The Miranda Chronicles
Viewing comments for Chapter 61 "Aaron's New Wheels (Miranda)"Miranda solves a mystery.
12 total reviews
Comment from John Ciarmello
This has an intriguing storyline, Gretchen. The characters are genuine and believable. I would love to follow you. I'm going to jump on your FAN wagon. Love this saga. Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2022
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This has an intriguing storyline, Gretchen. The characters are genuine and believable. I would love to follow you. I'm going to jump on your FAN wagon. Love this saga. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 28-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much. Hope I don't disappoint. Not sure if you've read the previous parts but they start with Allow me to introduce Myself, the Dumped and Fired, Dumped and Fired pt 2, and so on. Hope you will continue to enjoy
Comment from Ric Myworld
It's not often that asking someone who doesn't usually do the right thing will make a difference. But as long as we ask, I guess, we've done our part. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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It's not often that asking someone who doesn't usually do the right thing will make a difference. But as long as we ask, I guess, we've done our part. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Thanks for this understanding review. Gretchen
Comment from Wendy G
Excellent chapter. I like the character development. Waylon is becoming aware of his father's abandonment of him, and this would not be easy for him to cope with, together with all the other issues associated with being a teenager. Your description of Miranda is very insightful and intuitive. She's tough, but practical and good-hearted. Yet there might be repercussions about her taking the kid's phone. Teens would not like that. Looking forward to seeing what happens with this neighbour Aaron. Also looking forward to the next chapter.
Wendy
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Excellent chapter. I like the character development. Waylon is becoming aware of his father's abandonment of him, and this would not be easy for him to cope with, together with all the other issues associated with being a teenager. Your description of Miranda is very insightful and intuitive. She's tough, but practical and good-hearted. Yet there might be repercussions about her taking the kid's phone. Teens would not like that. Looking forward to seeing what happens with this neighbour Aaron. Also looking forward to the next chapter.
Wendy
Comment Written 26-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your insightful review. I really appreciate your comments. Gretchen
Comment from lyenochka
Oh-oh. Looking at someone messages is one thing but taking his phone along may cause some fireworks later. Hope Miranda knows what she's doing. Enjoyed the interchange with the favor-asking neighbor.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Oh-oh. Looking at someone messages is one thing but taking his phone along may cause some fireworks later. Hope Miranda knows what she's doing. Enjoyed the interchange with the favor-asking neighbor.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Lol. I enjoyed your insight into the phone situation. Live and learn. Thanks so much for your kind review. Gretchen
Comment from Jay Squires
You have such a soft touch with this story. It seems to flow so effortlessly. It makes me anxious to get back into the story/novel format and away from the play (which, thank God, I now can do)! You have such good control over all your characters. Today, with just a few words, "I notice the tiniest smirk" we see that he is warming to Miranda.
"Dougie, for once, do the right thing. Call your kid." I think as I slide his phone into my back pocket. [Gretchen, consider reversing the order of the "thought identifier". For one thing, writing experts tell us that what comes last in the sentence will be construed by the reader as the most important. But also, in this instance, to start out with the dialogue shocks my system because I don't yet know she's NOT saying it aloud.]
Regardless of the above, you're really making everything come alive!
Jay
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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You have such a soft touch with this story. It seems to flow so effortlessly. It makes me anxious to get back into the story/novel format and away from the play (which, thank God, I now can do)! You have such good control over all your characters. Today, with just a few words, "I notice the tiniest smirk" we see that he is warming to Miranda.
"Dougie, for once, do the right thing. Call your kid." I think as I slide his phone into my back pocket. [Gretchen, consider reversing the order of the "thought identifier". For one thing, writing experts tell us that what comes last in the sentence will be construed by the reader as the most important. But also, in this instance, to start out with the dialogue shocks my system because I don't yet know she's NOT saying it aloud.]
Regardless of the above, you're really making everything come alive!
Jay
Comment Written 25-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much for the help. I'm going to change out the layout pf that thought pattern. I really appreciate the help. Gretchen
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well things seem to be settling into a routine for Miranda
and Waylon. She seems to actually like be the mother figure.
You did a great job, Gretchen. I liked the interaction with
Aaron. Waylon seems to be understanding he needs to be
in school and do his homework. Aaron sounds like a leftover
hippie and doesn't care what others think about him.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Well things seem to be settling into a routine for Miranda
and Waylon. She seems to actually like be the mother figure.
You did a great job, Gretchen. I liked the interaction with
Aaron. Waylon seems to be understanding he needs to be
in school and do his homework. Aaron sounds like a leftover
hippie and doesn't care what others think about him.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 25-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Thank you for these intuitive comments and the wonderful review. I appreciate it.
Gretchen
Comment from Sankey
This was a lovely chapter. So real for a lot of young people. Looks like he is finding some comfort and caring with his stepmom. Wonderful story. Keep it coming. No spags!
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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This was a lovely chapter. So real for a lot of young people. Looks like he is finding some comfort and caring with his stepmom. Wonderful story. Keep it coming. No spags!
Comment Written 25-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Thank you so very much. I'm glad you are continuing to enjoy the story.
Thank you for the exceptional rating.
Gretchen
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nice. Good character development.
i wasn't quite convinced of the hyperbole with respect to doing the truck-fetching errand for Aaron, though.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Very nice. Good character development.
i wasn't quite convinced of the hyperbole with respect to doing the truck-fetching errand for Aaron, though.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much for the kind review. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
It's hard enough for a young boy to be deserted and still come up for air, this Dougie is a slob. But he realise he has a gem in Miranda. This Aaron is an interesting character, you're heading in an interesting direction Gretchen, well dine, great post, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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It's hard enough for a young boy to be deserted and still come up for air, this Dougie is a slob. But he realise he has a gem in Miranda. This Aaron is an interesting character, you're heading in an interesting direction Gretchen, well dine, great post, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 25-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Thanks, Roy, for this great review. I appreciate your kind words.
Gretchen
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Bless you Gretchen
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I like Miranda. She is good hearted in spite of the fact the world is tossing her Lemons at the moment. She is making Lemonade. Wanting to do the right thing for the boy dumped in her lap by an arrogant boyfriend. I hope he calls the boy too, but he probably won't. Well done Gretchen. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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I like Miranda. She is good hearted in spite of the fact the world is tossing her Lemons at the moment. She is making Lemonade. Wanting to do the right thing for the boy dumped in her lap by an arrogant boyfriend. I hope he calls the boy too, but he probably won't. Well done Gretchen. Nancy:)
Comment Written 25-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Nancy, thank you so much for this nice review and the stars. I appreciate the time you took to read and review.
Gretchen
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I am really enjoying your story. I like Miranda a lot. Looking forward to more. Nancy:)
