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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A beautiful verse of remembrance! I love the symbolism of the forget-me-not and the way the gentle breeze dusts of those man-made reminders, settling on and returning to the soil in this exquisite display. Well done, Gypsy. Debbie
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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A beautiful verse of remembrance! I love the symbolism of the forget-me-not and the way the gentle breeze dusts of those man-made reminders, settling on and returning to the soil in this exquisite display. Well done, Gypsy. Debbie
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my poem.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Plastic flowers do not belong on graves. To me they are a fake symbol. I guess I'm being judgmental, and God doesn't like that. Your poem is very emotional, and the images are perfect. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Plastic flowers do not belong on graves. To me they are a fake symbol. I guess I'm being judgmental, and God doesn't like that. Your poem is very emotional, and the images are perfect. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Debra White
Hello Gypsy,
The imagery in your tanka is vivid.
I really like the personification of the breeze and I recognise the significance of the combination of lost memories and forget me not flowers.
Beautifully written.
Best wishes, Debra :)
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Hello Gypsy,
The imagery in your tanka is vivid.
I really like the personification of the breeze and I recognise the significance of the combination of lost memories and forget me not flowers.
Beautifully written.
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment Written 22-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from tfawcus
This really appealed to me. The idea of the dust being wafted from the plastic flowers, a lip service memory if ever there is one, onto the living flower makes a compelling image - especially with the forget-me-not's association with love and fidelity.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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This really appealed to me. The idea of the dust being wafted from the plastic flowers, a lip service memory if ever there is one, onto the living flower makes a compelling image - especially with the forget-me-not's association with love and fidelity.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Tony,
Thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
I like the contrast of the plastic flowers against the "fresh foreget-me-nots" - it shows how the dust of old memories can settle on the past but hope comes with the calm breeze and the real flowers.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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I like the contrast of the plastic flowers against the "fresh foreget-me-nots" - it shows how the dust of old memories can settle on the past but hope comes with the calm breeze and the real flowers.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you, big sister. May you have a wonderful week.
Love
Marival
Comment from Teri7
Gypsy, This is a very beautiful and very well written poem. You used great descriptive words and very lovely imagery. Believe it or not, My BFF gave me some forget me not seeds to plant. I love that plant. Thanks for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Gypsy, This is a very beautiful and very well written poem. You used great descriptive words and very lovely imagery. Believe it or not, My BFF gave me some forget me not seeds to plant. I love that plant. Thanks for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
i think forget-me-nots should be hyphenate and plural... but it could be just me lol
a great graveside tanka
smooth flow and good imagery
i like the "breath of a calm breeze"
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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i think forget-me-nots should be hyphenate and plural... but it could be just me lol
a great graveside tanka
smooth flow and good imagery
i like the "breath of a calm breeze"
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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I fixed it, thank you, Shelley.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from kahpot
Beautifully written, I like how your tanka goes from the plastic flowers and then transfers to the forget me nots, our memories of our loved ones will always remain, very well written****kahpot
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Beautifully written, I like how your tanka goes from the plastic flowers and then transfers to the forget me nots, our memories of our loved ones will always remain, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from bonespur
I really liked the way you put a not so grim spin on death. Instead you focused on what's going on around it we sometimes forget the authority mother nature has I liked it. Nice job
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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I really liked the way you put a not so grim spin on death. Instead you focused on what's going on around it we sometimes forget the authority mother nature has I liked it. Nice job
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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I wonder why you gave me 3 stars but your review was positive with no mention of improvement
Thank you
Comment from royowen
That's the trouble with plastic flowers, they have no life, and once picked natural flowers have the appearance of but quickly fade and die, like the temporary tent we wear, beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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That's the trouble with plastic flowers, they have no life, and once picked natural flowers have the appearance of but quickly fade and die, like the temporary tent we wear, beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
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Most welcome