Living On The Edge
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Living On The Edge - Chap 2"The blending of good and evil.
19 total reviews
Comment from Carol Clark2
Another great chapter! You're developing your characters nicely. There's lots of mystery, and hints of revenge coming soon. Good dialogue between the brothers, filling in some backstory for the readers. Well done! Hugs! Carol
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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Another great chapter! You're developing your characters nicely. There's lots of mystery, and hints of revenge coming soon. Good dialogue between the brothers, filling in some backstory for the readers. Well done! Hugs! Carol
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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Thank you...I always like to flush out my characters and gt to know them. This time frame is pushing those boundaries for me. Glad you found the book enjoyable so far. It does get shorter in a few chapters... too much at one time.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Right, I'm guessing Richard is the one who 'got rid of' the star witness. I wonder what else he is responsible for. They obviously have a long term hatred of each other, so would Richard be the one who raped and murdered the woman? I have a few chapters to check that answer out. This is excellent writing, my dear friend. Love you lots. Sandra xx
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Right, I'm guessing Richard is the one who 'got rid of' the star witness. I wonder what else he is responsible for. They obviously have a long term hatred of each other, so would Richard be the one who raped and murdered the woman? I have a few chapters to check that answer out. This is excellent writing, my dear friend. Love you lots. Sandra xx
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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There's that smiling face again. Thank you for reading another chapter. There's a lot going on in this little crime story of mine so get ready. Thank you as always.
Lots of smiles and hugs and love, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
Troy has an up hill battle to fight. He has his brother who seems to hate him. He has Alyssa who wanted him to have life in prison, and he has to watch his back. How is he ever going to prove his innocence? Ican't wait to see what happens.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Troy has an up hill battle to fight. He has his brother who seems to hate him. He has Alyssa who wanted him to have life in prison, and he has to watch his back. How is he ever going to prove his innocence? Ican't wait to see what happens.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Hello, Lorraine...
And the wheels turn...Evil lurks everywhere it seems. People assuming the facts, but never really knowing.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Karen Cherry
Still very excellent , if you want to vary your picture I can send you some through email, let me know. I troll and collect. It occupies my mind, and cleanses me between stories. Good work. Karen
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Still very excellent , if you want to vary your picture I can send you some through email, let me know. I troll and collect. It occupies my mind, and cleanses me between stories. Good work. Karen
Comment Written 05-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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For this bookk of the month contest I think I will keep this one, but when I write shorter ones I might do that. I use to do it a lot. Thanks for offering.
I appreciate your continuing to follow the story. I hope you will enjoy it. Smiles, Carol
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Whenever you want , tell me what you need, I bet I have a few things that will fit. Karen
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. I see the conflict between the two brothers you are setting up. I do not see any room for improvement. Hope you have a blessed day. And I believe your writing is publishable..
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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This is another excellent chapter. I see the conflict between the two brothers you are setting up. I do not see any room for improvement. Hope you have a blessed day. And I believe your writing is publishable..
Comment Written 05-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much. Since I've been back at FS I have had more people telling me to publish. I'd love to if I could get myself to take the leap. Enjoy!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ulla
Hi Carol, Troy's big brother doesn't sound like a nice person. Could he be the rapist, I wonder. This story is great, and moving on so very fast. It's also well written.Hugs, Ulla xxx
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Hi Carol, Troy's big brother doesn't sound like a nice person. Could he be the rapist, I wonder. This story is great, and moving on so very fast. It's also well written.Hugs, Ulla xxx
Comment Written 05-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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I don't know if he could be the rapist, but I do know he's not a nice guy. I appreciate your time, reading and reviewing.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I think I must have missed chapter 1, so I will look for it. Troy sounds bitter which he would be if he was innocent, but could his brother have something to do with framing him? Alyssa will never believe he is innocent until something unexpected happens. Good story,
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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I think I must have missed chapter 1, so I will look for it. Troy sounds bitter which he would be if he was innocent, but could his brother have something to do with framing him? Alyssa will never believe he is innocent until something unexpected happens. Good story,
Comment Written 05-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Oh yes, Carol. You do need to read the first chapter or somethings might not be clear to you as we go on. the brothers definitely have a dislike for each other. Thanks so much for the kind review. Look forward to seeing what you think as the story unfolds.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I'm wondering if Troy's big brother, Richard isn't the rapist. Anyway, I am enjoying reading this.
Click â?" the conversation ended. (Evil Eddie again.)
Alyssa lowered her voice and sat down. (omit 'down')
Her voice was steadier, more committed to what she had to say. (say,)
He smiled, "Well, well, & Richard stood, wiped his mouth, and smiled, " (smiled.)
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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I'm wondering if Troy's big brother, Richard isn't the rapist. Anyway, I am enjoying reading this.
Click â?" the conversation ended. (Evil Eddie again.)
Alyssa lowered her voice and sat down. (omit 'down')
Her voice was steadier, more committed to what she had to say. (say,)
He smiled, "Well, well, & Richard stood, wiped his mouth, and smiled, " (smiled.)
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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thank you as always. Guess I need to watch things closer. It's been a challenge finishing one book and starting another. Trying to write, read, review and post is something else. I might be losing my touch.
Thanks again as always. I fixed things, I hope.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Julie Helms
Ooh, lots of intrigue and twisted threads weaving through your writing!
Some suggestions for your consideration:
extra sauce." Click â?" ('puter gremlin)
"It's her." He grinned, struggling to contain his excitement. "Maybe my luck is improving after all. Two birds with one stone. It's got to be a hole-in-one."
(If he is just thinking this, which I assumed he was because he's trying to be stealthy, it would be better not to put it in quotes. Just italicize what he is thinking, no quotes.)
She'd parked nearby, balancing their lunches. One with tacos, extra sauce, and one tray with two large containers of sweet tea.
(This paragraph is in the middle of Troy's point of view. There is no way he would know this information, extra sauce, etc.. so I would simply leave it at what he could observe.)
off-guard (no hyphen)
Looking forward to unraveling some threads here. Well written! Julie.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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Ooh, lots of intrigue and twisted threads weaving through your writing!
Some suggestions for your consideration:
extra sauce." Click â?" ('puter gremlin)
"It's her." He grinned, struggling to contain his excitement. "Maybe my luck is improving after all. Two birds with one stone. It's got to be a hole-in-one."
(If he is just thinking this, which I assumed he was because he's trying to be stealthy, it would be better not to put it in quotes. Just italicize what he is thinking, no quotes.)
She'd parked nearby, balancing their lunches. One with tacos, extra sauce, and one tray with two large containers of sweet tea.
(This paragraph is in the middle of Troy's point of view. There is no way he would know this information, extra sauce, etc.. so I would simply leave it at what he could observe.)
off-guard (no hyphen)
Looking forward to unraveling some threads here. Well written! Julie.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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thanks Julie...This challenge is overtaking me. Ending one book and starting another...writing, reading, reviewing and posting... It's so much fun. Thanks so much.
Smiles, Carol
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I honestly don't have a clue how you do it! Lots of admiration here :-)
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, like in most cases, someone usually isn't telling the truth. Innocent or guilty is often determined by lies or partial truths, so getting to the bottom of the situation before the trial, or even years later can be nearly impossible. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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Well, like in most cases, someone usually isn't telling the truth. Innocent or guilty is often determined by lies or partial truths, so getting to the bottom of the situation before the trial, or even years later can be nearly impossible. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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Hope you are enjoying the story. I might be out of my league on this one, but I'll give it my best shot. Writing, reading and reviewing day after day is a job!
Smiles, Carol
