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Youth has its moments and its minuses36 total reviews
Comment from karenina
I long for the days when I thought all things were possible. So, I lament the truth of your verse, written as it is in abba rhyme and capturing as it does the slow descent from the head in the clouds of sweet youth to the fall from grace of the "wise."
Karenina
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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I long for the days when I thought all things were possible. So, I lament the truth of your verse, written as it is in abba rhyme and capturing as it does the slow descent from the head in the clouds of sweet youth to the fall from grace of the "wise."
Karenina
Comment Written 07-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Thank you. Fall from grace, indeed
Comment from Paul McFarland
Very nicely done. The poet is taking the reader on a trip through his/her life. The last stanza sums up things very nicely. You should do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Very nicely done. The poet is taking the reader on a trip through his/her life. The last stanza sums up things very nicely. You should do well in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is an interesting poem with the theme of youthful doubts about life. I had difficulty understanding where the lines took me yet my favorite line is the last one which read, I aged and so was freed to grow! As I grew older I felt more sure of myself and was then able to grow in ways I didn't see before. I suppose that is the crux of what you are saying.
Your author's notes remind us of the pain to remember some of our past. Other parts are a pleasure to remember!
It all depends on what it is, right?
Thank you for reminding us of the shine and sincerity of our youth.
Jesse
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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This is an interesting poem with the theme of youthful doubts about life. I had difficulty understanding where the lines took me yet my favorite line is the last one which read, I aged and so was freed to grow! As I grew older I felt more sure of myself and was then able to grow in ways I didn't see before. I suppose that is the crux of what you are saying.
Your author's notes remind us of the pain to remember some of our past. Other parts are a pleasure to remember!
It all depends on what it is, right?
Thank you for reminding us of the shine and sincerity of our youth.
Jesse
Comment Written 07-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Thanks for you comments. I was remembering youth as being a time when you were supposed to do new and difficult --and sometimes dangerous--things while appearing confident and assured and with more maturity than you could possibly have. Which leaves you forced to rely on role playing and pretense--even to yourself. With maturity it becomes more aelf aware and genuinely thoughtful. Just my experience. You are coorrect though--it does depend on which parts you are thinking of.
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I understand completely where you are coming from with this poem. Just adding my two cents worth in.
Jesse
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I appreciate your thoughts, truly.
Comment from lyenochka
I was wondering how I missed this but I guess it was for the contest? I enjoyed this wonderful and wise remembrance of youth. It is a blessing to be older and "freed to grow" instead of trying to act out roles demanded of us. Loved your ABBA rhymed quatrains. Hope you do well in the contest!
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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I was wondering how I missed this but I guess it was for the contest? I enjoyed this wonderful and wise remembrance of youth. It is a blessing to be older and "freed to grow" instead of trying to act out roles demanded of us. Loved your ABBA rhymed quatrains. Hope you do well in the contest!
Comment Written 07-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Thank you
Comment from Cheryl C.
I've always been partial to poetry that rhymes: to me that will always be a true poem. Yours was very nicely timed and rhymed(see, I did it too!) Bravo!
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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I've always been partial to poetry that rhymes: to me that will always be a true poem. Yours was very nicely timed and rhymed(see, I did it too!) Bravo!
Comment Written 06-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Yes, you did do it ,too! THank you for your kin word and stars.
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
I really liked the rhyme scheme in this well written poem. You expressed well the authority we had as youth. And your last sentence shows the truth of the matter.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2022
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I really liked the rhyme scheme in this well written poem. You expressed well the authority we had as youth. And your last sentence shows the truth of the matter.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2022
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Thank you. Youth does have its points, but
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I remember as a youth I had confidence that I knew a lot. As I aged I realized I didn't know so much. I enjoyed reading and wish you the best of luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2022
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I remember as a youth I had confidence that I knew a lot. As I aged I realized I didn't know so much. I enjoyed reading and wish you the best of luck with the contest.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2022
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Thank you for reading and your kind words and stars
Comment from Cecilia R
Liked your poem and all its words about the arrogance of youth. The poem flowed well and was easy to read and understand. It shows thought and paints a picture with your choices of words. The older we get, the less we know? I wish you well on the contest.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2022
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Liked your poem and all its words about the arrogance of youth. The poem flowed well and was easy to read and understand. It shows thought and paints a picture with your choices of words. The older we get, the less we know? I wish you well on the contest.
Cecilia
Comment Written 06-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your comments and the stars
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You are welcome, you earned it.
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:-)
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Insightful, and now... for the rest of the story. What have you to say of middle age? And then, I'll ask about the senior class. ....................................................
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
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Insightful, and now... for the rest of the story. What have you to say of middle age? And then, I'll ask about the senior class. ....................................................
Comment Written 05-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
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Stay tuned. I may get around to that ,too. Older is more complex, though. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment.
Comment from R.B.Bunn
Short and sweet, but packed with a good amount to reflect on with the energy and ignorance of youth. The first verse in particularity feels like a summary of myself in my teenage and college years. The rhythm is consistent and the rhymes don't feel forced. Well written.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
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Short and sweet, but packed with a good amount to reflect on with the energy and ignorance of youth. The first verse in particularity feels like a summary of myself in my teenage and college years. The rhythm is consistent and the rhymes don't feel forced. Well written.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
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Thank you. It kind of reminds me of myself at that age, too. Appreciate the positive critique