The Song Thrush
A Ballad68 total reviews
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Wonderful Tony. I love your story in a
poem. It is the product of a vivid
imagination and a productive mind.
Well done Tony. This should be a winner!
:<) Nancy
reply by the author on 03-May-2016
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Wonderful Tony. I love your story in a
poem. It is the product of a vivid
imagination and a productive mind.
Well done Tony. This should be a winner!
:<) Nancy
Comment Written 03-May-2016
reply by the author on 03-May-2016
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Very many thanks for your kind review, Nancy. So glad you enjoyed this piece of invented folklore! Tony
Comment from Andrewajgblue
I loved this poem so much, the story telling was excellent, as was the rhyming, I felt the poem had lovely ebb and flow the pace was perfect, I really enjoyed it, this is an excellent entry and I wish you luck,
Andrew
reply by the author on 03-May-2016
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I loved this poem so much, the story telling was excellent, as was the rhyming, I felt the poem had lovely ebb and flow the pace was perfect, I really enjoyed it, this is an excellent entry and I wish you luck,
Andrew
Comment Written 03-May-2016
reply by the author on 03-May-2016
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Very many thanks for your very kind review, Andrew, and for the six stars and good luck wishes. So glad you enjoyed this piece of invented folklore! Tony
Comment from MissMerri
I love the way you tell this tale, and am amazed that it is solely from your imagination. You truly are a creative one, Tony! It is a captivating story and so beautifully told in flawless meter and rhyme. The author notes added so much information too... I loved learning all that!
One of the most visual and beautiful of your stanzas is this one:
"At dawn upon the keening wind,
A white-tailed eagle flew
And spied a glint of gold upon
The silver veil of dew."
Your skillful use of assonance is also very appealing. Excellent example: "so lithe, alive with dragonflies"
All of it though, is very strong and totally appealing. I won't be a bit surprised to see this entry among the winners.
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
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I love the way you tell this tale, and am amazed that it is solely from your imagination. You truly are a creative one, Tony! It is a captivating story and so beautifully told in flawless meter and rhyme. The author notes added so much information too... I loved learning all that!
One of the most visual and beautiful of your stanzas is this one:
"At dawn upon the keening wind,
A white-tailed eagle flew
And spied a glint of gold upon
The silver veil of dew."
Your skillful use of assonance is also very appealing. Excellent example: "so lithe, alive with dragonflies"
All of it though, is very strong and totally appealing. I won't be a bit surprised to see this entry among the winners.
Comment Written 03-May-2016
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
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What a lovely review, MissMerrie. Very much appreciated! I'm so glad that you enjoyed this one. Ideas for it have been buzzing around in my head for quite a while. Thank you very much for the six stars!
Comment from TAB_that's me
'scree' - I like that word:) and great to rhyme it with 'mystery'.
This is kind of a fantasy story but told very well.
Lovely sound and visual imagery throughout. I especially like 'the silver veil of dew'.
teresa
reply by the author on 03-May-2016
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'scree' - I like that word:) and great to rhyme it with 'mystery'.
This is kind of a fantasy story but told very well.
Lovely sound and visual imagery throughout. I especially like 'the silver veil of dew'.
teresa
Comment Written 03-May-2016
reply by the author on 03-May-2016
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Very many thanks for your kind review, Teresa. So glad you enjoyed this piece of invented folklore! Tony
Comment from Lisa Deverick
What a captivating story you tell here with your words in this poem. A very enjoyable read. I am always appreciative of a writers explanation at the bottom of a poem- I do love learning new things. Thanks. well done
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reply by the author on 03-May-2016
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What a captivating story you tell here with your words in this poem. A very enjoyable read. I am always appreciative of a writers explanation at the bottom of a poem- I do love learning new things. Thanks. well done
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Comment Written 03-May-2016
reply by the author on 03-May-2016
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Very many thanks for your kind review, Lisa. So glad you enjoyed this piece of invented folklore! Tony
Comment from pamelaperron
vocabulary entwined with subtle rhymes. couldn't ask for more!.... if I had to change anything it'd be 'an elfin mystery' to a 'mystery to 'surmise' keep it up...pamela
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
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vocabulary entwined with subtle rhymes. couldn't ask for more!.... if I had to change anything it'd be 'an elfin mystery' to a 'mystery to 'surmise' keep it up...pamela
Comment Written 03-May-2016
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
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Thanks very much for your six star award for this one, Pamela. Ideas for it have been buzzing around in my head for some time! I appreciate your suggestion, which is a good one. However, I 'm tied to the 'elfin mystery' by the rhyme scheme of the two shorter lines in each verse, a requirement of the ballad form.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written ballad. Good imaginative ideas which I believed to be true until I read your notes of course. You had my attention all the way.
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reply by the author on 03-May-2016
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A very well-written ballad. Good imaginative ideas which I believed to be true until I read your notes of course. You had my attention all the way.
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Comment Written 03-May-2016
reply by the author on 03-May-2016
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Very many thanks for your kind review, Sandra. So glad you enjoyed this piece of invented folklore! Tony
Comment from Douglas Paul
This is really well done, I love the legend you created. The rhyme and tempo are very good making this a smooth read. The story is enchanting, Very creative, Tony
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
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This is really well done, I love the legend you created. The rhyme and tempo are very good making this a smooth read. The story is enchanting, Very creative, Tony
Comment Written 03-May-2016
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
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Thanks very much for your six star award for this one, Douglas. Ideas for it have been buzzing around in my head for some time!