Dr. Howler's Nightmares
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Sacrifice"A collection of most unusual bedtime stories
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Comment from JSD
All a bit gross. Compellingly and engagingly written, with a terrific protagonist who may need to visit the therapist soon. Thanks for sharing this - I think.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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All a bit gross. Compellingly and engagingly written, with a terrific protagonist who may need to visit the therapist soon. Thanks for sharing this - I think.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Much appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I can understand a father wanting to make a person who violated his young daughter suffer. I feel I would do the same. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us and good luck.
My previous studies of the ancient Mayan rituals they referred to as chulel would come in handy and result in the horrific ( I think this reads better without the 'they' after 'rituals')
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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I can understand a father wanting to make a person who violated his young daughter suffer. I feel I would do the same. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us and good luck.
My previous studies of the ancient Mayan rituals they referred to as chulel would come in handy and result in the horrific ( I think this reads better without the 'they' after 'rituals')
Comment Written 24-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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Appreciate the suggestion, as well as your comments and the review. Glad you enjoyed this posting.
Comment from Ric Myworld
We never know what goes through the minds of any man until we put it on paper for the whole world to see. Well, at least everyone who reads what he writes. LOL. Great job. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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We never know what goes through the minds of any man until we put it on paper for the whole world to see. Well, at least everyone who reads what he writes. LOL. Great job. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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What can I say? Just one of those dark moods when wrote this. But, so appreciate your support.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I commend you very much for entering my contest. This was a lovely bloody story. I can not write as visceral as you.
Check out my Cemetery Contest story,"Charming". No blood no guts. Perhaps I am afraid that of I went there, I could never leave.
I enjoyed your story and I hope I can see more. Perhaps you can set your sites on a despicable confidence thief who prays on senior citizens, and when you catch up with him.You melt down the coins of your choice and pour the molten metal down his throat.
Just a thought. Do write more. I was riveted
Karen.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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I commend you very much for entering my contest. This was a lovely bloody story. I can not write as visceral as you.
Check out my Cemetery Contest story,"Charming". No blood no guts. Perhaps I am afraid that of I went there, I could never leave.
I enjoyed your story and I hope I can see more. Perhaps you can set your sites on a despicable confidence thief who prays on senior citizens, and when you catch up with him.You melt down the coins of your choice and pour the molten metal down his throat.
Just a thought. Do write more. I was riveted
Karen.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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Checked it out. Good story. Much appreciate your comments and the review.
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T used your edits right away.
Thank you Karen
Comment from BethShelby
Well the story prompt called for it and it isn't the first time you've written some pretty horrendous fiction. You seem to have a gift for blood and guts. LOL Actually your writing can be graphic or seriously informative. I enjoyed your biographical story as well.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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Well the story prompt called for it and it isn't the first time you've written some pretty horrendous fiction. You seem to have a gift for blood and guts. LOL Actually your writing can be graphic or seriously informative. I enjoyed your biographical story as well.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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Much appreciate your comments. An occasional visit to the darker side seems to do this old man some good. Glad you enjoyed this posting.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Your warning was spot on. I'm kind of glad you ended it where you did. Your writing was cut and unceremoniously, perfect for this story. There was no need for fancy words. I can't condemn the narrator. A parent will go to great lengths to protect and extract justice for their children. Thanks for sharing. Gretchen
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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Your warning was spot on. I'm kind of glad you ended it where you did. Your writing was cut and unceremoniously, perfect for this story. There was no need for fancy words. I can't condemn the narrator. A parent will go to great lengths to protect and extract justice for their children. Thanks for sharing. Gretchen
Comment Written 23-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Revenge for a harmed child the exact theme intended. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I certainly understand the urge George has, I would likely do the same thing under the circumstances. The language both men use mark them as not particularly well-educated although George has looking into savage sacrifices. There are a few words I would change: bemoaned into moaned as bemoaned is a complaint about a problem. tears cascaded sounds like watching a pretty waterfall; how about drooled? You might want to dump some ice water on him now and then when he passes out. Good writing for an act that is necessary.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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I certainly understand the urge George has, I would likely do the same thing under the circumstances. The language both men use mark them as not particularly well-educated although George has looking into savage sacrifices. There are a few words I would change: bemoaned into moaned as bemoaned is a complaint about a problem. tears cascaded sounds like watching a pretty waterfall; how about drooled? You might want to dump some ice water on him now and then when he passes out. Good writing for an act that is necessary.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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Appreciate the recommendations and the review. Glad you enjoyed this posting.
Comment from Ulla
Wow, Brett that is a great entry for the contest. I can't say that like all that violence an bloodshed. But I admit the.prompt calls for that. Good luck. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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Wow, Brett that is a great entry for the contest. I can't say that like all that violence an bloodshed. But I admit the.prompt calls for that. Good luck. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 23-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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Appreciate the review and your comments. Glad you enjoyed this posting.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Pretty savagely written. But well done.
Harry Combs ("Brules"), or Stephen King could have done no better.
Murderous intentions contest applicants might as well save their entry money. But then, how would get a decent payoff?"
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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Pretty savagely written. But well done.
Harry Combs ("Brules"), or Stephen King could have done no better.
Murderous intentions contest applicants might as well save their entry money. But then, how would get a decent payoff?"
Comment Written 23-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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Seriously doubt if this dark entry would win the contest but glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is not the sort of thing I usually choose to read but I have to say this is excellently done when it comes to the sheer horror of torture and your own totally impassioned desire for (understandable) vengeance! You have cleverly woven your reasons and the background into these acts of violence and the whole story feels palpably real and frightening. Well done and good luck, Brett! Debbie
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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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This is not the sort of thing I usually choose to read but I have to say this is excellently done when it comes to the sheer horror of torture and your own totally impassioned desire for (understandable) vengeance! You have cleverly woven your reasons and the background into these acts of violence and the whole story feels palpably real and frightening. Well done and good luck, Brett! Debbie
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Comment Written 23-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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Much appreciate your comments and the review. Glad you enjoyed this posting.