The Longest Day
Low on provisions.40 total reviews
Comment from Heather Knight
How funny! I promise you I didn't expect the bologna sandwiches and Kool-Aid at the end. I truly believed this was real war.
Thanks so much for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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How funny! I promise you I didn't expect the bologna sandwiches and Kool-Aid at the end. I truly believed this was real war.
Thanks so much for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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I got you? The writer who always has a catch at the end? Unfathomable! So glad you enjoyed my short entry. Always my best to you and yours, Sally xo
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You did trick me!
Comment from GWinterwin
Very good flash fiction story. Would be a good beginning to a book. You certainly kept my attention from start to finish. Thanks for sharing and God bless always.
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Very good flash fiction story. Would be a good beginning to a book. You certainly kept my attention from start to finish. Thanks for sharing and God bless always.
Comment Written 07-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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There you are George, I have missed you! Thank you so much for the outstanding review and kind compliments. I?m so glad you enjoyed this little twist on history laced with nostalgia. Always my best to you and yours. I hope you?re well. Sally :+)
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Thank you my friend. As you know I am fighting Multiple Myeloma which is bone cancer. Praise God he has allowed the medicine to work and I feel good. My infusions and doctors are in a mix upright now so please pray that things will get worked out soon if it be Gods will. Bless you always Sally. You are a very good writer and I truly do enjoy reading your stories. God bless and keep you and family always.
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I?m glad to think that you?re doing a lot of reading while you?re getting well and that my books and stories are helping. Thank you again for your kind reviews. You are in my thoughts and prayers dear George! xo
Comment from Irish Rain
I love this!
I loved Kool-aid and bologna
sandwiches!
I enjoyed mine with 'Gone With the Wind',
on a rock in the woods.
This is a delightful entry!
Good luck!
Blessings...
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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I love this!
I loved Kool-aid and bologna
sandwiches!
I enjoyed mine with 'Gone With the Wind',
on a rock in the woods.
This is a delightful entry!
Good luck!
Blessings...
Comment Written 07-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Thank you very much, my dear Irish rain. I appreciate the outstanding marks and generous review. I?m glad you could appreciate as well the Kool-Aid and bologna sandwiches! Everyone seems to like that last minute twist. Always my best to you and yours, Sally xo
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You're most welcome!!
Comment from Lance S. Loria
Oh oh. I counted only 65 words and it must be exactly 75 words.
Make that edit before the contest closes. Complimentary artwork.
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Oh oh. I counted only 65 words and it must be exactly 75 words.
Make that edit before the contest closes. Complimentary artwork.
Comment Written 06-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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The FanStory word processor on the edit feature says 75 words which is where the criteria is held. That?s the only one that matters.
Thanks for your review.
Sal
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Lance, I contacted Tom at FanStory and you were right. The Basic Editor count is not accurate and they now recommend the word processors on my computer. I type from an IPad Pro with voice activation text since I am blind. If you hadn?t said anything, I wouldn?t have known. Thank you. I added a sentence to make it exactly 75. Sal :+)
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I?m glad you got it corrected in time!
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Me, too! Thanks again.
Comment from 24chas
This was a good read, Sal. I could definitely relate to this one. Thankfully, though, I was the oldest and therefore a general, so I sent my younger brothers off to retrieve supplies. Thanks for the flashback.
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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This was a good read, Sal. I could definitely relate to this one. Thankfully, though, I was the oldest and therefore a general, so I sent my younger brothers off to retrieve supplies. Thanks for the flashback.
Comment Written 06-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Lucky you. My two older brothers struggled with who was the leader of the pack, but I was definitely the nurse and ?gopher.? ?Go for this and go for that, Sal.? Thank you so much, General, for your excellent review and insightful comments. They are greatly appreciated. Always my best to you, Sally ;+)
Comment from l.raven
Hi Sally, LOL...as kids we played war as well...
but no one came with food...we had to run home
when we got hungry...LOL...I love your story told my sweet friend...and love the picture...very well written sweet girl...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Hi Sally, LOL...as kids we played war as well...
but no one came with food...we had to run home
when we got hungry...LOL...I love your story told my sweet friend...and love the picture...very well written sweet girl...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 06-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Dear Linda, thank you for your kind and generous review. You are always so encouraging and also drop a love bomb on me with kisses and hugs. I love you and your reviews.
Sal xo
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your so welcome my sweet sweet friend...much love...xxoo
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is really good. You have made excellent use of the terms of war.
Finding out it was a game that ended with Kool-Aid and bologna sandwiches made me smile.
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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This is really good. You have made excellent use of the terms of war.
Finding out it was a game that ended with Kool-Aid and bologna sandwiches made me smile.
Comment Written 06-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Ah, I think the ones that like this the most are my readers who remember playing war in the neighborhood and enjoying simple pleasures and iconic food. I am pleased you enjoyed my contest entry.
Always my best to you and yours, Sally xo
Comment from Carla Trinklein
Such a fun story! The twist at the end is perfect. Can't say that I ever played war as a kid, but you make it sound like fun! I enjoyed this from start to finish. Very well done!
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Such a fun story! The twist at the end is perfect. Can't say that I ever played war as a kid, but you make it sound like fun! I enjoyed this from start to finish. Very well done!
Comment Written 06-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Thank you so much, dear Carla. I appreciate the thoughtful and kind review of my work. The short pieces Are a bit tricky because you have to communicate so much within a few words. I enjoyed it though as my eyesight is in decline and these shorter flash fiction contest are easier on me. Always my best to you and yours,
Sally xo
Comment from Sandra Elizabeth Williams
Hi Sally, I am out of sixes otherwise I would certainly give this a six.
I firstly started to wonder if you were in the war at some point of your life, then hoopla! The twist!
You got me...you got me really good!
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Hi Sally, I am out of sixes otherwise I would certainly give this a six.
I firstly started to wonder if you were in the war at some point of your life, then hoopla! The twist!
You got me...you got me really good!
Comment Written 06-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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No I just love to get you good my dear Sandra. I have so much fun with this short pieces and they are easier on my eyes as well. Thank you so much for your kind and thoughtful review of my contest entry.
Always my best to you and yours,
Sal xo
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LoL! It's a very good flash fiction.
Comment from JudyE
What a great flash fiction entry and you've given the reader a delightful surprise ending. I don't have anything to suggest and I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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What a great flash fiction entry and you've given the reader a delightful surprise ending. I don't have anything to suggest and I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Thank you so much, dear Judy. I appreciate your kind and insightful review of my short flash fiction piece. I?m so glad I got you on this one. Always my best to you and yours, Sally xo
