Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

Hi Dean,

We have enough mushy stuff around FS, so naturally I'm enthralled with your version of a love poem. (I'm whipping up a 'romantic' poem myself, hehe.)

I've read through your notes and agree with what you say. I call them spiritual guides. A rose by any other name would still be from another dimension.

Now to my interpretation of your poem. It seems to me that the unfortunate creature is struggling against his feelings of love for the angel. Poor thing is out of his comfort zone. Love the phrase - my blood in you baptized. Did I get it?

Hugs,
Lou

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2013

Yes, Louise, you most certainly did.

My male protagonist is struggling with his aversion to linger on the darker side of things, and he loathes the fact that he enjoys it so much. He doesn't want to feel this way, but, he can't or won't deny the fact that he does.

Thanks for the fantastic review, as well as the spectacular insights!

Comment from barkingdog

Excellent

You have crafted a fine poem, Dean.
I immediately notice the alliteration in the first stanza--'dark demon in disguise'. You then take the 'd' and continue it producing an ongoing tonal consonance(devil's due/ dreams/I'd...and/ seduce/ lead/ darker/ dare/blood... baptized/damning disgrace/ disguised.

Mavelous lilting rhyme, consistent tempo and hauntingly lonely tone in this-- his total submission to his Angel Face.

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013

Thanks, BD, and I'm very happy to see that you picked up on all of that. I worked very hard to achieve it!

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

I really believe that we each have a guardian angel around us at all times. I also, like you, believe that our free will keeps that angle silent more than we know. They are not to judge, but to be a supporting force. Nicely done. It was honest and yet a tad dark. Loved it.

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013

Thanks so much, GW, I sure do appreciate your lovely review and generous rating.

I'll agree, it is a bit dark. But, so am I, most days...

Comment from Green Lake Girl

Excellent

I love your Pict-a-Poem style. The monster holding the beautiful woman is unsettling and a great contrast to the wonderful piano music. I really appreciate your author's notes. You are the second person in a week's time to point out that Angels are here to help us. All we need to do is ask. Very well done, as usual.

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013

Thanks so much, Green Lake Girl. I certainly am grateful for your wonderful review & support!

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

Visually astounding and, as always, a clever and thoughtfully written poem.
The combination of the two verges on perfection.
I forgive you for not writing a traditional romance
poem because for your chosen genre this is pretty damn fine.

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013

Well, thank you so much, seken58. I certainly am thankful for this wonderful review!

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Five very well written stanzas in abab (just a small glitch in the final stanza. I don't know how you keep finding these great pictures. And the piano music is lovely. A good read and listen. Thank you. Regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013

Thank you very much, Dorothy. I am very grateful.

Many of the pictures, I do myself. I love art (drawing) almost as much as I do writing...almost

Thanks so much, again...

Comment from Tomes Johnston

Excellent

This is another interesting poem from the author. I loved the poem, but the explanation at the bottom put the icing on the cake. I remember reading this passage in the Bible as well. It is a conundrum to think that fallen angels rebelled against God to be with the daughters of men when they saw how beautiful they were. I think this ties in well with the original sin theory. I believe that the apple from the tree of good and evil was in fact carnal knowledge. Maybe I'm wrong, but that's my take on it and it fits in well with this extract from the Bible.

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013

Thank you so much, Tomes. I'm of like mind, as it pertains to your theories, my friend...

reply by Tomes Johnston on 20-Oct-2013

Thank you. Take care.

Comment from joneau2

Excellent

Another incredible write from your extremely fertile mind and vivid imagination. It is but by the narrowest of margins that your name is not up there with the likes of Stephen King. Your fan, John
By the way, the music is beautiful, and I enjoyed your discussion of angels.

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013

Thanks very much for such a wonderful compliment, John. I would say the same for you, my talented friend...

Comment from I.T creatives

Excellent

This is a high standard.way beyond me rt the moment.

Meatloaf meets Phantom of the opera ,if you will.

Not much that needs work .

How does one achieve this level. I also admire the

you tube like clips

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013

Thanks so much for your kind comments, I.T. creative. I'm sure your work is excellent, and I will endeavor to go to your profile for a perusal. Expect a read and review from yours truly very soon!

Comment from Princesseunice

Excellent

Okay, this is superb.
The text. The art. The lines. The rhymes.
Talks of the dark demon in disguise, i am confused as to what you mean there. Fallen angel?
This makes a nice read.
Good one.

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013

Thank you very much, Princesseunice, I certainly appreciate the read and review.

In actuality, this poem is about a man who is lured and seduced by the dark side, be it by fallen angels, or other "darker", more sinister forces. He doesn't want to be in such a dark place, however, he simply can't help himself, the allure is too great for him to ignore.

The angel references and notes were of a informative nature, more indicative of the word "angel", than to the actual meaning of the poem...