Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

You've got to be winning these contests and I wish I had more to offer here because this is immense! I had a smile on my face from beginning to end. I love this sort of wit and satire. I must bookcase it, please. Well done and good luck! Debbie

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2024

Thanks very much and glad you enjoyed this old piece. Here's a funny story about it: a couple years prior to this version, one of my brothers in the Marine Corps tried rewriting the lyrics of this song and singing it to impress a girl enough to come to the Marine Corps Ball with him. She was some famous Christian artist, although almost as bad a musician as he was, and the lyrics and recording we came up with were so bad that he never heard back from her and we buried the thing. But after hundreds of takes trying to make that video while accompanying him, the song lodged somewhere in my memory and I wrote THIS version in an hour. Winning contests however, that's usually out of my league.

Comment from LyndaS

Exceptional

This is why you need to persevere and guard the gates. You don't need to throw spears or dump boiling oil on intruders. You just need to sing to them. "Pilf'ring white winners absconding with bling..." Lord, that was great. Love your arrival from left field...right bleachers...center mass. Yes, we need you atop the parapets with your steel helmet falling forward over your face while you sing with your sword held high. A bit off kilter but effective. Great entry. Love the contest. HAHA! Lynda

PS. We are very aware of the missile. We are making plans.

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2022

They MIGHT need the boiling oil to stop Chainmail Bob. I was thinking about that while writing this yesterday, haha. This killer review really gets it. Writing this was a wild ride. Thanks so much!

Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko

Excellent

It is happy insurrection indeed; with warm woolen rebels, white dapper Wiccan's, cream coloured cronies, the eagles that cry and cops with compresses serving as via media.

Excellent work. Bravo.

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2022

Thanks Lloyd for the kind review and the stars! Much appreciated!

reply by Lloyd T. Okoko on 08-Jan-2022

Remain Blessed.

Comment from Gee

Excellent

oh, that was a different approach.
Nicely done. I'm not politically knowledgeable to know what all occurred that day.
But as to your poem, I liked the approach and think it will do well in the contest.

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022

Thanks very much Gee. One of my brothers once tried to rewrite the lyrics to woo a girl to go with him to the Marine Corps Ball, and then he made a video of himself singing it (poorly). The results were so embarrassing that he doubled down and paid to promote them on social media. Hopefully this rewrite is even more of a train wreak.