Comment from Mark D. R.

Exceptional

LisaMay,

Congrats on your contest placement. Apparently, I missed the review and vote opportunity for my favorite poem genre.

Your last line is a great descriptor. Your photo is a perfect companion to your verse.

Mark

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2023

---

reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023

Thanks for your generous review, Mark. It was a site contest, so not open for public voting. I enjoy haiku... yours are often very good.

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Hi Lisa,
This haiku is a good description of the dandelion seeding process. I like the metaphor in the last line.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2023

Comment from Ginda Simpson

Excellent

Congratulations on your win with this excellent Haiku, so well deserved. I feel so inspired when I read such poetry. Yours has beautiful imagery and feeling.

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2023

Comment from Michele Harber

Excellent

I love your use of imagery, Lisa May. The idea of dandelions as "whirling parachutes" is simultaneously brilliant and very fitting. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2023

---

reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023

Thanks for your praise! The previous reviewer suggested 'twirling' would be better than 'whirling'. I agreed, so I changed it.

reply by Michele Harber on 17-Apr-2023

Both words work. It's a great line either way.

reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023

I used to jump off the roof when I was a kid, pretending to be a paratrooper... such a tomboy. Mum's garden gave me a soft landing, much to her dismay.

reply by Michele Harber on 17-Apr-2023

And you didn't arm yourself with dandelion parachutes -- or, at least, lots of balloons, a la the movie "Up?"

Comment from Father Flaps

Excellent

Hi Lisa,
When I was a kid, we'd blow the seeds and that is exactly what went through our little minds... paratroopers floating into the French countryside during World War II. It's the perfect image.
One question... should it be "whirling" or would "twirling" be more accurate?
Good Luck in the Haiku contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2023

---

reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023

I always wanted to be a paratrooper - I used to jump off the roof of the house into the garden much to mum's annoyance. No wonder my ankles and knees (now at 70) keep reminding me that was a dumb idea.
I do prefer your suggestion of 'twirling'. Thanks for that advice.

Comment from Jesse James Doty

Excellent

Whirling parachutes is the perfect Sartori for this Haiku. I love dandelions and have often blown their seeds while still a child. This speaks loudly about the world of dandelions and how they propagate the world with their seeds.
Thanks for sharing this delightful piece!
Jesse

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2023

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

The dandelion when it puts off the seeds, and they float in the air, are rather cute to see, but they are a bane to the person who has a beautiful garden and those seeds take root, and grow into plants that make the gardens ugly. Patricia.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2023

Comment from Chrissy710

Excellent

Hi Lisa, a nice Haiku, great satori. can I suggest something though?

Haiku doesn't have capitals so as it is a contest I would write.

blown on silken tufts
seeds disperse by gentle breeze-
whirling parachutes

Cheers Chris Hope you don't mind
Cheers Chris

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2023

---

reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023

Thanks so much for your spot-on advice Chris! Of course I don't mind when you are absolutely correct. Much appreciated.

Comment from Rachelle Allen

Exceptional

This is a perfect haiku --gentle, nature-centric and full of imagery for the mind that evokes a picture exactly like the one you supplied. This seems like Winner Circle material here for sure. VERY well-done.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2023

Comment from Debra White

Excellent

Hello LisaMay :)
I enjoyed reading your haiku.
I love dandelions at each stage of their life and particularly enjoy watching the fluffy parachutes float in the air.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes as always, Debra

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2023