~Stygian Kingdom of Woes~
Death hath no mercy...106 total reviews
Comment from Genya
Dean, my first six of the week. This was some deep and magical poem. The music and the pictures took us on this journey of woe. He waits for a soul. Will it be the young girl who contemplates taking her own life, who will it be. Life certainly is too precious to throw it away. There are so many out there who may disagree. The authors notes told a story, a mythological story of the Charon who waits for anyone who thinks life is not worth living. Excellent poem. Amazing piece of work. Loved it. Genya
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Dean, my first six of the week. This was some deep and magical poem. The music and the pictures took us on this journey of woe. He waits for a soul. Will it be the young girl who contemplates taking her own life, who will it be. Life certainly is too precious to throw it away. There are so many out there who may disagree. The authors notes told a story, a mythological story of the Charon who waits for anyone who thinks life is not worth living. Excellent poem. Amazing piece of work. Loved it. Genya
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
Comment from Aveindha
Extremely powerful poem. Very well written, grwat rythym and flow. You are absolutely right, we should never be afraid to speak to our loved ones when we feel things are not right. Rather take the plunge than live in regret. Very deep thiught provoking. Well done
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Extremely powerful poem. Very well written, grwat rythym and flow. You are absolutely right, we should never be afraid to speak to our loved ones when we feel things are not right. Rather take the plunge than live in regret. Very deep thiught provoking. Well done
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
Comment from padumachitta
Hey Dean...don't be paying the ferry man until he gets ya across...
This hits home for me...I just lost two wonderful people on the same day...half hour a part...in different countries...
I am on the Site to just feel a little different for a moment. I have stories I should post, I have reviews to read to make the money to so so..and yet..does it all really matter?...
I know death is part of life. I am a Buddhist, we look death in the eye, but I am still sad. Death this side of enlightenment seems so final..though rebirth is my belief. I am here and they are not...sigh...
padumachitta
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Hey Dean...don't be paying the ferry man until he gets ya across...
This hits home for me...I just lost two wonderful people on the same day...half hour a part...in different countries...
I am on the Site to just feel a little different for a moment. I have stories I should post, I have reviews to read to make the money to so so..and yet..does it all really matter?...
I know death is part of life. I am a Buddhist, we look death in the eye, but I am still sad. Death this side of enlightenment seems so final..though rebirth is my belief. I am here and they are not...sigh...
padumachitta
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
Comment from BeasPeas
Wow, Dean! You've done it again--and consistently so. Loved this. A dynamic poem with excellent rhyming and message. Good flow. Interesting throughout. Author's note is equally important for parents to be aware of their children's behavior. Pleasant Screams...heh-heh-heh--right back 'atcha'.
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Wow, Dean! You've done it again--and consistently so. Loved this. A dynamic poem with excellent rhyming and message. Good flow. Interesting throughout. Author's note is equally important for parents to be aware of their children's behavior. Pleasant Screams...heh-heh-heh--right back 'atcha'.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
Comment from DR DIP
This my friend is such a poignantly beautiful poem with an exquisite presentation the music is absolutely wonderful and appropriate the words and the rhyme are sublime truly one of your best amongst bests I love to just listen and read your beautiful words I am truly in awe of your wonderful talent Deano its such a pleasure to sit through your productions. that music is so beautiful orchestral piano and such is always hauntingly beautiful I have read and listened to this piece 5 times now and never get sick of it
ARISE SIR DEANO
I kneel before my master!
as always your humble poet rhyming peasant
dip
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This my friend is such a poignantly beautiful poem with an exquisite presentation the music is absolutely wonderful and appropriate the words and the rhyme are sublime truly one of your best amongst bests I love to just listen and read your beautiful words I am truly in awe of your wonderful talent Deano its such a pleasure to sit through your productions. that music is so beautiful orchestral piano and such is always hauntingly beautiful I have read and listened to this piece 5 times now and never get sick of it
ARISE SIR DEANO
I kneel before my master!
