Dr. Howler's Nightmares
Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "Shafted"A collection of most unusual bedtime stories
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Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well written, my grown-uparoo.
Nice story.
I thought for a minute it was going to be another Twin Towers elevator story.
Good luck in the contest - if it is one.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Well written, my grown-uparoo.
Nice story.
I thought for a minute it was going to be another Twin Towers elevator story.
Good luck in the contest - if it is one.
Comment Written 13-May-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is excellent! I was right with you in that elevator and, from your description, it really felt as though you'd been there before. Your story is just the right length to keep that suspense maintained, is well structured with perfect beginning and ending. It also impressively breaks up the narrative with dialogue to keep the reader's interest high and appreciate more vividly he nightmare situation. I didn't quite understand the sense of: A movement made his blood run cold (as if sieved) over an iceberg... A little too complex for me. But this is an enjoyable story that kept me hook until the satisfying conclusion. Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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This is excellent! I was right with you in that elevator and, from your description, it really felt as though you'd been there before. Your story is just the right length to keep that suspense maintained, is well structured with perfect beginning and ending. It also impressively breaks up the narrative with dialogue to keep the reader's interest high and appreciate more vividly he nightmare situation. I didn't quite understand the sense of: A movement made his blood run cold (as if sieved) over an iceberg... A little too complex for me. But this is an enjoyable story that kept me hook until the satisfying conclusion. Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 11-May-2024
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Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the Trapped writing prompt. This was like watching an episode of the old Twilight Zone show or one of those midnight horror shows with weird hosts and I mean that in a good way because I love watching both. Nicely done. Good luck.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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An excellent entry for the Trapped writing prompt. This was like watching an episode of the old Twilight Zone show or one of those midnight horror shows with weird hosts and I mean that in a good way because I love watching both. Nicely done. Good luck.
Comment Written 10-May-2024
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
The reader is fascinating their seat belt: "A sense of dread crept over George. He reached for his smartphone. The implement contained a deceased battery." there's already been enough tension because they're in an elevator that suspended now the sensory descriptions are raising the tension. What a surprise ending Good job.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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The reader is fascinating their seat belt: "A sense of dread crept over George. He reached for his smartphone. The implement contained a deceased battery." there's already been enough tension because they're in an elevator that suspended now the sensory descriptions are raising the tension. What a surprise ending Good job.
Comment Written 10-May-2024
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Comment from Julie Helms
You have written a total creepfest. Get stuck in an elevator for an unknown period of time is a nightmare all its own. Then the lights go out. Nightmare. Then something's in there with you. Triple-header nightmare!
A typo:
Artic Circle
(Arctic Circle)
Well-executed entry for the challenge! (See what I did there?)
:-)
Julie
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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You have written a total creepfest. Get stuck in an elevator for an unknown period of time is a nightmare all its own. Then the lights go out. Nightmare. Then something's in there with you. Triple-header nightmare!
A typo:
Artic Circle
(Arctic Circle)
Well-executed entry for the challenge! (See what I did there?)
:-)
Julie
Comment Written 10-May-2024
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Comment from Begin Again
No way is this a bedtime story for a child or anyone for that matter. I don't see how this would be calming or allow someone to drift off to a peaceful sleep. Trapped in that elevator was more than I cared to read . Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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No way is this a bedtime story for a child or anyone for that matter. I don't see how this would be calming or allow someone to drift off to a peaceful sleep. Trapped in that elevator was more than I cared to read . Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 10-May-2024
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Comment from Douglas Goff
Well done:
"That's a wrap!" The Director screamed into his megaphone.
Touché. I usually see the twists but I must be off my game cause this one got me.
Nice work, author!
D
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Well done:
"That's a wrap!" The Director screamed into his megaphone.
Touché. I usually see the twists but I must be off my game cause this one got me.
Nice work, author!
D
Comment Written 10-May-2024
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Comment from jim vecchio
Dr. Howler, have you ever watched "Nightmare Theater"? Just wondered. I took the same contest and put my story in the same city. It'll be interesting to see how it all comes out. Best wishes!
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Dr. Howler, have you ever watched "Nightmare Theater"? Just wondered. I took the same contest and put my story in the same city. It'll be interesting to see how it all comes out. Best wishes!
Comment Written 10-May-2024
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Thank you for writing!
Comment from Ric Myworld
I'm not the type to have ever been afraid of much or almost anything for that matter. But I've always had a curiousness to the supernatural or the confines of an elevator after having fell three floors in one before safety arms clammed down and brought it to a sudden stop. I was relieved at the ending line, '"That's a wrap!" The Director screamed into his megaphone.'
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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I'm not the type to have ever been afraid of much or almost anything for that matter. But I've always had a curiousness to the supernatural or the confines of an elevator after having fell three floors in one before safety arms clammed down and brought it to a sudden stop. I was relieved at the ending line, '"That's a wrap!" The Director screamed into his megaphone.'
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 10-May-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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