Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Fairy Playground"A collection of my children's poems
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Comment from KC
Well done Steve. Really enjoyed this - great topic (they all do exist I am sure!). Flows so smoothly, the rhyme is perfect and the imagery spot on. This is the sort of poem to frame and put on the wall with a suitable picture - the one you have chosen is just perfect. Well done!
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Well done Steve. Really enjoyed this - great topic (they all do exist I am sure!). Flows so smoothly, the rhyme is perfect and the imagery spot on. This is the sort of poem to frame and put on the wall with a suitable picture - the one you have chosen is just perfect. Well done!
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Thanks, KC, for the kind review and the six stars. This one was a bit special, but I don't know quite where it came from - fairt-dust perhaps.
Steve
Comment from adewpearl
strong rhyming couplets enhance this lovely fantasy scene, Steve.
Vivid descriptive detail of these fairies riding bumble bees and filling the glade with their tinkling laughter :-)
I love all the creatures you include in their playful activities.
Nice use of alliteration, too.
This is just delightful - I'll have to share it with my fairy-loving daughter :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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strong rhyming couplets enhance this lovely fantasy scene, Steve.
Vivid descriptive detail of these fairies riding bumble bees and filling the glade with their tinkling laughter :-)
I love all the creatures you include in their playful activities.
Nice use of alliteration, too.
This is just delightful - I'll have to share it with my fairy-loving daughter :-) Brooke
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Thanks, Brooke. This one just came out of the blue - not my usual cup of tea, as you may know!
Actually, I would be interested in a child's reaction to this - Oops, there I go assuming that the fairy-loving daughter is still a child...
Steve
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My fairy-loving daughter is 29, married and a nanny to little two year old : -)
Comment from Enrique28
What a superb verse this is! A beautiful run through a world of fantasy. It reads smoothly, and it's filled with poetic tones. Your first stanza sets up the mood perfectly with fairies that ride on bumble-bees, and it's nicely wrapped up in the end when spirits all, drift off to dreams. Well done!
Enrique
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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What a superb verse this is! A beautiful run through a world of fantasy. It reads smoothly, and it's filled with poetic tones. Your first stanza sets up the mood perfectly with fairies that ride on bumble-bees, and it's nicely wrapped up in the end when spirits all, drift off to dreams. Well done!
Enrique
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Thank you, Enrique - I am so glad you enjoyed my magical little piece. It is not my usual style at all, so I am pleased to get positive reactions.
Steve
Comment from Dutchie
What a wonderful poem, I will be quite lyrical!
Great choice of words and beautiful imagination.If you close your eyes you can see it all in front of you, especially the fairies riding on bumble-bees. Great job. Fia
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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What a wonderful poem, I will be quite lyrical!
Great choice of words and beautiful imagination.If you close your eyes you can see it all in front of you, especially the fairies riding on bumble-bees. Great job. Fia
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Thanks, Fia.
This is not my usual thing and I had to work a bit harder to pull it together into an end product that satisfied me, but it has received great revies so the effort was worthwhile. I did specifically try for the sensory appeal so thanks for your feedback on that.
Steve
Comment from the blue pixel
A little bit of fanciful fairy and forest delight Steve. You are definitely showing your femiine side in this piece and you took me back to being 11 years ago, acting the part of the Fairy to my 11 year olf Puck in front of the Victorian Shakespearean Society and all these awful people did was bury their heads in their books, just waiting for two little kids to make a mistake in Midsummer Night's Dream. Your poem was just beautiful and whimsical and thoroughly delightful. xx Carol
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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A little bit of fanciful fairy and forest delight Steve. You are definitely showing your femiine side in this piece and you took me back to being 11 years ago, acting the part of the Fairy to my 11 year olf Puck in front of the Victorian Shakespearean Society and all these awful people did was bury their heads in their books, just waiting for two little kids to make a mistake in Midsummer Night's Dream. Your poem was just beautiful and whimsical and thoroughly delightful. xx Carol
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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I think I have surprised a few of my regulars with this fluffy piece! It did work out well, though.
Strangely enough, I was not specifically thinking about Midsummer Night's Dream, although I do know the play quite well. I have never acted in it as you have, but I did write a computer program on it some years ago.
Steve
Comment from KiwiGal
Now you're starting to worry me! This doesn't seem like the thoughts of a Real Kiwi Bloke (who's been in Aus....).
This is magical, lyrical..... Yin-inspired. The background colour - and the artwork - is also perfect.
I gave you Exceptional for your last work ..I should have kept it for this one (only 5s left). This should have been entered in the Show Me contest.
You have many facets to you - or you've been smoking de gunja a bit too much, living as you do in the Back of Beyond.
I wonder if your Description is a little nod (crack) at our last conversation on your dogs' (or more likely, yours!) favourite pastime.... I feel you are in disguise however.
I'm still a bit gobsmacked. Are there any chemicals in that cane factory smoke.....?
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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Now you're starting to worry me! This doesn't seem like the thoughts of a Real Kiwi Bloke (who's been in Aus....).
This is magical, lyrical..... Yin-inspired. The background colour - and the artwork - is also perfect.
I gave you Exceptional for your last work ..I should have kept it for this one (only 5s left). This should have been entered in the Show Me contest.
You have many facets to you - or you've been smoking de gunja a bit too much, living as you do in the Back of Beyond.
I wonder if your Description is a little nod (crack) at our last conversation on your dogs' (or more likely, yours!) favourite pastime.... I feel you are in disguise however.
I'm still a bit gobsmacked. Are there any chemicals in that cane factory smoke.....?
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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Back to school tomorrow - perhaps I'm cracking under the pressure - you may notice me trying different things - I'm not really straying from my roots, just experimenting. Here, I was going for 'Pretty' or maybe 'PRETTY' - couldn't see any suitable contest coming up so just posted it anyway...
Normal transmission will be resumed sometime.
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Wal it's pretty sum'pin', thass for shewer.
Whatever - you've succeeded. I've forgotten if you're an English teacher or not. If so, I would seriously suggest that your talents are wasted where you are; you probably should be lecturing in a university ... although maybe not - if you can influence kids at a young age, they'll go on to be better English graduates the other end.
Comment from mumsyone
I enjoyed this playful look at fairies riding on bumblebees and pixies dancing and shimmering. Good rhyme and meter lend to a smooth flow and a fun read.
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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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I enjoyed this playful look at fairies riding on bumblebees and pixies dancing and shimmering. Good rhyme and meter lend to a smooth flow and a fun read.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Steve
