Comment from Trybuck

Excellent

Greed has a need for more
Makes one drift from the shore
Killed your wife, took her life
Now she's back, giving you strife
Maybe greed should have died first
then you wouldn't be experiencing the worst

Well done, Buck

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2014

Thanks so much, Buck. I'm glad you enjoyed this, and as always, I appreciate your review. :}

~Dean

Comment from RPSaxena

Excellent

Hello Dean Kuch,
Charming as well as instructive piece of Horror and Thriller Poetry!
Wording is simple i.e. easy to understand as well as impressive.
Smooth and captivating flow with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
"....hatred opens the pits of Hell..."
Excellent!

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2014

Thanks so much, RP. I'm glad you enjoyed this, and as always, I appreciate your review. :}

~Dean

Comment from krys123

Exceptional

Dean; is there a possibility to go to fan story classic? For what I have read is sufficient enough for me to do you find that your poem is exceptionally done well in any other means to improve it would just add to the exceptional ability that it already has. I probably would have to log out and then log back in to get the classic form?
Anyway I found your rhyming to be exceptionally done and neither of your rhymes were forced nor labored and even helped with the rhythmic flow for this poem is been more beneficial if read out loud and with a theatrical reference to be articulated.
Definitely your imagery was so descriptive and exquisitely expressive throughout your writing and your inventiveness and creativeness show your resourceful imagination. The alliteration that I did find was in your title, as far as I know. And the pictures are very effective and also very impressive and definitely constituted a great representation of your poem.
You are there mastery magician of horror and you do it so well.
Alex

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2014

Thank you Alex, I appreciate that. All you do to get to FanStory Classic is go to the homepage, and look to the upper left, near the top, and right next to the "Home" tab. There is a cog-like icon there. Hold your cursor over it. A drop down menu will appear, and at the bottom of it you will see FanStory Classic. Click on it, and there you are.

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

I had a similar problem with text, only mine did show, just in the wrong color (grey, not black). It also turns everything in italics into grey.

This is frighteningly real-sounding, man - except for the fact that someone comes back from the grave, of course (hehe). As always, vastly entertaining.

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2014

Thanks so much, Dawn. I'm glad you enjoyed this, and as always, I appreciate your review. :}

~Dean

Comment from Linda Engel

Excellent

He fell into Hell, It served him right. A drink in hand; he killed his wife. The money came quickly, his smile was bright. too bad he never made it through the night.
great graphics and clever piece. He under estimated a woman scorned. I always wonder why men think they can get away with murder.

Simple and terrific imagery. Easy flow of rhyme with excellent story telling.

P.S. Do you watch American Horror Show on FX?

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2014

Yep, I've been watching it since it came on FX three years ago, Linda. And this season, in my opinion anyhow, with the creepy clown is the best one yet!

Thanks so much, Linda. I'm glad you enjoyed this, and as always, I appreciate your review. :}

~Dean

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

I don't know how to read it on F S Classics so I'm going to have to say I enjoyed this tale of terror anyway. The Poisoned Parasol in the hands of a woman seeking revenge really does make for a deadly read. Good one Dean.

valda.

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2014

Valda, Pearl, and thank you!

~Dean :}

Comment from Zinnia48

Excellent

Hi, Dean--Edgar Allen Poe would be so proud of you! What a great horror story/poem. A universal theme, for sure, but your story, rhythm and rhyme make it brand new! I learned a brand new word (chthonic)which I was sure was a typo.....My favorite lines were the last: Hatred opened the pits of hell. she hissed and in I fell. Great imaginative write! caroline

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2014

Thanks very much, Caroline. I truly appreciate your kind and thoughtful review.

~Dean

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

"I return to bring you back."

See? That's what you get for poisoning an old lady, so watch it with me, buster. I won't drink tea with you, that's for sure. LOL! Very well done in your favorite genre, Dean. Not gory either. I actually LIKED this one. :)

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2014

Thank you very much, Phyllis, and I apologize for the delay in responding. I try to refrain from blood, guts and gore as much as possible. I'm not a big fan of slasher flicks and such.

I sincerely appreciate your thoughtful review, and I'm very pleased that you enjoyed reading it. :)

~Dean

Comment from Drew Delaney

Exceptional

This is so much better in the original than the new version of FanStory. I thought the old version of the woman and the returning was quite horrid. How that parasol twirls and whirls and churls. Egads! Nice job!

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2014

Thank you, Drew. I am very happy that you enjoyed the piece. I really appreciate your sensational rating and review, and I apologize for the delayed reply.

Thanks so much again! ~Dean

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I'm sorry you're still having problems with the new version of FS. You still managed to select the perfect pictures for your story poem. I admired all of your rhymes and cadence. As the old saying goes--beware a woman scorned. I'll remember the facts about cyanide for future reference! Have a great new week- Joan

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2014