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Comment from Teri7
Sarah, This is a very lovely and very well written Nonet poem you have penned about Cleopatra. You used very good descriptive words that fit her beauty so well. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2024
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Sarah, This is a very lovely and very well written Nonet poem you have penned about Cleopatra. You used very good descriptive words that fit her beauty so well. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 25-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2024
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thanks a million for your review of appreciation and for your kind words,
Bless You,
Sarah
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thanks a million for your review of appreciation and for your kind words,
Bless You,
Sarah
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is a really magical nonet, Sarah. The words speak of a beauty, a lady who a goddess. I can get an idea of how your children's book will look and sound like. This is lovely. Well done and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2024
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That is a really magical nonet, Sarah. The words speak of a beauty, a lady who a goddess. I can get an idea of how your children's book will look and sound like. This is lovely. Well done and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 25-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2024
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thank You Sandra for your encouraging words of support, its thanks to appreciative persons like You that i am this motivated to write.
many thanks.
Sarah
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thank You Sandra for your encouraging words of support, its thanks to appreciative persons like You that i am this motivated to write.
many thanks.
Sarah
Comment from ESOSTINE
Your beautifully penned Nonet poem, graphically presented the image and personality of Cleopatra. It is written to creates an enduring picture of Cleopatra in the minds of your readers. Well done, dear. Good luck in the contest.
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Your beautifully penned Nonet poem, graphically presented the image and personality of Cleopatra. It is written to creates an enduring picture of Cleopatra in the minds of your readers. Well done, dear. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2024
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Sarah,
What a beautiful poem. This is a great Nonet poem and if flows nicely to completion. There is a word I don't understand in here: Rubis? What is it?
Great job and good luck in your contest.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2024
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Sarah,
What a beautiful poem. This is a great Nonet poem and if flows nicely to completion. There is a word I don't understand in here: Rubis? What is it?
Great job and good luck in your contest.
Cecilia
Comment Written 16-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2024
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thanks Cecilia, for Your lovely review, Rubis is a red precious stone compared to the lips colour of the royalty described in my Nonet poem,
Many thanks,
Kind regards,
Sarah
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thanks Cecilia, for Your lovely review, Rubis is a red precious stone compared to the lips colour of the royalty described in my Nonet poem,
Many thanks,
Kind regards,
Sarah
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You're welcome.
Cecilia
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Sarah,
You are welcome and thank you for educating me on the Rubis.
Have a great day.
Cecilia
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Right back at you girl.
Cecilia
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🤣 nothing personal Cecilia, this is also an ancestral fetish stone of the kings and queens, the verse was metaphorical,
Many thanks,
Kind regards,
Sarah
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Sarah,
Thank you for the explanation. I appreciate it.
Cecilia
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You're welcome.
Cecilia
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Sarah,
This is a well written nonet that describe Cleopatra well. It matches the beautiful artwork that illustrates your words.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a wonderful day.
Joan
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Hi Sarah,
This is a well written nonet that describe Cleopatra well. It matches the beautiful artwork that illustrates your words.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a wonderful day.
Joan
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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thanks a million Joan,
i hope i win the contest too :)
many thanks for your supportive words of encouragement
Sarah
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You are most kindly welcome, Sarah.
Joan
Comment from tempeste
Ciao and welcome to fanstory!
I saw the film and Elizabeth Taylor was stunning ( Joan Collins nearly got the part ). Even Richard Burton was perfect as Marc' Antonio.
I love how you describe her beauty referring to precious gems.
Her sweet voice to a mandolino and her scent to Oud & Spice
My favorite lines that describe her beauty, strength and powerful character :
she's a goddess
lioness
PS. Just one suggestion, you need to use a bigger font because many elderly members will find it hard to see/read your lovely poetry.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Ciao and welcome to fanstory!
I saw the film and Elizabeth Taylor was stunning ( Joan Collins nearly got the part ). Even Richard Burton was perfect as Marc' Antonio.
I love how you describe her beauty referring to precious gems.
Her sweet voice to a mandolino and her scent to Oud & Spice
My favorite lines that describe her beauty, strength and powerful character :
she's a goddess
lioness
PS. Just one suggestion, you need to use a bigger font because many elderly members will find it hard to see/read your lovely poetry.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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thanks a million for your six star review, i am glad you love the poem: yes i love Elizabeth Taylor, i will make an effort with regards to your remark about the bigger font request ;) take care.
warm regards,
Sarah
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Nicely done! The way you weave together descriptions of voice, lips, scent and more create a beautiful portrait. The choice of words like "lioness" and "goddess" adds a layer of depth to the portrayal. Great job on crafting such a unique poem!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Nicely done! The way you weave together descriptions of voice, lips, scent and more create a beautiful portrait. The choice of words like "lioness" and "goddess" adds a layer of depth to the portrayal. Great job on crafting such a unique poem!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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thank you so much Michael for your sensible review and accurate understanding of the art of describing poetically the definition of divine beauty, i shall read your poems too later on, i am also interested in your views and artistic skills
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine nonet for the contest and you describe Cleopatra who was also clever and cunning too, I enjoyed your post. I have one suggestion for you. If you transpose lines six and seven you make a better shape for your nonet. Love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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A fine nonet for the contest and you describe Cleopatra who was also clever and cunning too, I enjoyed your post. I have one suggestion for you. If you transpose lines six and seven you make a better shape for your nonet. Love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Dear Dolly,
Thanks for the compliment,
However i have tried to transpose line 6 and line 7 and i couldn?t get a 4-3-2-1 result in number of syllables necessary for the Nonet style: a lioness is 4 and a goddess is 3 ... it was very difficult to make it all rhyme though,
Thanks a million for all your interest in the poems,
Take care Dolly,
Warm wishes,
Sarah
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How about:
Her sweet voice a sound of mandolins,
Her precious lips ranks of rubis,
Her scent of Oud and spices,
Rare her eyes of onyx,
Soft her golden skin,
she's a goddess
lioness
that is
her.
I wish you luck with the contest x x x
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Many thanks Dolly, for the helpful genius suggestion, i have done as you said, and thanks a million again for your interest in my poems, it?s thanks to lovely readers like you that i feel this motivated to write daily. God bless You. Have a nice Sunday !;)x!
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The judges always look at the shape with a nonet as well as the content, I wish you luck with it, love Dolly x
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Thank you Dolly, for all your precious advices and for your virtual support, not to mention you?re so adorable, i feel so lucky to interact with you on fanstory
I can?t thank you enough...
Warmest wishes,
Sarah