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Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Cavalry in Straw Hats (Rachelle)"Two very real women in not so real situation.
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Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
This two-person point of view is truly excellent. I am thrilled for you both that you are blending so well. I like it of course.My brain is tired. I just wrote "The Elevator" for a contest. It is suitably snarky. I cracked myself up with this one. Send me good wishes please for my move on the 20th. I will be going to Houston to get my stuff out of storage 25+ years of memories. Half will be donated, You can't put a 3 bedroom house in a one bedroom apartment. It will be tough, but then it will be over. I can finish nesting and get on building my new life. I will be happy here. My sister's seem to adore me. What good taste they have! :-) Karen
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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This two-person point of view is truly excellent. I am thrilled for you both that you are blending so well. I like it of course.My brain is tired. I just wrote "The Elevator" for a contest. It is suitably snarky. I cracked myself up with this one. Send me good wishes please for my move on the 20th. I will be going to Houston to get my stuff out of storage 25+ years of memories. Half will be donated, You can't put a 3 bedroom house in a one bedroom apartment. It will be tough, but then it will be over. I can finish nesting and get on building my new life. I will be happy here. My sister's seem to adore me. What good taste they have! :-) Karen
Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Thanks.
Comment from Sanku
This is a very interesting project both of you have taken up .I am sure I am going to enjoy this thoroughly I read Gretchen's .Then I went back to prologue and started again...
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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This is a very interesting project both of you have taken up .I am sure I am going to enjoy this thoroughly I read Gretchen's .Then I went back to prologue and started again...
Comment Written 02-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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Ohh, Sanku!! THANK YOU for doing that!! And thanks for this really nice review, as well! We will LOVE having you along for this ride. Xoxo
Comment from Bill Schott
This is so much fun, in the story, of course. The reality would be less thrilling and more dentist-chair enjoyable as the smoking wreck is abandoned in favor of a cramped buggy ride to the middle of incommunicado country.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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This is so much fun, in the story, of course. The reality would be less thrilling and more dentist-chair enjoyable as the smoking wreck is abandoned in favor of a cramped buggy ride to the middle of incommunicado country.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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Haha! You said THAT right!! Three cheers for the imaginative version!!!
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written. Your sentence structure and your paragraphing is outstanding. I wish you the very best with all of your writing and I wish you a very good day. May God bless your week and your month. Patricia.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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This is very well written. Your sentence structure and your paragraphing is outstanding. I wish you the very best with all of your writing and I wish you a very good day. May God bless your week and your month. Patricia.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Thanks! I appreciate this helpful feedback very much! Xo
Comment from Jim Wile
Oh, Rachelle, you have such a way with words and fine comedic timing. I think you could do standup comedy. I loved your similes, such as:
- like a hillbilly pig roast gone wrong
- a strangled, operatic wheeze
- like a child whose cat's just been run over by a dump truck
And this is just poetic:
They're the looks of omniscience, laced with trepidation, between writers who understand the terrifying symbolism and the kind of foreshadowing present in only the most memorable of adventure tales.
What a fine, funny story this is and could only be told by great friends. - Jim
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Oh, Rachelle, you have such a way with words and fine comedic timing. I think you could do standup comedy. I loved your similes, such as:
- like a hillbilly pig roast gone wrong
- a strangled, operatic wheeze
- like a child whose cat's just been run over by a dump truck
And this is just poetic:
They're the looks of omniscience, laced with trepidation, between writers who understand the terrifying symbolism and the kind of foreshadowing present in only the most memorable of adventure tales.
What a fine, funny story this is and could only be told by great friends. - Jim
Comment Written 01-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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You can't know how much this warm and affirming review means, Jim. Thank you! Xoxo
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Rachelle,
I have to say, your account of the whole situation is pretty doggone funny. I can't imagine what those Amish men must be thinking to have the Leopard Queen descend upon them. Talk about a clash of cultures. I'm loving this story that the two of you are telling. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Hello Rachelle,
I have to say, your account of the whole situation is pretty doggone funny. I can't imagine what those Amish men must be thinking to have the Leopard Queen descend upon them. Talk about a clash of cultures. I'm loving this story that the two of you are telling. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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These words feel like a warm, wonderful hug. Thank you, Tom, for always being so generous to me. Xo
Comment from Daylily
Ah yes, the best-laid plans are herein described with excellence via such a prime example as this jovial catastrophic record of your travel.
-- roils of smoke out from beneath the dashboard like a hillbilly pig roast gone wrong -- The sensory senses have to be tickled pink over shiny descriptive gems like this. Your distinctive sharing of your visual-self is topnotch, Rachelle. If only you had taken some selfies....
XOXO Lily
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Ah yes, the best-laid plans are herein described with excellence via such a prime example as this jovial catastrophic record of your travel.
-- roils of smoke out from beneath the dashboard like a hillbilly pig roast gone wrong -- The sensory senses have to be tickled pink over shiny descriptive gems like this. Your distinctive sharing of your visual-self is topnotch, Rachelle. If only you had taken some selfies....
XOXO Lily
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Hahaha. Well, it's not over yet, Lily, so you never know!!! Thanks for your always-gracious way. Xoxo
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PS - Have you also checked out GW Hargis's account of this? We're doing it as a tag-team novel and both give our differing accounts of the same scenario. She's hilarious, and I know you would love her take on it all. xoxo
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
LMAO
I'm loving the back and forth chapters between you and Gretchen. You are both so funny and such a wonderful story tellers. The Amish troup reminded me of the movie, Witness. LoL
Well done, Rachelle (*<>*)
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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LMAO
I'm loving the back and forth chapters between you and Gretchen. You are both so funny and such a wonderful story tellers. The Amish troup reminded me of the movie, Witness. LoL
Well done, Rachelle (*<>*)
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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I remember that movie...and I loved it!!
Thanks for this encouraging review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I am glad you both were able to cadge a lift, even if it is horse power! You made me smile and I am wondering what Gretchen is thinking about this road trip? Perhaps I should look her up right now. A fun and entertaining story Rachelle, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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I am glad you both were able to cadge a lift, even if it is horse power! You made me smile and I am wondering what Gretchen is thinking about this road trip? Perhaps I should look her up right now. A fun and entertaining story Rachelle, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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I bet you weren't disappointed, Dolly! That Girl is a MASTERFUL storyteller!!
Thanks for this very nice review!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Oh, my this is good. I enjoyed reading Gretchen's version too. You both are great at complimenting each other's style. I am really enjoying reading this. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Oh, my this is good. I enjoyed reading Gretchen's version too. You both are great at complimenting each other's style. I am really enjoying reading this. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Barbara! And we are having so much fun writing it!!!