This Time - That Time 3
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Holloway Prison"Third book in the time travel trilogy
35 total reviews
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Thankfully they came back to the present before Mildred was locked up. I hope Charles doesn't punish Gladys. He's a monster! Why can people see Mildred but not Veronica. I don't understand that.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
  |
Thankfully they came back to the present before Mildred was locked up. I hope Charles doesn't punish Gladys. He's a monster! Why can people see Mildred but not Veronica. I don't understand that.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
-
Thank you so much for the 6 stars, my dear friend!! You're right, Charles is a monster!
The 'powers that be' decided to send Veronica back invisible at the beginning of part 5. It made sense because Veronica can now move around freely, while Mildred can be the 'vocal' one who can make suggestions and get answers from the people they're with. They won't find out what they are really supposed to be doing, or changing until possibly a couple more parts. (depends on how long the parts are.) Then it will be panic stations all round! :)) Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from giraffmang
2nd visit... nice G
Hi Sandra,
Have you been sleep-writing? Uncharacteristic typos and bits & pieces in this instalment. let me know if you change them and I'll pop back.
The story itself is as engaging and interesting as ever.
"Why did you ask?" A quiet voice came from the front. - I think I'd invert this and have the tag in front.
The silence was earie, but it meant - eerie.
gave her a thumb's up. - don't think you need the apostrophe here.
I've gotta have bath here - it may be intentional but it feels like a word's missing.
"I can only hope your right, Miss Veronica - you're.
She's a lady, so she's not used to this- the to needs clipped to maintain the dialect - t'.
He looked up at the officer standing near-by - nearby could be a single word here.
But, what about Mildred. - this should probably have a question mark.
"Oh, Lordy," Mildred gasped. "She'll be in for it now...! - need closing speech marks at the end here.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
 |
2nd visit... nice G
Hi Sandra,
Have you been sleep-writing? Uncharacteristic typos and bits & pieces in this instalment. let me know if you change them and I'll pop back.
The story itself is as engaging and interesting as ever.
"Why did you ask?" A quiet voice came from the front. - I think I'd invert this and have the tag in front.
The silence was earie, but it meant - eerie.
gave her a thumb's up. - don't think you need the apostrophe here.
I've gotta have bath here - it may be intentional but it feels like a word's missing.
"I can only hope your right, Miss Veronica - you're.
She's a lady, so she's not used to this- the to needs clipped to maintain the dialect - t'.
He looked up at the officer standing near-by - nearby could be a single word here.
But, what about Mildred. - this should probably have a question mark.
"Oh, Lordy," Mildred gasped. "She'll be in for it now...! - need closing speech marks at the end here.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
-
What can I say? I have no excuses whatsoever, I really must have been sleep-writing! Thank you so much, Gareth, for taking the time to go over this part and for letting me know, I'm so grateful and do honestly appreciate the time you took. I've made all the corrections now, and looked over it in case more have slipped through. Thank you, my friend!! :( Sandra xxx
Comment from nancy_e_davis
What will the wardens think when they come to Mildred's empty cell? LOL Heads will roll! Will she be a fugitive from justice? Poor Gladys. She has to face the music now.
Will she survive her husband's wrath? Great poem about their incarceration. Well done dear. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
|
What will the wardens think when they come to Mildred's empty cell? LOL Heads will roll! Will she be a fugitive from justice? Poor Gladys. She has to face the music now.
Will she survive her husband's wrath? Great poem about their incarceration. Well done dear. :) Nancy
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
-
Thank you so much, Nancy, for the golden array of stars! I'm sure we will find out what happened in the prison following Mildred's escape! lol. Thank you for your lovely review, my friend. I was thinking about you yesterday, I think I read a sonnet on here and realised I hadn't seen you for a little while. I hope you are well? Winter is on its way, make sure you don't get any colds or flu this year! Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
-
I'm as well as can be expected I suppose. My muse is here and there lately due to no inspiration from anymore. If I get sick it will be because my family brought it to me as I never get out to catch anything. My teenage Great grandchildren are here every day and I am enjoying them when they are not texting, LOL They live next door. Have a great day! :)Nancy
Comment from sandragee
Holloway Prison is not a pretty place, but Gladys won't be there long. Robert has gained her freedom and is taking her home for Charles to 'look' after her. Great chapter. Readers are left to ponder Gladys' fate.
A couple of thoughts:
It was really [playing] (preying) on my mind.
As soon as we entered, he came over to [Gwendolyn](Gladys).
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
|
Holloway Prison is not a pretty place, but Gladys won't be there long. Robert has gained her freedom and is taking her home for Charles to 'look' after her. Great chapter. Readers are left to ponder Gladys' fate.
A couple of thoughts:
It was really [playing] (preying) on my mind.
As soon as we entered, he came over to [Gwendolyn](Gladys).
