The Vice of Age
Blank verse44 total reviews
Comment from Natureschild
Hi Tony, This is a beautifully crafted poem. It evokes notes of old age and regrets through powerful metaphor: "abacus of might-have-beens" which I found very effective. My favourite lines are "missing beads" that are "conveniently mislaid" . This reminds me of my own failing memory.
Well done. - Terry
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Hi Tony, This is a beautifully crafted poem. It evokes notes of old age and regrets through powerful metaphor: "abacus of might-have-beens" which I found very effective. My favourite lines are "missing beads" that are "conveniently mislaid" . This reminds me of my own failing memory.
Well done. - Terry
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much for your review, Terry. Appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from June Sargent
I agree with the sentiments expressed in your blank verse. To love and be loved is to me the crown of a life well lived. And I thank you for using the blank verse format. I much prefer it to free verse. Rhythm makes all the difference.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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I agree with the sentiments expressed in your blank verse. To love and be loved is to me the crown of a life well lived. And I thank you for using the blank verse format. I much prefer it to free verse. Rhythm makes all the difference.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much for your review, June. Appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation, Tony.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-Very good imagery throughout the poem,
as well as personifying the aging process.
-Good detail about the abacus.
-I don't think about regrets too much;
it's more about learning from
events that happened,and moving forward.
-You do a good job with the epitaph, and I
think it is enough that he lived and loved.
-Very well done with a lot to think about.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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-Nice artwork and presentation, Tony.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-Very good imagery throughout the poem,
as well as personifying the aging process.
-Good detail about the abacus.
-I don't think about regrets too much;
it's more about learning from
events that happened,and moving forward.
-You do a good job with the epitaph, and I
think it is enough that he lived and loved.
-Very well done with a lot to think about.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Many thanks, Pam, for your kind words and the award of a sixth star. I agree with you that regrets are somewhat pointless. All good wishes, Tony
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Tony. Thanks for sharing in your reply, and I am glad you agreed!
Comment from Tim Margetts
You are right, there is little blank verse on FanStory, in my short time here, this is the first I have seen.
I love Shakespeare and his sonnets inspire me as do his plays (When well performed)
Thank you for this poem. It's a dark thought you convey, but honest in its reality.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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You are right, there is little blank verse on FanStory, in my short time here, this is the first I have seen.
I love Shakespeare and his sonnets inspire me as do his plays (When well performed)
Thank you for this poem. It's a dark thought you convey, but honest in its reality.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much for your review, Tim. Appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from phill doran
Hello Tony,
This piece is excellent - a compact work that captures so much of our natural and private reflections, at least for those fortunate enough to hear "time's winged chariot hurrying near" - Marvell-ous indeed.
And memory is not a fixative, but a solvent, beautifully captured here with the phrase "...missing beads conveniently mislaid..." Great metaphors and so economically expressed.
I salute you; this is really good, strong work. (Duh edit... "vice", but of course...)
I wish you well with your continued writing.
cheers
phill
As I say, this is super writing and it has prompted me to launch a Blank Verse contest - you are right, the form is lovely and subtle, and under represented on the site.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Hello Tony,
This piece is excellent - a compact work that captures so much of our natural and private reflections, at least for those fortunate enough to hear "time's winged chariot hurrying near" - Marvell-ous indeed.
And memory is not a fixative, but a solvent, beautifully captured here with the phrase "...missing beads conveniently mislaid..." Great metaphors and so economically expressed.
I salute you; this is really good, strong work. (Duh edit... "vice", but of course...)
I wish you well with your continued writing.
cheers
phill
As I say, this is super writing and it has prompted me to launch a Blank Verse contest - you are right, the form is lovely and subtle, and under represented on the site.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thanks, Phill, for your kind comments and sixth star. You have a splendid way of expressing ideas (memory is not a fixative, but a solvent). I shall enjoy the challenge of your contest. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Hi Tony, I had to get my dictionary out for some of those poetic devices:)) I think names like these can be so off-putting and the proof of the poem's quality is simply with the ear. You achieved this with a delightfully pleasing free verse which flowed beautifully, forming just one single sentence in the first six lines. We should never count our lives according to our selective memories of the past; instead value the present and the one thing that provides meaningful cohesion to our presence here. I particularly like the play on words of 'beens' (beans). This is an excellent read and, if anything could inspire me to write in blank verse, this is it. Well done, Steve! Debbie
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Hi Tony, I had to get my dictionary out for some of those poetic devices:)) I think names like these can be so off-putting and the proof of the poem's quality is simply with the ear. You achieved this with a delightfully pleasing free verse which flowed beautifully, forming just one single sentence in the first six lines. We should never count our lives according to our selective memories of the past; instead value the present and the one thing that provides meaningful cohesion to our presence here. I particularly like the play on words of 'beens' (beans). This is an excellent read and, if anything could inspire me to write in blank verse, this is it. Well done, Steve! Debbie
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Debbie. What a very nice review! I think you are right about the poetic jargon. It's the way a poem sounds that is important. all good wishes, Tony
Comment from Jacob1395
I think there will come a time when we will look back on our lives and wished we had done certain things differently, or tried new things. The most important thing is to live life to the full as best we can. A well written piece, Tony, I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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I think there will come a time when we will look back on our lives and wished we had done certain things differently, or tried new things. The most important thing is to live life to the full as best we can. A well written piece, Tony, I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much for your review, Jacob. Appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Begin Again
We are born in the beginning, and death claims each of us at the end. The glue that holds us all together is love. If we have felt and shared love, our lives are fulfilled, and it lives on in our hearts. Everything else disappears.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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We are born in the beginning, and death claims each of us at the end. The glue that holds us all together is love. If we have felt and shared love, our lives are fulfilled, and it lives on in our hearts. Everything else disappears.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much for your review, Carol. Appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh my -- I wrote a blank verse not long ago, but then changed my mind about it and re-wrote it into a different poetry format.
This might explain...
This is wonderful, but Tony, is blank verse not sonnet-like in that it has fourteen lines? Perhaps I didn't learn as much as I thought I did from dear Ray...
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Oh my -- I wrote a blank verse not long ago, but then changed my mind about it and re-wrote it into a different poetry format.
This might explain...
This is wonderful, but Tony, is blank verse not sonnet-like in that it has fourteen lines? Perhaps I didn't learn as much as I thought I did from dear Ray...
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much for your review, Dawn. Appreciated. What an enriching course that was! I remember one of the assignments was to write a blank verse sonnet. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from lyenochka
A beautiful blank verse, Tony! And yes, it is enough if "He came, and lived with love before he went." I especially liked "abacus of might-have-beens," which too many people focus on, instead of giving the love that can change their lives.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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A beautiful blank verse, Tony! And yes, it is enough if "He came, and lived with love before he went." I especially liked "abacus of might-have-beens," which too many people focus on, instead of giving the love that can change their lives.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much for your review, Helen. Appreciated. All good wishes, Tony