The Miranda Chronicles
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10 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with this continuing saga, Gretchen.
I missed this chapter due to my internet being down for a day
and a half. Miranda can really pick them. I believe Dougie was
looking for an easy way out to leave the boy. She'll never see him
again. Her boss, Matt, is full of himself, too. I will read the other
chapters in order.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2022
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You did a great job with this continuing saga, Gretchen.
I missed this chapter due to my internet being down for a day
and a half. Miranda can really pick them. I believe Dougie was
looking for an easy way out to leave the boy. She'll never see him
again. Her boss, Matt, is full of himself, too. I will read the other
chapters in order.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 10-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much for reading. I do appreciate it and the review.
Gretchen
Comment from Jay Squires
Hey, I like Miranda! I've known people like her and Rita. I like the plot as it's developing. Sorry I missed the first part. I'll have to circle back and get to it. It's been hectic around Squiresburgh.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2022
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Hey, I like Miranda! I've known people like her and Rita. I like the plot as it's developing. Sorry I missed the first part. I'll have to circle back and get to it. It's been hectic around Squiresburgh.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2022
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I'm sure running a kingdom like Squiresburgh is quite demanding. I'll take what I can get from their ruler. Lol. If you can't go back and read the other parts, no worries. Good luck with the editing. And thanks for the great review.
Gretchen
Comment from Sankey
This is a thoroughly enjoyable, believable story. Can't wait for the next chapter. Make sure you check if a NY other of my chapters are paying still. More coming No spags.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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This is a thoroughly enjoyable, believable story. Can't wait for the next chapter. Make sure you check if a NY other of my chapters are paying still. More coming No spags.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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Thank you. Will definitely check out your profile.
Gretchen
Comment from Spitfire
You sneaked in here that fact that three years have passed. I got lost when the narrator mentions a kid sleeping on the couch. As for Waylon--I think he knocked up one of Miranda's friends and now she's stuck caring for him. I like her clever come backs which make the dialogue fun to read.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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You sneaked in here that fact that three years have passed. I got lost when the narrator mentions a kid sleeping on the couch. As for Waylon--I think he knocked up one of Miranda's friends and now she's stuck caring for him. I like her clever come backs which make the dialogue fun to read.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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Thank you for the wonderful review. Hope this segment didn't leave you too confused. Lol.
Gretchen
Comment from royowen
Poor girl, she's got a work companion that doesn't A from T, and a flat buddy who's walking out, because he claims he's got another job, and worse, he's leaving a dependant behind, Matt calls to tell her to get back to the station, and then fires her. Things have gone berserk, beautifully written Gretchen, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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Poor girl, she's got a work companion that doesn't A from T, and a flat buddy who's walking out, because he claims he's got another job, and worse, he's leaving a dependant behind, Matt calls to tell her to get back to the station, and then fires her. Things have gone berserk, beautifully written Gretchen, blessings Roy
Comment Written 04-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much for the great review. She is definitely having a bad day. Lol.
Gretchen
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I agree Gretchen
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Oh Wow! I felt her stress and the urgency to handle all the situations at once. Her life was falling apart in just less than an hour that morning and she can't stop it. This is very well done, Gretchen. I can't wait to see how she handles it! Nancy:)
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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Oh Wow! I felt her stress and the urgency to handle all the situations at once. Her life was falling apart in just less than an hour that morning and she can't stop it. This is very well done, Gretchen. I can't wait to see how she handles it! Nancy:)
Comment Written 04-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much, Nancy. This was a wonderful review.
Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is not good. Now she has no guy, that's a good thing, and to job, that's a bad thing, and this guy's child to care for. He's never going to send for him. She's stuck with him. I like this story.
I look up to ser Dougie and suitcase go scooting past me and out the door.
(I look up to SEE Dougie???)
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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This is not good. Now she has no guy, that's a good thing, and to job, that's a bad thing, and this guy's child to care for. He's never going to send for him. She's stuck with him. I like this story.
I look up to ser Dougie and suitcase go scooting past me and out the door.
(I look up to SEE Dougie???)
Comment Written 04-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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Thank you. No matter how many times I proof those darn spags get past me. I have since corrected it. Thank you.
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It happens to me too.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Oh, you cruel, cruel novelist, you!!! I am so INTO this book, and you just yank me back to my real life!!! How am I supposed to want to do anything else until I know how this gets resolved? My husband's going to be calling you. "Please, Gretchen! Please post the next chapter. Rachelle's become a lazy load and refuses to get off the couch 'because she's in Limbo' or something," he'll say.
So, in case you couldn't tell, I love this book!! You're so GOOD at writing!!!!!
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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Oh, you cruel, cruel novelist, you!!! I am so INTO this book, and you just yank me back to my real life!!! How am I supposed to want to do anything else until I know how this gets resolved? My husband's going to be calling you. "Please, Gretchen! Please post the next chapter. Rachelle's become a lazy load and refuses to get off the couch 'because she's in Limbo' or something," he'll say.
So, in case you couldn't tell, I love this book!! You're so GOOD at writing!!!!!
Comment Written 04-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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Now im going to be on the couch and my husband will call you. "Don't fill her head with this stuff. She needs to go back to work." LOL. Thank you. Miranda says all the point blank stuff I don't. That's a fun character to write. I can tell you that.
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Um, I'm sorry; were you imagining that was lost on ANYONE?! Lol!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is an excellent part of your story. You paint the characters extremely well. I can see inefficiency, ineptitude and impatience amongst others so clearly. The other thing I found particularly effective was your use of speed to move the plot on (speed of travel, speed of movement such as packing, speed of speech). Very clever.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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This is an excellent part of your story. You paint the characters extremely well. I can see inefficiency, ineptitude and impatience amongst others so clearly. The other thing I found particularly effective was your use of speed to move the plot on (speed of travel, speed of movement such as packing, speed of speech). Very clever.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much. She is a very fly by the seat of your pants type of character. Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Gretchen
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inefficiency, ineptitude and impatience are not all in the same character to me. K
Comment from Susan Newell
GW,
I enjoyed the second installment as much as the first. We are learning more about Miranda's character and her usually sane judgement of character. What magic does this Dougie practice? I was spellbound start to finish. The dialogue is very natural and the story was paced perfectly. Notes follow.
Sue
Don't like puzzles, or scrabble, Pictionary used to send me into a rage. -- Run on sentence. period after Scrabble (Proper noun)
Tell him I had car trouble, hell Rita, I don't care what you tell him." --Run on sentence ==> trouble. Hell Rita
I look up to ser Dougie and suitcase go scooting past me and out the door.-- typo ==> I look up to see
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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GW,
I enjoyed the second installment as much as the first. We are learning more about Miranda's character and her usually sane judgement of character. What magic does this Dougie practice? I was spellbound start to finish. The dialogue is very natural and the story was paced perfectly. Notes follow.
Sue
Don't like puzzles, or scrabble, Pictionary used to send me into a rage. -- Run on sentence. period after Scrabble (Proper noun)
Tell him I had car trouble, hell Rita, I don't care what you tell him." --Run on sentence ==> trouble. Hell Rita
I look up to ser Dougie and suitcase go scooting past me and out the door.-- typo ==> I look up to see
Comment Written 04-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2022
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Thank you. Fixing now before I forget.
Gretchen
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You are very welcome!
