Free Verse Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Slack-Jawed Tide"A collection of free verse poems
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Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Tony!
This is a well written free verse poem which employs excellent use of consonance, assonance, answer alliteration. You've added the element of shape with the stinger at the end of the poem. How clever!
Bravo!
Kim
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Hi Tony!
This is a well written free verse poem which employs excellent use of consonance, assonance, answer alliteration. You've added the element of shape with the stinger at the end of the poem. How clever!
Bravo!
Kim
Comment Written 23-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks, Kim, for dropping by to review. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from angelea paugh
Oh buddy I really enjoyed this writing of yours. All mystic and ocean and darkness of the artwork just pulls the reader right in. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Oh buddy I really enjoyed this writing of yours. All mystic and ocean and darkness of the artwork just pulls the reader right in. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks, Angelea, for dropping by to review. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I have gotten one of these stings and it was not fun and you wrote this one so magically and used words that really made the piece mystical. Very well done, an excellent piece that weaves so well
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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I have gotten one of these stings and it was not fun and you wrote this one so magically and used words that really made the piece mystical. Very well done, an excellent piece that weaves so well
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks, Barb, for dropping by to review. Much appreciated. Sorry to hear you were stung - very painful by all accounts. Tony
Comment from Winslow
Dear Fawcus,
On listless tides the jelly fish rides. Beware as you say in your poem and avoid its sting. Its home may appear peaceful at times but it is there to sting you all the time.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Dear Fawcus,
On listless tides the jelly fish rides. Beware as you say in your poem and avoid its sting. Its home may appear peaceful at times but it is there to sting you all the time.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks, Winslow, for dropping by to review. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from barbara.wilkey
gormless - I am not familiar with that word. You seem to always come up with words I'm not familiar with. I like that because I get to learn while also getting to read this wonderfully descriptive poem.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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gormless - I am not familiar with that word. You seem to always come up with words I'm not familiar with. I like that because I get to learn while also getting to read this wonderfully descriptive poem.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks, Barbara, for dropping by to review. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from sharonlshelley
good poem sensitive and nice to read i love the authors notes and the picture reflects well on you work/ thank you for sharing your work with us.sharon
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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good poem sensitive and nice to read i love the authors notes and the picture reflects well on you work/ thank you for sharing your work with us.sharon
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks, Sharon, for dropping by to review. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from Analie Shepherd
You are so incredibly talented! This poem, once again, is amazing.
In reading this aloud, I can almost here the "slack-jawed tide", as the rhythm rocks one into unsuspecting complacency, before the "sting". Really, really wonderful.
Do you publish your poetry? Novels?
Blessings, Analie
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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You are so incredibly talented! This poem, once again, is amazing.
In reading this aloud, I can almost here the "slack-jawed tide", as the rhythm rocks one into unsuspecting complacency, before the "sting". Really, really wonderful.
Do you publish your poetry? Novels?
Blessings, Analie
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks for this supportive review, Analie, and for the six star award. Most affirming. Yes, a local publisher has published two books of my poems, both of which are available via Amazon: "The Ethiopian Afar" and "Written in Sand". I have had a third volume accepted, which is due to be published before the end of the year. Best wishes, Tony
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Wonderful! I shall look for your books on Amazon. Keep writing!
Blessings, Analie
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Tony,
This is a great free verse. Most free verse, in my opinion, is tends to ramble everywhere & back again. You are a master with this style. Your words flow smoothly, have great imagery, good alliteration, & are presented well. The notes were great, too.
I like the 'story' your poem told. As for the man o war jellyfish, can't say anything but stay away from me.
Thanks for sharing. I can always learn something from your posts. Jan
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Tony,
This is a great free verse. Most free verse, in my opinion, is tends to ramble everywhere & back again. You are a master with this style. Your words flow smoothly, have great imagery, good alliteration, & are presented well. The notes were great, too.
I like the 'story' your poem told. As for the man o war jellyfish, can't say anything but stay away from me.
Thanks for sharing. I can always learn something from your posts. Jan
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks for dropping by to review, Jan. I always appreciate hearing from you! Kind words indeed, about my free verse. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Curly Girly
Hi, Tony
You wrote an excellent poem about an awful thing.
The poem is well-presented. I liked the written 'sting' in the tail.
Good, sinister adjectives.
Not the normal kind of poem about the sea; none the less, a true version. Only in Australia!
This is an outstandingly good horror poem.
Nicole
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Hi, Tony
You wrote an excellent poem about an awful thing.
The poem is well-presented. I liked the written 'sting' in the tail.
Good, sinister adjectives.
Not the normal kind of poem about the sea; none the less, a true version. Only in Australia!
This is an outstandingly good horror poem.
Nicole
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks for dropping by to review, Nicole. I always appreciate hearing from you! Kind words indeed, about my free verse. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I love the layout and the resonating lines, a well thought out piece with clever language and the might of the jellyfish lurking in your poem, I saw them in the Maldives, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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I love the layout and the resonating lines, a well thought out piece with clever language and the might of the jellyfish lurking in your poem, I saw them in the Maldives, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks, Dolly, for dropping by to review. Much appreciated. Tony