Dodgy Desiderata
A hoodlum's rules for life72 total reviews
Comment from missy98writer
Poet,
Your ABC poem is creative and extremely well written with colorful imagery.
The art work you used is priceless.
You used excellent rhyme, use of alliteration and great metaphors.
I enjoyed your lines:
Protect and serve yourself's the way to wealth accumulation.
Quintessential qualities are quietness and quickness.
Remember to reward yourself; denial's just a sickness.
Some people don't deserve their wealth; here endeth the first lesson.
The only partners that you need are buddies Smith and Wesson.
Unless you want to lose your loot don't bet on cards or dice.
Versatility is good; don't rob the same bank twice.
Wear a balaclava when a public place you rob.
Xanax helps if anxious before a tricky job.
I wish you good luck in the contest.
I'd recommend your poem to other reviewers.
Missy.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Poet,
Your ABC poem is creative and extremely well written with colorful imagery.
The art work you used is priceless.
You used excellent rhyme, use of alliteration and great metaphors.
I enjoyed your lines:
Protect and serve yourself's the way to wealth accumulation.
Quintessential qualities are quietness and quickness.
Remember to reward yourself; denial's just a sickness.
Some people don't deserve their wealth; here endeth the first lesson.
The only partners that you need are buddies Smith and Wesson.
Unless you want to lose your loot don't bet on cards or dice.
Versatility is good; don't rob the same bank twice.
Wear a balaclava when a public place you rob.
Xanax helps if anxious before a tricky job.
I wish you good luck in the contest.
I'd recommend your poem to other reviewers.
Missy.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Thanks for the nice review and generous stars.
Comment from JennyB32
Yes, everyone needs to know how to live successfully like a criminal! Your poem has been one to really stand out for me today. I absolutely love it. It made me chuckle. Your referencing Xanax to an anxious criminal was beyond surprising, it was ingenious!
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Yes, everyone needs to know how to live successfully like a criminal! Your poem has been one to really stand out for me today. I absolutely love it. It made me chuckle. Your referencing Xanax to an anxious criminal was beyond surprising, it was ingenious!
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Thanks, Jenny - glad you enjoyed - let me know if you need any more tips for a life of crime...
Comment from Elizabeth Daniels
Sounds like a lot of good advice for someone who, perhaps, is not exactly on the correct side of the law. LOL Elizabeth Daniels.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Sounds like a lot of good advice for someone who, perhaps, is not exactly on the correct side of the law. LOL Elizabeth Daniels.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Elizabeth thanks for the nice review and generous stars.
Comment from petervs
To be honest, I have seen better entries, but yours is actually humorous!!!!!! =) I like your q and x words, they stand out amongst the others! good luck with the contest. ;-)
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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To be honest, I have seen better entries, but yours is actually humorous!!!!!! =) I like your q and x words, they stand out amongst the others! good luck with the contest. ;-)
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Thank you, I think. You don't say why other entries were better or what mine lacked....
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hahaha, it is an interesting piece, i really did like it, but, your rules for life are not exactly what I would follow, that is why I said there are better ones out there, for instance, some said dream for D, but you said, don't turn your back on smilin' Jack! It is funny but it is not a life rule!!! but that is just me, but I did still appreciate it, it was fun to read!! ;-)
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If you're a criminal then not turning your back on the prison 'boss' is a definite life rule (with a possible second meaning as well) - more practical for an inmate than dreaming and certainly more enjoyable.
My 'rules' are obviously not ment to be taken too seriously - glad you enjoyed.
Comment from ennahanid
This is unbelievably clever and just so fummy and I don't have a 6 left to give you and I apologize for that...a virtual 10 and a standing ovation. An amazing read - loved it - Dinah
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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This is unbelievably clever and just so fummy and I don't have a 6 left to give you and I apologize for that...a virtual 10 and a standing ovation. An amazing read - loved it - Dinah
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Thanks, Dinah - I will take the virtual ten and your very kind words.
Comment from dmt1967
This is a very well written poem the picture and the poem both made me laugh the bit about men with base ball bats cracked me up good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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This is a very well written poem the picture and the poem both made me laugh the bit about men with base ball bats cracked me up good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Thanks for the nice review and generous stars. I always appreciate a review that tells me I raised a good laugh.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
We should be allowed to give 7's! What a great poem. It's well-written and flows smoothly. It's also very clever and entertaining. Skillfully done
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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We should be allowed to give 7's! What a great poem. It's well-written and flows smoothly. It's also very clever and entertaining. Skillfully done
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Thank you, Janice. Six stars will do nicely. I have discovered FanStory can give seven stars - I got that once for winning a contes.
Comment from bonnie composanto
This is a delightful and funny poem about a hoodlum's rules of life. The words flow so well and using the ABCs to tell the story is priceless.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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This is a delightful and funny poem about a hoodlum's rules of life. The words flow so well and using the ABCs to tell the story is priceless.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Thanks for the nice review and generous stars.
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you are welcome
Comment from nomi338
Only five stars for you, because you advocate larceny, you bad guy you. LOL. Seriously, your poem is an absolute treat, not only did it follow the rules, it enlightened and entertained all the way through. I laughed the entire time I was reading it. Good work.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Only five stars for you, because you advocate larceny, you bad guy you. LOL. Seriously, your poem is an absolute treat, not only did it follow the rules, it enlightened and entertained all the way through. I laughed the entire time I was reading it. Good work.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Thank you - I always like it when a reviewer says I raised a good laugh.
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was a funny poem. You covered all the bases and I will not ask how you know so much. The flow was good , the rhythm was good and I thoroughly enjoyed it. Nice job.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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This was a funny poem. You covered all the bases and I will not ask how you know so much. The flow was good , the rhythm was good and I thoroughly enjoyed it. Nice job.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2012
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Could be I read plenty of crime novels - they have a lot of those in the prison library....