The Attack
Watch out!21 total reviews
Comment from jenintorre
I loved reading your story Nevada. It is so well written.I can see why your family found it funny to watch but I wouldn't have wanted to be in your shoes. A great entry for the competition. Good luck and best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
I loved reading your story Nevada. It is so well written.I can see why your family found it funny to watch but I wouldn't have wanted to be in your shoes. A great entry for the competition. Good luck and best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Thanks so much, Jen! :)
Comment from Sabrina H.
Man that kookaburra really had it out for you. On the upside of your family just laughing about it, you have a great and funny story to tell. Or write about for a contest. Also best of luck on the contest.
Keep writing:)
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
Man that kookaburra really had it out for you. On the upside of your family just laughing about it, you have a great and funny story to tell. Or write about for a contest. Also best of luck on the contest.
Keep writing:)
Comment Written 19-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much! :)
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
I don't know about such an animal, but humor is universal. I thought you established and built up your story well. You kept the big surprise toward the end, which was skillful of you and it was fun to read. Your image was very good and supported your story. Best wishes!
Alex
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
I don't know about such an animal, but humor is universal. I thought you established and built up your story well. You kept the big surprise toward the end, which was skillful of you and it was fun to read. Your image was very good and supported your story. Best wishes!
Alex
Comment Written 18-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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Thank you! :)
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Great story. Well done.
Excellent touch, sneaking 'Pallas' in there early on.
laughing nearly as hard as my family. - I've been criticized for leaving off as my family 'was', or 'had been', or some such. But I prefer the way you did it.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
Great story. Well done.
Excellent touch, sneaking 'Pallas' in there early on.
laughing nearly as hard as my family. - I've been criticized for leaving off as my family 'was', or 'had been', or some such. But I prefer the way you did it.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much for the lovely feedback and the generous six stars, Wayne! :)
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Yes, this was as personal as an attack could possibly be! That rascal singled you out --as in, "Who's the perfect shill here?" He'd been watching awhile, you mentioned, and calculating.
Taking it out of your mouth, though. That was not just brutal, but humiliating. That feels like the kookaburra equivalent of "Who's yo' DADDY!"
Sorry it happened, but maybe it'll win you a FS contest. That would be a pretty good trade-off maybe. xoxo
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
Yes, this was as personal as an attack could possibly be! That rascal singled you out --as in, "Who's the perfect shill here?" He'd been watching awhile, you mentioned, and calculating.
Taking it out of your mouth, though. That was not just brutal, but humiliating. That feels like the kookaburra equivalent of "Who's yo' DADDY!"
Sorry it happened, but maybe it'll win you a FS contest. That would be a pretty good trade-off maybe. xoxo
Comment Written 18-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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"The kookaburra equivalent of "Who's yo' DADDY!" HA! That's not a sentence I expected to read this morning! :) Thanks so much for the positive feedback as always.
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Hahaha. I'm nothing in this life if not vivid with my words, Navada! xo
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I can understand that you were eating a sausage and suddenly it was gone. The bird seems to snatch it from your mouth and eat it for you. Is this a scientific fiction story?
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
I can understand that you were eating a sausage and suddenly it was gone. The bird seems to snatch it from your mouth and eat it for you. Is this a scientific fiction story?
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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No - it's a true story.
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wow! Hard to imagine. I bet you were fightened?
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Not really. Just miffed. ;)
Comment from Lisasview
Oh gosh, really a kookaburra.... yikes... I am surprised that your entire family did not rush indoors... I think I would have.
I really loved your story and authors notes...
Lisasview, recuperating from a new knee
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
Oh gosh, really a kookaburra.... yikes... I am surprised that your entire family did not rush indoors... I think I would have.
I really loved your story and authors notes...
Lisasview, recuperating from a new knee
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much! :)Rainbow lorikeets
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You are so very welcome,
Lisa
Comment from Judith B.
Truly exceptional writing. Your ability to build suspense combined with humor is amazing. I not only enjoyed the story but enjoyed reading such exceptional creative writing and storytelling.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
Truly exceptional writing. Your ability to build suspense combined with humor is amazing. I not only enjoyed the story but enjoyed reading such exceptional creative writing and storytelling.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much for your very generous feedback and six stars! :)
Comment from Wendy G
I knew it would be one of those thieving rascals, but I loved the way you wrote this story, loved your shock, loved your family's reactions. Took it right from your mouth! Too close for comfort. Maybe shelter under an umbrella next time. Lol. Your family might think you're crazy, but t least you will be able to enjoy your snake (sorry, sausage!) in peace. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
I knew it would be one of those thieving rascals, but I loved the way you wrote this story, loved your shock, loved your family's reactions. Took it right from your mouth! Too close for comfort. Maybe shelter under an umbrella next time. Lol. Your family might think you're crazy, but t least you will be able to enjoy your snake (sorry, sausage!) in peace. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Wendy! I really appreciate the generous six stars! :)
Comment from LJbutterfly
I most enjoyed the way you incorporated characteristics and traits of the kookaburra into your story. They are aggressive predators that swoop down to catch their prey. They also laugh.
You did an excellent job building suspense and mystery as your story began. You included detailed and realistic descriptions. Your story is well written. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
I most enjoyed the way you incorporated characteristics and traits of the kookaburra into your story. They are aggressive predators that swoop down to catch their prey. They also laugh.
You did an excellent job building suspense and mystery as your story began. You included detailed and realistic descriptions. Your story is well written. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much! This was a true story. :)