Maladies of Magnitude
A (too) quiet, quaint little village...84 total reviews
Comment from Irish Rain
Well this is quite creepy, can you imagine this happening to you, and the one person who can help, seems diseased also....so, for his repulsed attitude, he dies. I wouldn't want to stumble across this little town...bet he won't be a 'ranger' in the next life!!! Your rhymes within rhymes are awesome! Grand poem Mr. Dean, blessings....
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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Well this is quite creepy, can you imagine this happening to you, and the one person who can help, seems diseased also....so, for his repulsed attitude, he dies. I wouldn't want to stumble across this little town...bet he won't be a 'ranger' in the next life!!! Your rhymes within rhymes are awesome! Grand poem Mr. Dean, blessings....
Comment Written 09-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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Hello, Judy.
Thank so much for taking the time to read and review this.
Your kind comments and most generous six star rating are sincerely appreciated.
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You're most welcome!
Comment from mermaids
Your story in poetic form, is better than Stephen King's works. I had chills reading your words and the scene is very clear. "I'd been blinded by my sin" is a strong line with a message. How often in life are we blinded by our sin. Excellent poetic form and tale to behold.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2016
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Your story in poetic form, is better than Stephen King's works. I had chills reading your words and the scene is very clear. "I'd been blinded by my sin" is a strong line with a message. How often in life are we blinded by our sin. Excellent poetic form and tale to behold.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2016
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Thanks for reading, Elaine.
I appreciate it.
~Dean
Comment from Mastery
Great job here again, DeanO. Everything about this presentationis solid gold. I particularly liked your use of all those strong verbs in the poem like:
"As I stood there gasping, wheezing, it grew cold, I shivered, freezing;
there was nothing nice or pleasing in this vile Devil's den.
Tho' I sensed he longed to help me, I winced once, he flinched quite plainly.
When I uttered, "most ungainly..." eyes rolled back, he scratched his chin."
Good job, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2016
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Great job here again, DeanO. Everything about this presentationis solid gold. I particularly liked your use of all those strong verbs in the poem like:
"As I stood there gasping, wheezing, it grew cold, I shivered, freezing;
there was nothing nice or pleasing in this vile Devil's den.
Tho' I sensed he longed to help me, I winced once, he flinched quite plainly.
When I uttered, "most ungainly..." eyes rolled back, he scratched his chin."
Good job, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 09-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2016
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Thanks for reading, Mr. Hartson.
Take care, have a good week.
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Mister Hartson????? What the hell? LOL..Bob
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I'm sorry. That is your last name, is it not, lol?
Thanks again.
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Yeah it is, but you've never addressed me as usch before?? Unusual I thought. :) Bob
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I'm in a rather formal mood today, I suppose.
I nearly called you "sir."
~Dean
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Oh no! Not sir! LOL. Bob
Comment from Susanjohn
Deano!!! so good!!! yes, this is what happens when we judge people!!! or something like it...actually working on a creepy poem myself... oh boy!!!
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2016
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Deano!!! so good!!! yes, this is what happens when we judge people!!! or something like it...actually working on a creepy poem myself... oh boy!!!
Comment Written 09-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2016
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Thanks very much for reading, Susan.
I appreciate your time as well as your comments.
Take care, and have a wonderful week ahead.
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lots of appointments for lilly this week..so just know im reading all your stuff and smiling,gasping,holding my breath, melting or simply trying to wrap my brain around what is going on in your head.
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:-p
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Oh, no. Don't try to wrap your mind around anything going on in my head, Susan.
It's very dark and dangerous in there, heh-heh...
Best to keep a safe distance away...
~Dean
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Oh great! just tell me something I can't do!!..that's like a dang magnet!!! lol ( you tender heart boy you)...fine, ill keep you secret.. :-)
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I'm like Dr. Jekyll and Mister Hyde, Susan.
You never know from one day to the next which one is going to show up.
Why do you think I've been divorced twice?
I'm not all that "nice", only when I wanna be.
Take care, and thanks again.
~Dean
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why do i think???? they weren't good enough for you. :-) later deano.
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Haha...keep clinging to that belief, LOL.
Later.
~Dean
Comment from Darkhorse555
when i saw the picture and heard the night chanting of the souls laughing at fate living in that cold den your pen sang out excellent piece pal
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2016
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when i saw the picture and heard the night chanting of the souls laughing at fate living in that cold den your pen sang out excellent piece pal
Comment Written 09-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2016
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Thanks for reading, Liam.
Have a wonderful week ahead.
~Dean
Comment from Pantygynt
Until I read your notes I had it down as the Black Death aka bubonic plague but leprosy is pretty ghasly too even if it isnt as contagious as was once thought. There is a splendid rhythm running through this. I can't put a name to it but it forces you ever onward.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2016
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Until I read your notes I had it down as the Black Death aka bubonic plague but leprosy is pretty ghasly too even if it isnt as contagious as was once thought. There is a splendid rhythm running through this. I can't put a name to it but it forces you ever onward.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2016
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It's written in trochaic Octameter, Jim. The same meter Poe utilized for his classic poem, The Raven", with eight stressed-unstressed two-syllable feet per lines.
At least for the most part.
Thanks for reading and commenting as always.
~Dean
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I knew I'd seen something with that rhythm before. thanks for completing my education or at least adding to it.
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No worries, 'Gynt. You contribute to my education on a daily basis as I often find myself scrambling madly to look up a particular word you've used in my thesaurus.
Consider it Paying it forward. LOL.
~Dean :}
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Certainly I will.
Comment from winnona
A very nicely written piece. The words flow together nicely and combining form the message of the poem for the reader. Your artwork and music along with the background color completed the piece well.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2016
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A very nicely written piece. The words flow together nicely and combining form the message of the poem for the reader. Your artwork and music along with the background color completed the piece well.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2016
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Thank you for reading and commenting, Winnona.
It is appreciated.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Harley may never quit barking after this one. Maybe when I read your poems, I should put him outside. LOL Once again, a very well written poem.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2016
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Harley may never quit barking after this one. Maybe when I read your poems, I should put him outside. LOL Once again, a very well written poem.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2016
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Thank you for reading and commenting, Barbara.
It is appreciated.
Comment from RoostyNester
A very well done, scary adventure of a man, that was filled with his own self worth. But in the end, he paid the ultimate price. I liked your scary poem, with the spooky music.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2016
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A very well done, scary adventure of a man, that was filled with his own self worth. But in the end, he paid the ultimate price. I liked your scary poem, with the spooky music.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2016
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Thanks, RN.
I appreciate you giving this a look-see and a chance.
Much obliged.
~Dean
Comment from Bill O'Bier
Hello Dean:
As always a great piece both in language, sounds, and images. How do you get it to post so large? It is quite impressive. Thanks much.
Bill
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2016
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Hello Dean:
As always a great piece both in language, sounds, and images. How do you get it to post so large? It is quite impressive. Thanks much.
Bill
Comment Written 09-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2016
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Trade secrets, Bill, my friend... trade secrets.
It's simply Voodoo magic, heh-heh-heh.
Seriously, I do always appreciate it when you find the time to drop by to read and review my work.
Thank you for your kind comments and six stars.
Have a grrrrrreat week ahead, my friend.
