Comment from Tim Margetts

Excellent

This is fun.
It tells a great story of something, most of us fear most of any health procedures.
Ugh. The Dentist visit.
Thank you for sharing this vision, you have adequately refued my nightmares with new material.
Tim

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024

Thanks, Tim. Sorry about your nightmares.

reply by Tim Margetts on 30-Nov-2024

LOL
It's OK
Tim

Comment from Mrs. KT

Exceptional

Hah, Paul!
I'm with you!
I'd rather give birth than sit through a dental procedure - even a cleaning!
Have experienced so many horrific situations with dentists and oral surgeons; thus, your well-crafted poetic offering truly resonate with me!

Thank you for sharing!
fondly,
diane

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024

Thanks, Diane. Childbirth versus a dental appointment. I'll bet there's a poem there.

reply by Mrs. KT on 30-Nov-2024

Hah!
Well, if you are bored, or just have a moment, I wrote about one experience - still in my portfolio = "Just a Bump in the Road." Still cringe every time I think about that experience

Take Care!
diane

Comment from jmdg1954

Exceptional

Wow, Paul. I'm glad I have a six star left to award for this creative, yet fearful visit to a novice dentist.

There were many lines that gave me a chuckle
Especially when he tightened the seat belt buckle,

Thanks for a fun early morning read.

Cheers,
John

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024

Thanks, John. I should have mentioned that she had to strap down my arms.

Comment from bob cullen

Exceptional

This is so creative and clever. As one who fears only two things in my life, the wife and the dentist, I understand your message. I had a smile on my face throughout this poem. I hope you forwarded a copy of this to your dentist.

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024

Thanks, Bob. I love your two fears. I did give a copy to my hygienist.

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

This was a very amusing read Paul even if this visit wasn't such a fun afternoon for you. I loved the descriptions in this and I feel lucky that my hygienist is a mature lady. LOL vey good,
Cheers
Valda

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024

Thanks, Valda. I was out the door in record time.

Comment from Barry Penfold

Excellent

A delightful poem that highlights the fears many of us have when attending the dentist. Good rhyming and I must admit having a smile on my face as you were "attacked". It seems you came out the worst for the experience.
All the best for the competition. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024

Thanks, Barry. My real hygienist is really good, and I always keep on her good side.

reply by Barry Penfold on 30-Nov-2024

Yes, that is a smart idea. Take care.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

You made me laugh with this humorous horror story poem. I think I would change dentist offices quickly. I wouldn't know why a body piercing compliment would change her demeanor but I wouldn't argue with someone armed with so much metal. Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024

Thanks, Helen. I probably should take some kind of drug when I have these appointments.

Comment from Rick Gardner

Excellent

This will take everyone to that dental chair, open wide, don't move, swallow this. Best not to try and talk, a mouthful of water prevents any noise, prevents any complaints. Stare at the ceiling, wait for the end. Pay a handsome amount before you leave, you are scheduled for another cleaning in six months, Next.

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 Comment Written 30-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024

Thanks, Rick. Torture every six months..

reply by Rick Gardner on 30-Nov-2024

Can't believe anyone likes going to the dentist. Had my share of death in a dental chair.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Oh my goodness Paul, this sounds like an awful experience and I hope this is fiction. I hate having my teeth cleaned as I sometimes feel like I am choking. Your poem is well rhymed with great metre and is enjoyed your skilful poem, I wish I had a six left, love Christine x x x

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 Comment Written 30-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024

Thanks, Christine. Since they started to use the high speed drills, things haven't been quite so bad.