~Stygian Kingdom of Woes~
Death hath no mercy...106 total reviews
Comment from rod007
An excellent poem and creepy with these lines:
"A bony fist rests 'neath his osseous chin--
as he ponders who'll be his next choice."
Well done, Dean.
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An excellent poem and creepy with these lines:
"A bony fist rests 'neath his osseous chin--
as he ponders who'll be his next choice."
Well done, Dean.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
Comment from ravenblack
" ...beneath his osseous chin" - never be afraid to make others run for their dictionaries. The perfect word is just that- the perfect word. We all have encountered Charon's grip at one time or another and do need to pay attention to the signs. And once seeing them, be persistent even if it means being an unwanted pest. I lost a friend to suicide partially because I was not in his face enough. Excellent poem.
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" ...beneath his osseous chin" - never be afraid to make others run for their dictionaries. The perfect word is just that- the perfect word. We all have encountered Charon's grip at one time or another and do need to pay attention to the signs. And once seeing them, be persistent even if it means being an unwanted pest. I lost a friend to suicide partially because I was not in his face enough. Excellent poem.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
Comment from Drew Delaney
Awesome, Dean. You are the bestest. Love it. The presentation is totally awesome, but the words exceed it all. I appreciate the author notes as they help to understand a world I've never heard. Greek mythology is something I never delved into.
Good luck with this and blessings to you my friend,
Drew xox
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Awesome, Dean. You are the bestest. Love it. The presentation is totally awesome, but the words exceed it all. I appreciate the author notes as they help to understand a world I've never heard. Greek mythology is something I never delved into.
Good luck with this and blessings to you my friend,
Drew xox
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
Comment from Ekim777
Our poet seems to be a trifle eccentric in taste but he crafts a fine if moody poem and weaves some good, if macabre images together. e.g. "A bony hand rests 'neath his osseous chin..." And of course a picture speaks a thousand words but we soon learn that our poet loves the English language which draws our attention. I think we can detect elements of Poe.
Ekim777
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Our poet seems to be a trifle eccentric in taste but he crafts a fine if moody poem and weaves some good, if macabre images together. e.g. "A bony hand rests 'neath his osseous chin..." And of course a picture speaks a thousand words but we soon learn that our poet loves the English language which draws our attention. I think we can detect elements of Poe.
Ekim777
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I know when my boys were growing up I got accused of asking too many questions. I told them that's what moms do. They laughed and said I didn't need to be such a good mom. You are right we need to ask questions. Your poem it's on a very real subject. GREAT JOB!!!
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I know when my boys were growing up I got accused of asking too many questions. I told them that's what moms do. They laughed and said I didn't need to be such a good mom. You are right we need to ask questions. Your poem it's on a very real subject. GREAT JOB!!!
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
Comment from acerisestory
Another well written and impactful poem, Dean. Your words have an ominous ring to them. Your notes are helpful in enlightening your readers. Thank you!
Your rhyming, both perfect, and proximate, is well done and you've made wonderful use of alliteration with silently sits, fleshless face, whomever when. Somehow, "hopped" doesn't work for me (too casual, perhaps?). I might choose "embarked," instead. Just a thought; you are the master poet here.
Well done, my friend. Have a great Sunday! Alana
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Another well written and impactful poem, Dean. Your words have an ominous ring to them. Your notes are helpful in enlightening your readers. Thank you!
Your rhyming, both perfect, and proximate, is well done and you've made wonderful use of alliteration with silently sits, fleshless face, whomever when. Somehow, "hopped" doesn't work for me (too casual, perhaps?). I might choose "embarked," instead. Just a thought; you are the master poet here.
Well done, my friend. Have a great Sunday! Alana
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
Comment from emrpoems
Another fantastic presentation of a dark poem. however, there is a strong message here.
We are our brother's keeper and sometimes death can be avoided i we take the time to observe those who might be in danger.
Solid use of abab rhymes
Good use of alliteration
Vivid imagery created
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Another fantastic presentation of a dark poem. however, there is a strong message here.
We are our brother's keeper and sometimes death can be avoided i we take the time to observe those who might be in danger.
Solid use of abab rhymes
Good use of alliteration
Vivid imagery created
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Dean,
Another great presentation of an all too familiar topic these days. One's demons can be so overwhelming through depression for whatever reasons it may occur, and with the end result devastating.
I think of Robin Williams, a beloved star who had it all---materialistically, though his demons were far-outreaching.
Such devastation to families left behind from those committing suicide. You encapsulate the topic very well.
As always, nicely presented.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*.*)
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Hi, Dean,
Another great presentation of an all too familiar topic these days. One's demons can be so overwhelming through depression for whatever reasons it may occur, and with the end result devastating.
I think of Robin Williams, a beloved star who had it all---materialistically, though his demons were far-outreaching.
Such devastation to families left behind from those committing suicide. You encapsulate the topic very well.
As always, nicely presented.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*.*)
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
Comment from evilynne
What a frightening and thought provoking work. It is enough to scare you to death! The background information is most interesting. Also, I hope that many who read this will, indeed, take action if anyone they know is in emotional distress. As you may know (if you reviewed any of my recent work), my son-in-law was recently taken from us totally unexpectedly. I hope his passage into the afterlife was not so sinister (he died of illness). Evi
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What a frightening and thought provoking work. It is enough to scare you to death! The background information is most interesting. Also, I hope that many who read this will, indeed, take action if anyone they know is in emotional distress. As you may know (if you reviewed any of my recent work), my son-in-law was recently taken from us totally unexpectedly. I hope his passage into the afterlife was not so sinister (he died of illness). Evi
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
Comment from thee-name
Excellent poem. Lines rhyme with writing.
HE SILENTLY SITS ON A THRONE MADE OF BONE
DOWN IN HIS STYGIAN KINGDOM OF WOES
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Excellent poem. Lines rhyme with writing.
HE SILENTLY SITS ON A THRONE MADE OF BONE
DOWN IN HIS STYGIAN KINGDOM OF WOES
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014