A Picture's Worth a Thousand Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Ghost Ship"A compilation of pictapoems from my portfolio
74 total reviews
Comment from livelylinda
Dean: As I'm typing this, I can still hear the riggings squeaking and the occasional gull squawking along with the sea wind. If you go tomorrow, you will be with me evermore. Fantastic combination of picture, sounds and haunting words. It is certainly worthy of a sixer so virtual today. Linda
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Dean: As I'm typing this, I can still hear the riggings squeaking and the occasional gull squawking along with the sea wind. If you go tomorrow, you will be with me evermore. Fantastic combination of picture, sounds and haunting words. It is certainly worthy of a sixer so virtual today. Linda
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Dean,
I just want to mention that some of the letters on the right hand side of the screen are cut off, so you might want to adjust it. I enjoyed the depth of your words and the way you presented them.
Hugs,
Lou
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Hi Dean,
I just want to mention that some of the letters on the right hand side of the screen are cut off, so you might want to adjust it. I enjoyed the depth of your words and the way you presented them.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from Kaila Mari
Reviewer Form:
Type of writing being reviewed:
2. Poem type: General Poetry
Does this poem flow: This poem flows very nicely
Do the lines seem forced: Lines in this poem are not forced; the end rhymes lend to the rhythm and cadence.
Did the structure make sense: Poem has perfect structure
Did it draw on my emotions: The wording, rhyming, and art evoke an intense need for Nature's support to calm impending dead.
Did it present strong images: The images both verbal and artwork are superb; they support and complement the story told; Alliteration and enjambment entices the reader and gently pushes him to the end of the poem.
Suggestions for improvement: The only thing that I would suggest improvement on, is the background color of the artwork. The hues of red and blue place a glare on the page and the black fonts on the letters are lost and make it difficult for the reader to make out the words; at least this is my case. Maybe it is my lack of vision. The yellows and gold colors enhance the fonts and make them easier to read. All in all there is nothing much to improve.
Would I recommend this to someone else: This is a poem I would certainly recommend to others
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Reviewer Form:
Type of writing being reviewed:
2. Poem type: General Poetry
Does this poem flow: This poem flows very nicely
Do the lines seem forced: Lines in this poem are not forced; the end rhymes lend to the rhythm and cadence.
Did the structure make sense: Poem has perfect structure
Did it draw on my emotions: The wording, rhyming, and art evoke an intense need for Nature's support to calm impending dead.
Did it present strong images: The images both verbal and artwork are superb; they support and complement the story told; Alliteration and enjambment entices the reader and gently pushes him to the end of the poem.
Suggestions for improvement: The only thing that I would suggest improvement on, is the background color of the artwork. The hues of red and blue place a glare on the page and the black fonts on the letters are lost and make it difficult for the reader to make out the words; at least this is my case. Maybe it is my lack of vision. The yellows and gold colors enhance the fonts and make them easier to read. All in all there is nothing much to improve.
Would I recommend this to someone else: This is a poem I would certainly recommend to others
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from Ric Myworld
Your poem is outstanding as always, as is your picture presentation and the creaks of the Ghost ship rocking in the waves. Thanks for another great job. :-)
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Your poem is outstanding as always, as is your picture presentation and the creaks of the Ghost ship rocking in the waves. Thanks for another great job. :-)
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from GregoryCody
Fortuitous to cry forlorn teds. Wow.
What an eerie yet beautiful message. So he is embracing death. I keep seeing the crew of the Titanic at the end of that movie when she dies.
What a strong flow too and rhyme pattern is subtle, not forced.
And HOW do you do these illustrations?? Love it.
This is very well deserved here. You created such a story and such a picture painted. Great work. And congrats on the story contest!
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Fortuitous to cry forlorn teds. Wow.
What an eerie yet beautiful message. So he is embracing death. I keep seeing the crew of the Titanic at the end of that movie when she dies.
What a strong flow too and rhyme pattern is subtle, not forced.
And HOW do you do these illustrations?? Love it.
This is very well deserved here. You created such a story and such a picture painted. Great work. And congrats on the story contest!
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from boxergirl
Your pictapoem series has a nice addition with this one, Dean. The picture is awesome and draws us in and your descriptive words and poetic devices such as alliteration and personification help set the tone of despair; but perhaps finding peace in the end.
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Your pictapoem series has a nice addition with this one, Dean. The picture is awesome and draws us in and your descriptive words and poetic devices such as alliteration and personification help set the tone of despair; but perhaps finding peace in the end.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from Muffins
The language is decadent like a box full of cream filled chocolate candy. Each word, each stanza brings forth an image that sticks with the reader. The message I received is no matter how hard it is, never give up. If you land flat on your back, you can look up and see the sun.
This poem is amazing and how did you get the sound effects on it! I wish I could give you a six. I have to make a mental note to keep some six rating around for the juicy ones that are posted towards the end of the week.
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The language is decadent like a box full of cream filled chocolate candy. Each word, each stanza brings forth an image that sticks with the reader. The message I received is no matter how hard it is, never give up. If you land flat on your back, you can look up and see the sun.
This poem is amazing and how did you get the sound effects on it! I wish I could give you a six. I have to make a mental note to keep some six rating around for the juicy ones that are posted towards the end of the week.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from Sonaleeka
Hi Dean,
how are you doing? It's always a pleasure to read your writing.It's really written very nicely and amazingly captured.
God bless !
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Hi Dean,
how are you doing? It's always a pleasure to read your writing.It's really written very nicely and amazingly captured.
God bless !
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from Kingsland
This poem reads very smoothly and has good transitions from line to line. The entire presentation is well done and very entertaining. I enjoyed partaking of this well voiced piece of poetic art... John
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This poem reads very smoothly and has good transitions from line to line. The entire presentation is well done and very entertaining. I enjoyed partaking of this well voiced piece of poetic art... John
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from pipersfancy
You've hit this one out of the ballpark, Dean!
I love the language usage that evokes such plaintive and beautiful imagery... poetically, and philosophically, it's very well written!
Tiny little point of consideration:
To avoid the repetition of "me" in the first verse, perhaps
sweet pain, dour heartache, I'll sleep near thee
Loved this!
PF
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You've hit this one out of the ballpark, Dean!
I love the language usage that evokes such plaintive and beautiful imagery... poetically, and philosophically, it's very well written!
Tiny little point of consideration:
To avoid the repetition of "me" in the first verse, perhaps
sweet pain, dour heartache, I'll sleep near thee
Loved this!
PF
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014