Always, my friend.
Comment from Thesis
I enjoy reading your poems. They flow well, are not forced, and tell a good story. I like this form of writing. You do it well. I will keep reading. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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I enjoy reading your poems. They flow well, are not forced, and tell a good story. I like this form of writing. You do it well. I will keep reading. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Thank you very much, Thesis,
I appreciate your exceptional five-star review and words.
Gypsy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for brining Sexy Sadie to life for us. Using the song title was pure genius. You've done a great job with this Haibun. I enjoyed reading. I am out of sixes, or I would surely place on this post.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Thank you for brining Sexy Sadie to life for us. Using the song title was pure genius. You've done a great job with this Haibun. I enjoyed reading. I am out of sixes, or I would surely place on this post.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem. Coming from you, your feedback means a lot to me. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was so cool, Gypsy. Taking song titles and merging them to make a hell of a story. Sadie came to life in this. I could see her and hear her, her voice merging with the sounds of city life. The part about the grocer erasing her poeticmusings with the hose made it all that more real. This was great. Really enjoying your prose. Gretchen
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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This was so cool, Gypsy. Taking song titles and merging them to make a hell of a story. Sadie came to life in this. I could see her and hear her, her voice merging with the sounds of city life. The part about the grocer erasing her poeticmusings with the hose made it all that more real. This was great. Really enjoying your prose. Gretchen
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem. Coming from you, your feedback means a lot to me. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy
Comment from RJ Heritage
Their are many "Sexy Sadies" in our world who seemed to have had it all, but then lost it along the way. This to me is a reflection on how life can change for the worse in what seems like moments, but really happens over time. Very well written.
RJ
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Their are many "Sexy Sadies" in our world who seemed to have had it all, but then lost it along the way. This to me is a reflection on how life can change for the worse in what seems like moments, but really happens over time. Very well written.
RJ
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Thank you very much, RJ.
GYpsy
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You are welcome
RJ
Comment from BOO ghost
I must say, writing the dew off my brow, you one hecka writing machine! BOO trying to keep up, dragging my rusty chains around... You always provide author notes. Time changes everything. She's not a sexpot nor longer. It's what you get if you only marry for looks. What's left? I know what it's like to be homeless. Allowing illegal immigrants in creates more homeless. It's okay as long as they vote. This is another dandy! BOO!
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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I must say, writing the dew off my brow, you one hecka writing machine! BOO trying to keep up, dragging my rusty chains around... You always provide author notes. Time changes everything. She's not a sexpot nor longer. It's what you get if you only marry for looks. What's left? I know what it's like to be homeless. Allowing illegal immigrants in creates more homeless. It's okay as long as they vote. This is another dandy! BOO!
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Powerfully expressed and illustrated. I like the allusion to The Beatles with Sexy Sadie. The descriptive detail is also very well done. But my favourite element is the haiku which is so evocative at the end. You don't actually need the apostrophe with neath but, in any event, it should be a single one. Well done, Gypsy. Debbie
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Powerfully expressed and illustrated. I like the allusion to The Beatles with Sexy Sadie. The descriptive detail is also very well done. But my favourite element is the haiku which is so evocative at the end. You don't actually need the apostrophe with neath but, in any event, it should be a single one. Well done, Gypsy. Debbie
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Debbie, I corrected. neath
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from royowen
I think homeless is found even in prosperous advanced nations, I remember talking to an ex accountant who'd lost his family, he actually chose to live under a tree, he said it was preferable to living in a struggling, compassionless world, I don't understand really, but I feel for them, I have walked among, just unkempt, but civilised people who've dropped the ball, beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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I think homeless is found even in prosperous advanced nations, I remember talking to an ex accountant who'd lost his family, he actually chose to live under a tree, he said it was preferable to living in a struggling, compassionless world, I don't understand really, but I feel for them, I have walked among, just unkempt, but civilised people who've dropped the ball, beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Roy
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A pleasure
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Gypsy, Your poem is filled with vivid imagery. Growing up in NYC, I have seen my share of homeless people, including women. One was named Annie. She sold newspaper from a chair and wooden soda carton. She slept under plastic, woolen blankets, and newspapers, no matter how cold the day. The other lady we called her Gabby because she just kept talking, and talking, and telling her story. She moved around a lot. We never knew where she lived or didn't live. She always appeared to be unbathed and in the same clothes.
Of note:
Her job is to collect cans, drink cheap wine, and warn the world, "The end is near, be right with Jesus."
(The above is also a scene that I have seen many times. Perhaps, they know something that the rest of us do not???)
Excellent photo choice. Well done. Xo. M
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Hi Gypsy, Your poem is filled with vivid imagery. Growing up in NYC, I have seen my share of homeless people, including women. One was named Annie. She sold newspaper from a chair and wooden soda carton. She slept under plastic, woolen blankets, and newspapers, no matter how cold the day. The other lady we called her Gabby because she just kept talking, and talking, and telling her story. She moved around a lot. We never knew where she lived or didn't live. She always appeared to be unbathed and in the same clothes.
Of note:
Her job is to collect cans, drink cheap wine, and warn the world, "The end is near, be right with Jesus."
(The above is also a scene that I have seen many times. Perhaps, they know something that the rest of us do not???)
Excellent photo choice. Well done. Xo. M
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Thank you very much, M, I appreciate your great review and feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
This is quite the story. I didn't know these Beatles songs - and I thought I knew their well known ones. Her story is sad and probably is similar to many who are homeless. We really need better ways to help the homeless. The problem out here is that some of them are not only mentally ill and on drugs, but they also are armed. They won't go to the shelters because the shelters say they can't bring their guns with them!
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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This is quite the story. I didn't know these Beatles songs - and I thought I knew their well known ones. Her story is sad and probably is similar to many who are homeless. We really need better ways to help the homeless. The problem out here is that some of them are not only mentally ill and on drugs, but they also are armed. They won't go to the shelters because the shelters say they can't bring their guns with them!
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Hello, Big Sister. When I worked with homeless people many didn't want to stay in the shelter because they were affraid of getting mugged and lose their ID and SS cards, without them it was imposible to get a job, but that was in 1990s. I didn't know about the guns, that is very dangerous. People with mental illness and drug abuse are not supposed to have guns, it's against the law. I watch a program about people who live in los Angeles skid row have horrible childhoods. Thank you very much!! have a wonderful weekend.
love
marival