Comment from Mistydawn

Excellent

A flasher ghost that is too funny, original for sure. Gave the piece a bit of humor, The comments that followed made your main characters seem more realistic. It worries me that Veronica didn't end up back at her house. It's a good hook for sure. Your story is well-written, very interesting, your dialogue and characters seem real.

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018

Thank you, Mistydawn, for another lovely review. Cecil surely is a naughty ghost, lol, I'm glad you took it in the way it was meant, a bit of fun. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx

Comment from Lady Jane

Excellent

In an effort to stall yet again, I looked across at Mildred chatting away to Jimmy and Edie's mother(.) I smiled when I heard the intermittent laughter coming from her and the children. - edit suggestion

"It's a complicated story, (one) you might find it difficult to believe--" - edit suggestion -I replaced the 'and' here and removed it from the sentence above that conjoined the two (previous edit). Just tidying up some extra ones so it flows smoothly :)


What a way to end the story...I was so hoping she'd end up somewhere warm and cozy, LOL...The dialogue was so together this chapter, always is, but it just flowed so well here. I'm kinda intrigued, too...why hasn't she aged yet....hmmm...
Nice writing with great dialogue and structure. Excellent pacing which keeps the reader moving along at a nice, steady pace.

Keep writing. It suits you, Sandra :)
Janelle - until next installment

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018

Thank you so much, Janelle, for another lovely review. I'll sort those edits out, thanks for that! I do appreciate it when my reviewers offer suggestion and find my errors. :) That is so kind of you. I'm delighted you are enjoying this story, now to find out what's going on with Veronica! :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Ha, the sex pest ghost adds a delightful touch of humour, Sandra.

Another very well written and engaging chapter and you cover an amazing amount of ground with backstory and descriptions.

Really enjoying this and the title is a real hoot. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018

Thanks so much, Gloria. I think Mildred is going to give Veronica a few more gray hairs! lol. Cecil is a naughty ghost, but he's lots of fun, I'm glad you like him. Now, what's happened to Veronica? Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from C. Gale Burnett

Excellent

Every chapter holds me in suspense. I am rather enjoying this story on time travel. Not what I usually read, but now I'm hooked. You are an awesome writer. Thank you for the entertainment!

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018

Thank you so much for your kind review, my friend. I'm so pleased you are still enjoying my story. Thanks for the compliment, too!! :)) Big hugs, Sandra xx

Comment from tfawcus

Exceptional

I love the humour in this chapter - the lecherous ghost and Mildred's sudden interest in Tommy! Poor old Gladys must have ended up being even more confused than she had been at the beginning. Fluid writing with no nits that I can see. Looking forward to your next chapter, as always!

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018

Thank you so very much for the six stars, Tony!! Cecil is fun, but rather naughty, lol. Lots happening but now Veronica has a problem. We'll see how she copes. Thanks for another of your lovely review, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Well done Sandra. You do write so well my friend. I love the missions of Veronica, now add Mildred. It may as well be a family affair. I love the mysterious "watchers" with their ability to manipulate time and people resources. Now, with the addition of Gladys into the mix, we've got so Tommy in the hospital with. Now we've got Veronica mysteriously translated to a different place. Well done, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018

Thank you so very much, Roy, for another of your really lovely reviews. I always appreciate your kind comments. Veronica has a problem to sort out, and it's not going to be easy. Big hugs, my dear friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Exceptional

Sounds like Veronica is time-jumping now, not always landing at home, but some time and place earlier. Interesting. I wonder why that would start happening. What can she learn from it? Hmm...

Too bad Charles won't go to the gallows for the murder of his wife, but Gladys is right to protect her son's inheritance.

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018

Hi Phyllis, I hate it that you aren't on here as much, I miss you! Have you found that standing and then elevating your leg is helping? I really hope so.

Thank you so very much for the six stars, my friend. It will become much clearer in the next part. Veronica is in for the shock of her life. Thanks dear, keep well, big hugs, Sandra xxxx

reply by Phyllis Stewart on 13-Nov-2018

Veronica is more shocked than she was with time traveling? Wow. What could it be?

Now I have to walk on my treadmill twice per day for two minutes or as much as I can bear before pain shoots through my forgotten, unused legs. No fun. But should help. :)

reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018

I need to walk more, when you are at the keyboard you tend to forget. Just do what you can, and hopefully your legs will improve. It would be a good idea if you shared your story with the rest of FS, to make them aware of the pitfalls of becoming too addicted to writing. I think you'd be good at writing a story about it, so it is subtly brought out and makes the reader think seriously about it. Sending you a hug! xxx

Comment from damommy

Exceptional

Does Veronica ever get scared? She handles situations so well. I think I'd be frightened to death not knowing where I was going next. Interesting that Mildred hasn't aged. Are we eventually to know why? Your stories are always so multi-faceted, like real life. You don't need to answer these questions. I'm sure they'll come out as we go along. 8-)

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018

Funny you should ask that, Yvonne! Yes, you will be getting all the answers, some very soon, others a bit further along. I'm so pleased you are asking questions, it shows me you are enjoying it. Thank you so very much for the six stars, you are such a lovely lady and good friend. I hope your shoulder is still healing nicely. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

reply by damommy on 12-Nov-2018

It's come a long, the shoulder, but has a long way to go. Once this one is healed, I have to do it again with the other one. I'll have to hire someone to come and scratch my back. lol

reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018

Oh no! I didn't realise you had to have both done! You poor thing! It's taken so long to heal, hasn't it? I think you will be deserving a nice pampered holiday! :)) The South of England is lovely in the Spring. lol. Did I happen to mention that's where I live? :)) xxx

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Exceptional

NOW what are you up to Sandra? You are doing some very intricate weaving of stories here my friend. You have all sorts of threads sticking out in different directions. How
do you keep them straight? I am very curious where this one is going. You are really good at story telling. Well done! Nancy

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018

You will find out next time. It's all in the plan. LOL. Thank you so very much for the six stars, my friend, and the fabulous, funny review. I'm working on the next part now. Thanks, my friend. I'm so glad you like this story and stay with me. Big hugs. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from apky

Excellent

Uh-oh. I really wanted her to find James at home after all the preceeding events, so that she could indeed have someone to comfort her emotionally. Now I wonder where James is...

Another great chapter that kept me hooked to the end. I bit my nails and then laughed aloud at places like where Cecil (I actually like the naughty ghost) comes in with gems of dialogue, thanks to your genius:

I cringed and glared angrily at the obnoxious ghost. "For goodness sake--go and annoy the devil, you dirty old pervert!" I frustratedly turned to Gladys. "I can't explain anything with this nonsense going on. Is there some place we can go where we won't be interrupted by a sex pest ghost?" I said as I threw another furious glare in Cecil's direction.

"Oow! Temper, temper. Got yer knickers in a twist, 'ave yeh? ... 'Course, that's if yeh've got any on!" Cecil howled with laughter as he sashayed off all the way out of the ward.

Brilliant!

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018

I'm really pleased you like our randy ghost, Aki, lol, there had to be at least one of them. Where is James? There are lots of things happening in the next part, hopefully we will find out, lol! Thank you so much, my friend, for another lovely review. Big hugs, Sandra xxx