Charlie's fence
Story about Charlie in rhyme38 total reviews
Comment from pome lover
Willie, that's a good story with a great character, and I love that the fence was named after Charlie.
I'm surprised, though, that you didn't break it up into stanzas, as it would've been easier to read and to get the rhythm.
Also, you might want to look at the beginning, on the 6th line down, it should be thought instead of though.
I like the picture of old Charlie on the fence. A good one.
Katharine
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Willie, that's a good story with a great character, and I love that the fence was named after Charlie.
I'm surprised, though, that you didn't break it up into stanzas, as it would've been easier to read and to get the rhythm.
Also, you might want to look at the beginning, on the 6th line down, it should be thought instead of though.
I like the picture of old Charlie on the fence. A good one.
Katharine
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Took your advice, thanks. Willie
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you're most welcome.
Great. That's much better - makes your rhymes stand out, and fun to read.
Katharine
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This was a great story, Willie. I enjoyed reading it.
The words flowed smoothly with great rhymes and
imagery. You described Charlie perfectly. I could see
everything you mentioned. Yes, Charlie was a hero
in his younger days and remained a hero forever despite
not receiving the acclaim he was used to. You were right
about how youngsters needed heroes like Charlie to look
up to.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
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This was a great story, Willie. I enjoyed reading it.
The words flowed smoothly with great rhymes and
imagery. You described Charlie perfectly. I could see
everything you mentioned. Yes, Charlie was a hero
in his younger days and remained a hero forever despite
not receiving the acclaim he was used to. You were right
about how youngsters needed heroes like Charlie to look
up to.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
Comment from John Ciarmello
I loved this, Willie! Charlie seemed to be a lost soul. A soul that only the ages remember. He ended up with some tragedy in his life, but despite that, he became a legend and is remembered by Charlie's fence. Best, JohnC
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I loved this, Willie! Charlie seemed to be a lost soul. A soul that only the ages remember. He ended up with some tragedy in his life, but despite that, he became a legend and is remembered by Charlie's fence. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Cute little story, and aren't we all yell to the young generation on my time:"Once in a while he yells at a cowboy,
About how it was done in his day.
We let him do what he wants
And ask his advice now and then.
harlie's no bother, he's a hero to us.
We consider him a man among me"
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Cute little story, and aren't we all yell to the young generation on my time:"Once in a while he yells at a cowboy,
About how it was done in his day.
We let him do what he wants
And ask his advice now and then.
harlie's no bother, he's a hero to us.
We consider him a man among me"
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
Comment from mermaids
Your writing is very unique here. I like the story being told in rhyme. The reader would like to meet Charlie and listen to his stories of being in the rodeo. The image of Charlie sitting on a fence brings forth his personality and character. Excellent writing here.
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Your writing is very unique here. I like the story being told in rhyme. The reader would like to meet Charlie and listen to his stories of being in the rodeo. The image of Charlie sitting on a fence brings forth his personality and character. Excellent writing here.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
Comment from Sally Law
Well, I love the story of Charlie too. A delightful story with rhyming ends.
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes in the upcoming Willie.
Sally :))
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Well, I love the story of Charlie too. A delightful story with rhyming ends.
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes in the upcoming Willie.
Sally :))
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
Comment from jim vecchio
i enjoyed this so very much! I love anything cowboy. This country is forgetting its true heroes and examples. i used to visit "western towns" but most are3 gone, now. Thank you for paying tribute to old Charlie.
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i enjoyed this so very much! I love anything cowboy. This country is forgetting its true heroes and examples. i used to visit "western towns" but most are3 gone, now. Thank you for paying tribute to old Charlie.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was so lovely, and sad in a way. Now too old to do what he loved, a rodeo rider, he sits on the fence remembering all the glorious days he lived through. We all come to that stage in our lives, but we also have the memories. I enjoyed this poem, it flowed so easily, it was a pleasure to read. :)) Sandra x
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That was so lovely, and sad in a way. Now too old to do what he loved, a rodeo rider, he sits on the fence remembering all the glorious days he lived through. We all come to that stage in our lives, but we also have the memories. I enjoyed this poem, it flowed so easily, it was a pleasure to read. :)) Sandra x
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
Comment from Sanku
It is posted under 'featured Stories', though it is a rhyming poem .It is well crafted and tells the story of Charlie who used to sit on his favorite fence reliving his moments of glory.
Very nicely done..
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It is posted under 'featured Stories', though it is a rhyming poem .It is well crafted and tells the story of Charlie who used to sit on his favorite fence reliving his moments of glory.
Very nicely done..
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
Comment from BethShelby
This is a good story about a rodeo hero who has grown old and is no longer able to perform but for those who knew him he is still a hero. I enjoyed reading this. Glory days can't last forever but until all they remember them are gone, they still remain heroes/
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This is a good story about a rodeo hero who has grown old and is no longer able to perform but for those who knew him he is still a hero. I enjoyed reading this. Glory days can't last forever but until all they remember them are gone, they still remain heroes/
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
