scrimshaw carving
ukiah** 7-5-7 (sailor's discarded scrimshaw)9 total reviews
Comment from Aiona
What an interesting poetry form! It does have the 7-5-7 syllable count of a ukiah. I'm wondering if a tooth would float or sink. Inspiring! I want to write a ukiah now too!
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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What an interesting poetry form! It does have the 7-5-7 syllable count of a ukiah. I'm wondering if a tooth would float or sink. Inspiring! I want to write a ukiah now too!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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hi Aiona!
Good for you if you take up the reverse Haiku poem format. If it floats, maybe Robinson Crusoe would find it to decorate his hut LOL
My favored poem format is still 5-7-5 (-: I created Hailu, a combo of 5-7-5 syllables (Haiku), but with 5-3-5 lined words (Lune).
Mark
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I saw that in your bio. I don't quite understand how to make the combo. Can you point me to an example?
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Mark,
This is a good ukiah which seems inspired by the artwork. It gives the feeling of the the loss of part of the soldier's life or that the soldier may be lost at sea too.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest.
Have a great day.
Joan
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Hi Mark,
This is a good ukiah which seems inspired by the artwork. It gives the feeling of the the loss of part of the soldier's life or that the soldier may be lost at sea too.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest.
Have a great day.
Joan
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Thanks Joan,
Methinks Robinson Crusoe found this and decorated his hut LOL
Mark
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My pleasure, Mark. That would be a good end for it.
Joan
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am wondering why this scrimshaw was tossed into the sea. Oh well, I guess it's not important to the contest. LOl I did enjoy reading. Thank you for sharing this entry with us and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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I am wondering why this scrimshaw was tossed into the sea. Oh well, I guess it's not important to the contest. LOl I did enjoy reading. Thank you for sharing this entry with us and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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Thanks for your review. I have no idea why it was tossed LOL
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Nicely done! I love how you describe the once a cherished possession adrift in the vast ocean. For me that shares a sense of loss. Very nicely done how you share so much with just three lines.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Nicely done! I love how you describe the once a cherished possession adrift in the vast ocean. For me that shares a sense of loss. Very nicely done how you share so much with just three lines.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Thanks Michael for your endorsement for my short poem. Maybe in another story, Robinson Crusoe picks this up on his island sojourn (-;
Mark
Comment from ESOSTINE
I wonder who would discard a precious piece of art like the one in the accompanying photo, and for what reason. I guess the sailor does not appreciate the value of the scrimshaw, but the narrator did, though could not risk his life going down the sea to 'rescue' the jettisoned art work. Well done, dear Mark. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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I wonder who would discard a precious piece of art like the one in the accompanying photo, and for what reason. I guess the sailor does not appreciate the value of the scrimshaw, but the narrator did, though could not risk his life going down the sea to 'rescue' the jettisoned art work. Well done, dear Mark. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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Thanks for your review and comments.
Mark
Comment from tempeste
Ciao!
What a beautiful piece of art work.
So much detail and all carved on a whale 's tooth or bone or a walrus' tusk.
I knew sailor knitted but the craftsmanship of these scrimshaws is utterly stunning.
I had to google for more insight.
The first to make these art treasure were the British whalers.
They were gifts for their captains or fellow whalers .
They used a pocket knife or a needle if they were lucky to get their hands on one .
To make the drawing visible they rubbed soot they got from the ship's ovens.
Love the story your wee poem tells.
A very interesting topic !
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Ciao!
What a beautiful piece of art work.
So much detail and all carved on a whale 's tooth or bone or a walrus' tusk.
I knew sailor knitted but the craftsmanship of these scrimshaws is utterly stunning.
I had to google for more insight.
The first to make these art treasure were the British whalers.
They were gifts for their captains or fellow whalers .
They used a pocket knife or a needle if they were lucky to get their hands on one .
To make the drawing visible they rubbed soot they got from the ship's ovens.
Love the story your wee poem tells.
A very interesting topic !
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Thanks for your kind words for my scrimshaw related poem.
Mark
Comment from karenina
Am I hallucinating? Didn't I review this earlier today? Whoa! I have a fever but it's not that high?
Anyway-- I like unity variation! You're a whiz with every short form, Mark.
I've been to Mystic a bunch of times!
Lots to see about the sea!
Karenina
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Am I hallucinating? Didn't I review this earlier today? Whoa! I have a fever but it's not that high?
Anyway-- I like unity variation! You're a whiz with every short form, Mark.
I've been to Mystic a bunch of times!
Lots to see about the sea!
Karenina
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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K
You did. You are not COVID hallucinating. Thanks for the repeat review.
It was an oops moment. I meant to enter it in a contest, which I did. The first one, with the exact same verse, was discarded. Tom helped me fix it.
Only one visit to Mystic Seaport in my life, my kids accompanied us.
Mark
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Whew! I thought I'd developed ESP...or COVID had pickled my brain! TOM to the rescue!
:)
Comment from jessizero
I enjoyed this "reverse haiku." You got the syllable counts right for the format, and I liked the picture you supplied. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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I enjoyed this "reverse haiku." You got the syllable counts right for the format, and I liked the picture you supplied. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Thanks Jessi!
I like this reverse Haiku version. I may use it in the future as an alternative to my typical 5-7-5 poems.
Mark
Comment from RodG
Intriguing, Mark. One wonders why the sailor discarded the scrimshaw and where it was found. One also wonders who the Speaker is and how he saw it. Rod
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Intriguing, Mark. One wonders why the sailor discarded the scrimshaw and where it was found. One also wonders who the Speaker is and how he saw it. Rod
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Rob,
He was just practicing. Likely Robinson Crusoe found it on shore LOL.
Mark
