The Miranda Chronicles
Viewing comments for Chapter 43 "No Thanks (Miranda)"Miranda solves a mystery.
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Comment from Ric Myworld
I don't know why this chapter wasn't sent to my mailbox as they are all supposed to, but if I hadn't stumbled across it, I wouldn't have got to read it. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023
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I don't know why this chapter wasn't sent to my mailbox as they are all supposed to, but if I hadn't stumbled across it, I wouldn't have got to read it. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023
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Thanks for reading and taking the time to review. Always appreciated. Gretchen
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job focusing on the recovery of the cars
at the -pond, Gretchen. I enjoyed reading it. I felt like I
was there watching everything due to your great descriptions.
I hope Aaron isn't to let down when the identities of the car
individuals is discovered. Miranda's comment about Aaron's
great uncle trying to please his father and have him be proud
was telling. That seems to be what Waylon hopes for too. I liked
the way Mitch and Miranda seem to be falling for each other.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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You did a great job focusing on the recovery of the cars
at the -pond, Gretchen. I enjoyed reading it. I felt like I
was there watching everything due to your great descriptions.
I hope Aaron isn't to let down when the identities of the car
individuals is discovered. Miranda's comment about Aaron's
great uncle trying to please his father and have him be proud
was telling. That seems to be what Waylon hopes for too. I liked
the way Mitch and Miranda seem to be falling for each other.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 16-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Thank you. You picked up all the key elements I hoping would stand out. I appreciate your kind review. Gretchen
Comment from John Ciarmello
I think that went pretty smoothly, and the fact that the trunks were full of booze tells a piece of the (why). Mitch and Miranda are heating up at a good clip. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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I think that went pretty smoothly, and the fact that the trunks were full of booze tells a piece of the (why). Mitch and Miranda are heating up at a good clip. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 16-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Thank you. Trying to bring the loose ends together. I appreciate your nice review. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
There are a lot of kids who need their parents to like them. That's for sure. Thank you for sharing this with us. I can't wait to see who the three bodies are and I'm glad Miranda agreed to have lunch with Mitch.
He still hasn't completely forgiven me for calling in Mitch but, (move comma to after 'Mitch)
"I'm sure he likes you, Aaron," I laugh. (period needed after 'Aaron')
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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There are a lot of kids who need their parents to like them. That's for sure. Thank you for sharing this with us. I can't wait to see who the three bodies are and I'm glad Miranda agreed to have lunch with Mitch.
He still hasn't completely forgiven me for calling in Mitch but, (move comma to after 'Mitch)
"I'm sure he likes you, Aaron," I laugh. (period needed after 'Aaron')
Comment Written 16-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for your help. I was unsure about the speech tag punctuation. I appreciate the review. Gretchen
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Awwww, did you have to quit there? One body in one car and two in the other. Makes me wonder if Missy's hubby had a girl friend. LOL Of course I am only guessing one of the cars contains Missy's husband. It's just my mind playing it forward. You are doing a great job. The feelings she and Mitch have for each other and the prayer at the end. Nice touches. Thumbs up to you too, Gretchen. Your characters are real. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Awwww, did you have to quit there? One body in one car and two in the other. Makes me wonder if Missy's hubby had a girl friend. LOL Of course I am only guessing one of the cars contains Missy's husband. It's just my mind playing it forward. You are doing a great job. The feelings she and Mitch have for each other and the prayer at the end. Nice touches. Thumbs up to you too, Gretchen. Your characters are real. Nancy:)
Comment Written 15-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much Nancy. Trying to bring the loose ends together. Thank you for the six as well. Gretchen
Comment from Wendy G
Wow. Excellent writing. Great story continuing.Miranda is true to her cool tough self when she says " a girl's gotta eat". It keeps the tough exterior, but you let us see her vulnerability as well. I am just wondering if perhaps the single body in the car might be Missy's husband. If so, then it will be on for one and all! Feeling for all those kids who just want to be liked by their dads. Why is it so hard? Hence I like the thought-provoking aspects, as well the insightful astute understanding of human nature.
Wendy
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Wow. Excellent writing. Great story continuing.Miranda is true to her cool tough self when she says " a girl's gotta eat". It keeps the tough exterior, but you let us see her vulnerability as well. I am just wondering if perhaps the single body in the car might be Missy's husband. If so, then it will be on for one and all! Feeling for all those kids who just want to be liked by their dads. Why is it so hard? Hence I like the thought-provoking aspects, as well the insightful astute understanding of human nature.
