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The Attack

Watch out!

21 total reviews 
Comment from jenintorre
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I loved reading your story Nevada. It is so well written.I can see why your family found it funny to watch but I wouldn't have wanted to be in your shoes. A great entry for the competition. Good luck and best wishes. Jen.

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
    Thanks so much, Jen! :)
Comment from Sabrina H.
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Man that kookaburra really had it out for you. On the upside of your family just laughing about it, you have a great and funny story to tell. Or write about for a contest. Also best of luck on the contest.
Keep writing:)

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
    Thank you so much! :)
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
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I don't know about such an animal, but humor is universal. I thought you established and built up your story well. You kept the big surprise toward the end, which was skillful of you and it was fun to read. Your image was very good and supported your story. Best wishes!

Alex

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
    Thank you! :)
Comment from Wayne Fowler
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Great story. Well done.
Excellent touch, sneaking 'Pallas' in there early on.
laughing nearly as hard as my family. - I've been criticized for leaving off as my family 'was', or 'had been', or some such. But I prefer the way you did it.
Best wishes.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
    Thank you so much for the lovely feedback and the generous six stars, Wayne! :)
Comment from Rachelle Allen
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Yes, this was as personal as an attack could possibly be! That rascal singled you out --as in, "Who's the perfect shill here?" He'd been watching awhile, you mentioned, and calculating.

Taking it out of your mouth, though. That was not just brutal, but humiliating. That feels like the kookaburra equivalent of "Who's yo' DADDY!"

Sorry it happened, but maybe it'll win you a FS contest. That would be a pretty good trade-off maybe. xoxo

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
    "The kookaburra equivalent of "Who's yo' DADDY!" HA! That's not a sentence I expected to read this morning! :) Thanks so much for the positive feedback as always.
reply by Rachelle Allen on 19-Jan-2024
    Hahaha. I'm nothing in this life if not vivid with my words, Navada! xo
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
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I can understand that you were eating a sausage and suddenly it was gone. The bird seems to snatch it from your mouth and eat it for you. Is this a scientific fiction story?

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
    No - it's a true story.
reply by Rosemary Everson1 on 17-Jan-2024
    wow! Hard to imagine. I bet you were fightened?
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
    Not really. Just miffed. ;)
Comment from Lisasview
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Oh gosh, really a kookaburra.... yikes... I am surprised that your entire family did not rush indoors... I think I would have.
I really loved your story and authors notes...
Lisasview, recuperating from a new knee

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
    Thank you so much! :)Rainbow lorikeets
reply by Lisasview on 17-Jan-2024
    You are so very welcome,
    Lisa
Comment from Judith B.
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Truly exceptional writing. Your ability to build suspense combined with humor is amazing. I not only enjoyed the story but enjoyed reading such exceptional creative writing and storytelling.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
    Thank you so much for your very generous feedback and six stars! :)
Comment from Wendy G
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I knew it would be one of those thieving rascals, but I loved the way you wrote this story, loved your shock, loved your family's reactions. Took it right from your mouth! Too close for comfort. Maybe shelter under an umbrella next time. Lol. Your family might think you're crazy, but t least you will be able to enjoy your snake (sorry, sausage!) in peace. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
    Thank you so much, Wendy! I really appreciate the generous six stars! :)
Comment from LJbutterfly
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I most enjoyed the way you incorporated characteristics and traits of the kookaburra into your story. They are aggressive predators that swoop down to catch their prey. They also laugh.

You did an excellent job building suspense and mystery as your story began. You included detailed and realistic descriptions. Your story is well written. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
    Thank you so much! This was a true story. :)