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
-
I am so glad you spotted Gladys's name change! Gwendolyn was a ghost in the previous book, it seems she doesn't want to lie down, LOL.
'playing' and 'preying' are both correct, but I hear 'playing' used mostly in the UK. But, thank you for mentioning it. And thank you so much for your lovely review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this part. Big hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from aryr
This was so well done Sandra. You captured the essence of fear that all of those women faced when they were imprisoned. I do believe that both Veronica and Mildred are right, Charles does know and he will do something about it. Robert thought he was helping, but he was doing harm. A very enjoyable chapter. Thanks for sharing my friend. Hugs and smiles.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
|
This was so well done Sandra. You captured the essence of fear that all of those women faced when they were imprisoned. I do believe that both Veronica and Mildred are right, Charles does know and he will do something about it. Robert thought he was helping, but he was doing harm. A very enjoyable chapter. Thanks for sharing my friend. Hugs and smiles.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
-
Thank you, Alie! What a lovely review. I'm glad the fear came through as it's hard sometimes to get feelings right. I'm also very pleased you enjoyed this part. Thank you, my friend. Big hugs. :) Sandra xx
-
You are so welcome Sandra, it is a great story, hugs and smiles.
Comment from Tpa
A very entertaining and enjoyable chapter. I thought you may have given a better description of the prison as you did for the cell. Also, the word 'spun' on his heel (s) didn't seem right to me rather than 'turn'' of course, that's me. good read and thank you for sharing your talent.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
|
A very entertaining and enjoyable chapter. I thought you may have given a better description of the prison as you did for the cell. Also, the word 'spun' on his heel (s) didn't seem right to me rather than 'turn'' of course, that's me. good read and thank you for sharing your talent.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
-
Thank you Tpa, for your lovely review. 'Spun on his heels', is an idiom which suggests leaving fast. 'Turn' is also correct but I didn't think it gave the same impression. Thank you for sharing your thoughts on that, though. I'm really pleased you enjoyed this part, things are about to change! Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I don't think I even want to know how angry Charles is going to be. It's not going to be good. Maybe Veronica will be able to figure something out to help Gladys. This is a good right.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
|
I don't think I even want to know how angry Charles is going to be. It's not going to be good. Maybe Veronica will be able to figure something out to help Gladys. This is a good right.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
-
Thank you so much, Barbara, for your lovely review. Charles, and many like him, were real toe-rags, and still are, but I'm sure they will get their comeuppance in the next world. I'm glad you enjoyed this part, if 'enjoy' is the right word! Bug hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Mustang Patty
Oh, my.
Wow, Sandra. You have done a wonderful job with this chapter. I always forget that women had to fight everywhere to get the right to vote. The suffragettes were treated horribly everywhere, and I fear we are coming into more times where women will suffer for wanting only the same rights as me.
Looking forward to the next part,
~MP~
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
|
Oh, my.
Wow, Sandra. You have done a wonderful job with this chapter. I always forget that women had to fight everywhere to get the right to vote. The suffragettes were treated horribly everywhere, and I fear we are coming into more times where women will suffer for wanting only the same rights as me.
Looking forward to the next part,
~MP~
Comment Written 16-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
-
Thank you so much, Patty. They went through a lot to get us the freedom to vote, but there is still a long way to go before women all over the world are treated as an equal. I'm glad you enjoyed this part, my friend. Big hugs, Sandra. xxx
Comment from Mistydawn
Oh the poor thing, I think she might've been better off where she was at. It's very well-written, interesting, suspenseful. The dialogue seems natural and your characters real. Your poem at the end really added to the story.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
|
Oh the poor thing, I think she might've been better off where she was at. It's very well-written, interesting, suspenseful. The dialogue seems natural and your characters real. Your poem at the end really added to the story.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
-
You may be right, Mistydawn, home is sometimes worse than prison. Thank you so much for your lovely review, my friend, I really appreciate it. Big hugs, :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Ulla
Wow, this is my fifth attempt to write this review. My Internet connection keeps on crashing. Anyay, it's a great chapter and scary as well. What on earth will happen toGladys. I'm glad to see Mildred back home and safe; I hope the Internet works this time. Hugs. Ulla xxxx
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
|
Wow, this is my fifth attempt to write this review. My Internet connection keeps on crashing. Anyay, it's a great chapter and scary as well. What on earth will happen toGladys. I'm glad to see Mildred back home and safe; I hope the Internet works this time. Hugs. Ulla xxxx
Comment Written 16-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
-
Your internet is like Alexis', I wonder why? Thank you so much for the lovely 6 stars, my friend!!! I'm glad you liked this part, it's difficult to get the right amount of description in without taking the story into a horror tale ... and it was horrific in prison for those women. Yes, they are back home now, but will be off again soon. Big hugs, my dear friend. :)) Sandra xx