Wendy
Comment Written 15-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Thank you! I'm glad that this chapter was enjoyable to you. I appreciate your feedback. Thank-you for the six as well. Gretchen
Comment from Jay Squires
I love Miranda's response to being asked to lunch. Totally Miranda is her, "A girl's gotta eat."!
Your extra star is for the repetition of the subtextual need we all have for love.
Great job!
Jay
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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I love Miranda's response to being asked to lunch. Totally Miranda is her, "A girl's gotta eat."!
Your extra star is for the repetition of the subtextual need we all have for love.
Great job!
Jay
Comment Written 15-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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Awe. Thank you. I'm so glad you're enjoying thos story. And I knew you'd pick up on the connection. Gretchen
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Ohhh, Gretchen. This one is so excellent. It has the regular Miranda pluck, plus an ever-bigger dose of soft, deep-down good, sweet side, too. It shows so beautifully why she "gets" Waylon so well...and is so understanding and patient with Aaron, too, despite his tendency to be goofy and kind of obnoxious. I just love Miranda; she's definitely one of those diamond-in-the-rough kinds of girls. She never seems to lose her goodness.
This was really exciting to read --lots of anticipation and excitement-- very well played. I also loved Waylong's (non)response when the sheriff asked if it was a school holiday. Lol. He's definitely learning some street smarts from Miranda!!
Two little edits:
**In the paragraph that begins "One of the Police divers..." I don't think 'police' needs a capital.
**In the paragraph that begins "Both Waylon and Mitch looks over at me," 'looks' is singular, but 'both' is plural. So, it should be 'look.'
Everything else is letter perfect!! As always, I'm looking forward to the next installment. xo
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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Ohhh, Gretchen. This one is so excellent. It has the regular Miranda pluck, plus an ever-bigger dose of soft, deep-down good, sweet side, too. It shows so beautifully why she "gets" Waylon so well...and is so understanding and patient with Aaron, too, despite his tendency to be goofy and kind of obnoxious. I just love Miranda; she's definitely one of those diamond-in-the-rough kinds of girls. She never seems to lose her goodness.
This was really exciting to read --lots of anticipation and excitement-- very well played. I also loved Waylong's (non)response when the sheriff asked if it was a school holiday. Lol. He's definitely learning some street smarts from Miranda!!
Two little edits:
**In the paragraph that begins "One of the Police divers..." I don't think 'police' needs a capital.
**In the paragraph that begins "Both Waylon and Mitch looks over at me," 'looks' is singular, but 'both' is plural. So, it should be 'look.'
Everything else is letter perfect!! As always, I'm looking forward to the next installment. xo
Comment Written 15-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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Thanks so much. I corrected those spags. Thank you for pointing them out. I am sp happy you are continuing to follow it and enjoy it. Thank you for the spectacular rating. Always appreciated. Gretchen
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Well-earned, Miss Talented!
Comment from Sankey
You did really well with this. Premium writing in my book. Great descriptions of the car contents and the drama of them coming up. I look forward to where this is going. Including the romance with Miranda and Mitch. One spag right near the end...want their pa[t](r)ents to like them.
Do you remember Bob Hartson? (Mastery) he was a favourite writer more in the deeper romance and Murder mystery bent, sadly died a while ago.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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You did really well with this. Premium writing in my book. Great descriptions of the car contents and the drama of them coming up. I look forward to where this is going. Including the romance with Miranda and Mitch. One spag right near the end...want their pa[t](r)ents to like them.
Do you remember Bob Hartson? (Mastery) he was a favourite writer more in the deeper romance and Murder mystery bent, sadly died a while ago.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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I have since corrected the spag but thank you for catching it. I do remember him. Some of his scenes were a bit graphic for me but I agree, he was a gifted writer. Thank you for this awesome rating and great review. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
Miranda deserves her luck to change, she's playing ex-officio parent to other People's kids, surely she deserves justice in a world that tends to not have them, this is beautifully written as always Gretchen, great sensitivity, and perhaps a little romantic inclination? So well done, blessing Roy
Typo : The other kids who want their (patents) to like them. Parents?
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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Miranda deserves her luck to change, she's playing ex-officio parent to other People's kids, surely she deserves justice in a world that tends to not have them, this is beautifully written as always Gretchen, great sensitivity, and perhaps a little romantic inclination? So well done, blessing Roy
Typo : The other kids who want their (patents) to like them. Parents?
Comment Written 15-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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Thanks for catching that spag. I can go over a post a dozen times and always miss at least one. Thank you for this awesome review. Gretchen
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Well done
