5-7-5 (Man Cold)
A little wifely humor56 total reviews
Comment from sunnilicious
It sure is that season again. Creative with extreme visual imagery of something that we all dread, the common cold. Good work meeting the syllable requirement count too. Excellent work. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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It sure is that season again. Creative with extreme visual imagery of something that we all dread, the common cold. Good work meeting the syllable requirement count too. Excellent work. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review and great feedback. I sincerely appreciate the syllable count (not my strong suit). Thank you for the good luck wishes :)
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Have a nice evening :)
Comment from ravenblack
Well, my wife says this is true and it did give her a laugh. But really, when I have a cold it is always a bad one. Just be glad that men Don't give birth.
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Well, my wife says this is true and it did give her a laugh. But really, when I have a cold it is always a bad one. Just be glad that men Don't give birth.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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hehe, thank you for returning the smile, I had to laugh at your wonderful feedback. So pleased that you both enjoyed this one. I don't normally write humor but this was totally fun.
Thank you again, your reviews and feedback are always so great and I look forward to them as much as I do your work!!
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Thanks for the compliment. It means a lot!
Comment from 9999pool
In 17 lines the story of a cold became so crucial and death-like and it really is!
With a box of tissues and medication coupled with the cold weather, it is enough to take the life out of us.
With our breathing like a haggard old person struggling on a breathing aid, a cold can be so devastating especially if they last for more than 3 weeks, smiles.
Wonderfully penned and never underestimate the killer instinct of the common cold and flu, smiles.
Good luck to the contest and it did make me smile.
'sneeze cough at deaths door' is a brilliant line and I don't think many would come out with such a catchy yet realistic line, :)).
Cheerio, lots of hugs and luv, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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In 17 lines the story of a cold became so crucial and death-like and it really is!
With a box of tissues and medication coupled with the cold weather, it is enough to take the life out of us.
With our breathing like a haggard old person struggling on a breathing aid, a cold can be so devastating especially if they last for more than 3 weeks, smiles.
Wonderfully penned and never underestimate the killer instinct of the common cold and flu, smiles.
Good luck to the contest and it did make me smile.
'sneeze cough at deaths door' is a brilliant line and I don't think many would come out with such a catchy yet realistic line, :)).
Cheerio, lots of hugs and luv, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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hehe, I had fun writing this one. My husband and I work together and I have witnessed the "man cold" first hand.
Thank you so much for the wonderfully kind review and thoughtful feedback. You always provide such great reviews. Thank you!!
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Welcome, cheerio, hugs.
Luv, Ritchie. :))
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hahaha - my interpretation is that this may be a commentary on how men are usually big babies when they get sick. Was that what you had in mind? Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Hahaha - my interpretation is that this may be a commentary on how men are usually big babies when they get sick. Was that what you had in mind? Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Lou,
Indeed, and I've been working with my husband for over 20 years so I can certainly testify. He's good humored though so it's all good.
Thank you so much for your wonderful review and great feedback.
Smiles :)
Comment from rouskin
sneeze cough at deaths door
thinks this is the end for sure
sigh it's a man cold
Very convincing artwork in addition to your words.
You made me smile. Good luck.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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sneeze cough at deaths door
thinks this is the end for sure
sigh it's a man cold
Very convincing artwork in addition to your words.
You made me smile. Good luck.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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I'm so glad you enjoyed it, I found the poem totally fun to write. Thank you so much for the good luck wishes.
I really appreciate your kind review and words, thank you:)
Comment from pipersfancy
Oh my Gosh!!! How true is this? The woman keeps on cooking, cleaning, packing lunches for kids, etc. etc... the man acts as though death is imminent.... too funny!
PF
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Oh my Gosh!!! How true is this? The woman keeps on cooking, cleaning, packing lunches for kids, etc. etc... the man acts as though death is imminent.... too funny!
PF
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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I so happy you enjoyed this one, it was totally fun to write. Since I work with my husband I figured I got a pass on the humor, hehe.
Thank you so much for the wonderfully kind review and fun feedback.
Have an awesome week!!
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
Ah, there does seem to be a difference in the way a man deals with a cold and the way a woman deals with one. Anyway, this is cute. Good luck, Jeanie Mercer
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Ah, there does seem to be a difference in the way a man deals with a cold and the way a woman deals with one. Anyway, this is cute. Good luck, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Jeanie, Thank you so much for the feedback and the very kind review and good luck wishes.
Have a wonderful week!!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You've made great use of every syllable! I've always heard that men make the worst patients. Imagine a sick man who is a doctor! LOL
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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You've made great use of every syllable! I've always heard that men make the worst patients. Imagine a sick man who is a doctor! LOL
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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I'm so glad you enjoyed this one, it was a fun one to write. Thank you so much for the wonderful review and kind feedback.
Have a great week!!
Comment from emrpoems
Can't get any funnier than this.
The haiku syllable 5-7-5 count is accurate
sneeze cough at deaths door
thinks this is the end for sure
sigh it's a man cold
Best of luck in the contest
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Can't get any funnier than this.
The haiku syllable 5-7-5 count is accurate
sneeze cough at deaths door
thinks this is the end for sure
sigh it's a man cold
Best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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:) Thank you so much!! I sincerely appreciate the syllable check, (not my strong suit, but I'm addicted nonetheless). Your review and feedback certainly made me smile.
Have a wonderful week and thanks also for the well wishes in the contest!!
Comment from zanya
A great 5-7-5 that gives us a laugh ' a man's cold' - a very different 'animal' altoghether LOL - the pic is funny too. Definitely achieves the objective !
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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A great 5-7-5 that gives us a laugh ' a man's cold' - a very different 'animal' altoghether LOL - the pic is funny too. Definitely achieves the objective !
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much, I had fun writing it and am so happy you enjoyed it. I was excited to find such a great picture, I'm so thankful for our sister site with such a rich library of talented artist.
Have a wonderful week, thank you again!