Spectre
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "The Void"This is book two of a trilogy book 1 "Ghost"
17 total reviews
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Excellent writing Bath (2x) should be 'bathe', but in dialogue rules go out the window Words should be as said.
Girls (and of course women) should be armed from as soon as they can pull a trigger. "I shot him because he was thinking about hurting me." - "Oh, okay miss. Have a nice day."
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Excellent writing Bath (2x) should be 'bathe', but in dialogue rules go out the window Words should be as said.
Girls (and of course women) should be armed from as soon as they can pull a trigger. "I shot him because he was thinking about hurting me." - "Oh, okay miss. Have a nice day."
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from Ric Myworld
I've been on this site for 12 years and just reached the 100-post milestone, and I notice you've already reached the 200-post milestone. Congratulations! Thanks for sharing.
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I've been on this site for 12 years and just reached the 100-post milestone, and I notice you've already reached the 200-post milestone. Congratulations! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your character's journey pulled me into such a deep and emotional place. The rawness of their thoughts and experiences struck a powerful chord. The honesty and courage they show are undeniable. I felt every moment they endured, from the smallest details like watching the sunrise through the kitchen window to the overwhelming waves of pain and exhaustion they fought through. Their resilience and determination to protect others are incredible. Keep going with their story - their voice is truly unforgettable.
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Your character's journey pulled me into such a deep and emotional place. The rawness of their thoughts and experiences struck a powerful chord. The honesty and courage they show are undeniable. I felt every moment they endured, from the smallest details like watching the sunrise through the kitchen window to the overwhelming waves of pain and exhaustion they fought through. Their resilience and determination to protect others are incredible. Keep going with their story - their voice is truly unforgettable.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Congratulations on Post two-hundred.
My first time reading your posts. You seem to be a credible read. The subject is not a genre I am familiar with but the words flowed well especially the opeing poem.
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Congratulations on Post two-hundred.
My first time reading your posts. You seem to be a credible read. The subject is not a genre I am familiar with but the words flowed well especially the opeing poem.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from EILEEN LAW
Great writing - deep and enthralling. You keep the reader engrossed. I always look forward to reading more. Your poetry is very good as well. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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Great writing - deep and enthralling. You keep the reader engrossed. I always look forward to reading more. Your poetry is very good as well. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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Very kind. Thank you very much.
Appreciate that, but you're doing well. I'm happy that you're an avid reader. Thank you.Have the most awesome day!
Comment from royowen
I think in my life I've touched on a sense of unreality, but this sounds like a complete escape from reality. It must happen when reality becomes too much, and there is a mental, sensual breakdown, a complete shutdown, it so well written a complete feeling of being there with you. An excellent write, I had to take control of my own senses, beautifully written, blessings Lea, Roy
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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I think in my life I've touched on a sense of unreality, but this sounds like a complete escape from reality. It must happen when reality becomes too much, and there is a mental, sensual breakdown, a complete shutdown, it so well written a complete feeling of being there with you. An excellent write, I had to take control of my own senses, beautifully written, blessings Lea, Roy
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Roy, you always hit the nail on the head! I'm glad you are able to see the meaning of my words and that your insight is spot on as always! Thank you for your kind words as well.I hope that you and yours are doing well.Have a great night!
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Well done
Comment from Rick Gardner
It would be seven stars if I could, as said before what happened and your words are penetrating. Here is a poem from me, hope it helps ever so little
Deep Wounds
These never leave, will never heal,
Some will leave you broken,
Make tears of sadness,
Leave you on your knees,
Hoping for forgiveness,
Will all wounds heal themselves?
Probably not, hold on, time heals all.
Another day is coming,
A day of rest, a day to heal,
A day to rise, a day to live again.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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It would be seven stars if I could, as said before what happened and your words are penetrating. Here is a poem from me, hope it helps ever so little
Deep Wounds
These never leave, will never heal,
Some will leave you broken,
Make tears of sadness,
Leave you on your knees,
Hoping for forgiveness,
Will all wounds heal themselves?
Probably not, hold on, time heals all.
Another day is coming,
A day of rest, a day to heal,
A day to rise, a day to live again.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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Hi, Rick. Thanks so much, that's a great poem. I appreciate it very thoughtful.Thank you 24 this awesome rating! I'm glad you were able to connect with this. And offer subject rate thoughtful radio I hope you have an awesome night!
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Just believe in yourself.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Lea,
It looks like I'm reading the story in order again. Of course it does no good to mention something after the fact, but all the alarm bells should have been ringing in your head. This gal is no friend, regardless of giving you a place to get out of the weather. I'll have to wait and see what happened, but hopefully you dumped this friend and left on the run.
Blessings,
Tom
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Hello Lea,
It looks like I'm reading the story in order again. Of course it does no good to mention something after the fact, but all the alarm bells should have been ringing in your head. This gal is no friend, regardless of giving you a place to get out of the weather. I'll have to wait and see what happened, but hopefully you dumped this friend and left on the run.
Blessings,
Tom
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Oh yes I got angry every time I get angry stuff happens. I thank you. Yes, I did didn't take me long to wise up a matter of a couple of days and I was done. Thank you Tom happy to see you! Keep the wolves in the hills and your spouse in bed l o l! Enjoy your evening!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Congratulations on your 200-milestone post. This is very well written. You have a valuable story here that needs to be told. Keep an eye on punctuation.
My ankles and my wrists felt sore A low throb between my (a)
"Alright." She said. (Alright," she said)
We'll have to go tomorrow night though." E said. (though," E) I didn't correct the rest of the dialogue, but it needs to be corrected.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Congratulations on your 200-milestone post. This is very well written. You have a valuable story here that needs to be told. Keep an eye on punctuation.
My ankles and my wrists felt sore A low throb between my (a)
"Alright." She said. (Alright," she said)
We'll have to go tomorrow night though." E said. (though," E) I didn't correct the rest of the dialogue, but it needs to be corrected.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Hi Barbara, thank you again. I appreciate it. I'm just trying to figure out how I can fix that issue. Because, as mentioned it's not my strong suit. Although I'm fully educating myself. I can see by your suggestions for edit. That there seems to be consistent thing going on here.s when there should be comments things like that feel it is registered. I would just like to have something that tells me if I'm right or wrong. I tried grammarly but for some reason process work on the site. I have to copy and paste it over to something else. And when I paste it back again on my formatting is gone. Definitely thinks I need to learn for sure. So I very much appreciate you doing this. I really do cause you are the consummate professional, you're number 1 for a reason I totally respect your opinion. I thank you again, Barbara, and you have very good things to say too. I'm I have to mention that as well thanks so much have a great night!
Comment from LJbutterfly
You were in a situation where there was no way out. If you wanted to survive, you had to be a part of the only option available to you at the time. You did what any young girl in the same situation would have done. If you hadn't had that closet at the bottom of the stairs, you would have been in the street. I congratulate you on your ability to have survived that horrifying situation.
Congratulations also on your 200th milestone post.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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You were in a situation where there was no way out. If you wanted to survive, you had to be a part of the only option available to you at the time. You did what any young girl in the same situation would have done. If you hadn't had that closet at the bottom of the stairs, you would have been in the street. I congratulate you on your ability to have survived that horrifying situation.
Congratulations also on your 200th milestone post.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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As always your insight is clear like crystal!