as always your humble poet rhyming peasant
dip
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
Comment from Kingsland
You are a very good story teller using poetic devices and language. this is an excellent over all piece of poetic art. Even the pictures chimed in well here. The entire presentation was well thought out and delivered. The is a six star piece of writing all the way... John
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You are a very good story teller using poetic devices and language. this is an excellent over all piece of poetic art. Even the pictures chimed in well here. The entire presentation was well thought out and delivered. The is a six star piece of writing all the way... John
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
Comment from livelylinda
Dean: O.K., this made me scream and they were not pleasant! The total experience of these words, music and pictures certainly brings to mind those who have committed suicide. "Committed suicide" . . . that old phrase sounds like you have jay-walked or stole an apple off the corner vendor. But, so much more involved. I have been at that preface twice that I recall. It is almost as if you no longer have control of your life and something else is making the decision for you. This is a brilliant piece. Linda
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Dean: O.K., this made me scream and they were not pleasant! The total experience of these words, music and pictures certainly brings to mind those who have committed suicide. "Committed suicide" . . . that old phrase sounds like you have jay-walked or stole an apple off the corner vendor. But, so much more involved. I have been at that preface twice that I recall. It is almost as if you no longer have control of your life and something else is making the decision for you. This is a brilliant piece. Linda
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
It could be a soldier -- a family's lone son;
yet perhaps, he'll embrace you alone.
Whomever he chooses, when all's said and done,
his icy grip, they'll feel deep in their bones.
another of your remarkable poems, Dean - most impressive. -
the rhythm and rhyme flowing perfectly and the pictures fit
exactly.
We all need to listen to our children no matter what their age, including friends or a member of the family who are in need of help - so many parents are busy with work and their own life that they often miss the signs that their loved-one is in trouble and needs loving support.
margaret
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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It could be a soldier -- a family's lone son;
yet perhaps, he'll embrace you alone.
Whomever he chooses, when all's said and done,
his icy grip, they'll feel deep in their bones.
another of your remarkable poems, Dean - most impressive. -
the rhythm and rhyme flowing perfectly and the pictures fit
exactly.
We all need to listen to our children no matter what their age, including friends or a member of the family who are in need of help - so many parents are busy with work and their own life that they often miss the signs that their loved-one is in trouble and needs loving support.
margaret
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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That's very true,Margaret, and many people get extremely down, especially during the holidays. At a time when we should all be sharing love with family, friends and loved ones, they feel at their lowest because they have no one to share theirs with any longer.
As always, I truly appreciate your support, and sincerely thank you for your insight and kind thoughtful comments.
Have a happy holidays, and a very merry Christmas. :}
~Dean
Comment from adewpearl
as always, effective presentation of your poem
solid use of abab rhyming including proximate rhymes
good alliteration in phrases like fleshless face and soon a statistic
vivid and mood-creating descriptive detail, like in fleshless face :-)
compelling illustrative examples of those whom death might choose next with his icy grip
Brooke
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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as always, effective presentation of your poem
solid use of abab rhyming including proximate rhymes
good alliteration in phrases like fleshless face and soon a statistic
vivid and mood-creating descriptive detail, like in fleshless face :-)
compelling illustrative examples of those whom death might choose next with his icy grip
Brooke
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your comments, Brooke. As always, I appreciate them.
~Dean
Comment from Michaelk
Wonderful poem, yet again. It has a subtle tone to it that rings less of horror and more of warning. Your rhymes were great, with an internal thrown in for good measure. The rhythm was also great and flowed quite well. I'm just not sure about the last two lines. I'm not sure they're needed. Just my opinion.
Wonderful, creepy mood, great subject, great poem once again.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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Wonderful poem, yet again. It has a subtle tone to it that rings less of horror and more of warning. Your rhymes were great, with an internal thrown in for good measure. The rhythm was also great and flowed quite well. I'm just not sure about the last two lines. I'm not sure they're needed. Just my opinion.
Wonderful, creepy mood, great subject, great poem once again.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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Thanks you for your comments about the poem, Michael. I appreciate it, as always. ~Dean