Brindled Thoughts
Free Verse for the contest30 total reviews
Comment from krys123
My Lord, Tony, Cheers;
-I was dazzled by the tickling of my tongue is the alliteration's rolled smoothly with each breath that I took. The inconspicuous rhymes that popped up now and then made the tempo flow smoothly within each line. Thus making each rhyming word contingent to the meaning and concept of each line which helped the understanding of the enjambment and the topic which also flow smoothly.
-"...until a gentle breeze brings life again." All throughout this writing I get the feeling that poetry is dead but the authors live forever. And yet a new poem arises and brings new life to the authors of such a archival talented format, "I hear their words on angels' wings for, though these poets died, their fears and loves survive,
transcending time in harmonies that rise,....raising up such welts and weals
as resurrection deems it needs to vanquish death." Beyond all else poetry defies death and the authors are of these poems shall live forever within the words that put and deciphered the disclosures and pleasures of life on the faces of all readers.
-Good luck in the contest, Tony, and take care and have a good one.
Alex
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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My Lord, Tony, Cheers;
-I was dazzled by the tickling of my tongue is the alliteration's rolled smoothly with each breath that I took. The inconspicuous rhymes that popped up now and then made the tempo flow smoothly within each line. Thus making each rhyming word contingent to the meaning and concept of each line which helped the understanding of the enjambment and the topic which also flow smoothly.
-"...until a gentle breeze brings life again." All throughout this writing I get the feeling that poetry is dead but the authors live forever. And yet a new poem arises and brings new life to the authors of such a archival talented format, "I hear their words on angels' wings for, though these poets died, their fears and loves survive,
transcending time in harmonies that rise,....raising up such welts and weals
as resurrection deems it needs to vanquish death." Beyond all else poetry defies death and the authors are of these poems shall live forever within the words that put and deciphered the disclosures and pleasures of life on the faces of all readers.
-Good luck in the contest, Tony, and take care and have a good one.
Alex
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Many thanks, Alex. I appreciate your very kind words and award of six stars. Most generous. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Joy Graham
This is a terrific contest entry, Tony :) I love the picture and the idea of, "brindled thoughts of poets wise". It's actually a brilliant idea to have a wise person watching over poetry of poets alive and dead. We need a poetry hall of fame. Best wishes in this contest. This is quite lovely.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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This is a terrific contest entry, Tony :) I love the picture and the idea of, "brindled thoughts of poets wise". It's actually a brilliant idea to have a wise person watching over poetry of poets alive and dead. We need a poetry hall of fame. Best wishes in this contest. This is quite lovely.
Joy xx
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Many thanks, Joy. I appreciate your very kind words and award of six stars. Most generous. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Just like this photo is a work of art, so too is your free verse poem, Tony. Your ability to choose unique wording to convey your thoughts is second to none. Though this is a free verse poem, there is still a rolling rhythm to this piece that is most appealing.
Terrific use of alliteration throughout this write. This section in particular was my favorite part, and has me in awe:
"in harmonies that rise
to waft and weal, then drop
with claws of steel
to pierce the soft of human stuff
and taffeta ordeal" ... (taffeta ordeal ... brilliant!)
Good luck in the contest with this terrific entry. ~~ Connie
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Just like this photo is a work of art, so too is your free verse poem, Tony. Your ability to choose unique wording to convey your thoughts is second to none. Though this is a free verse poem, there is still a rolling rhythm to this piece that is most appealing.
Terrific use of alliteration throughout this write. This section in particular was my favorite part, and has me in awe:
"in harmonies that rise
to waft and weal, then drop
with claws of steel
to pierce the soft of human stuff
and taffeta ordeal" ... (taffeta ordeal ... brilliant!)
Good luck in the contest with this terrific entry. ~~ Connie
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Many thanks, Connie. I appreciate your very kind words and award of six stars. Most generous. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a good entry for the Free Verse Poetry writing contest.
Your verse has a clear message and a nice flow.
Well done, and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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This is a good entry for the Free Verse Poetry writing contest.
Your verse has a clear message and a nice flow.
Well done, and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Many thanks, Sharon. I appreciate your reviews and good luck wishes. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from jlsavell
Tony,
I am taken aback by this extraordinary free verse. Exceptional on all counts. It does have a soft rhythm to it like the comforting sounds of a rolling train.
It grabs the soul and places us in the mind of what it is to be a poet. Constantly churning, grasping life in all its providence to see what inspires next...
beautiful work...
jimi
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Tony,
I am taken aback by this extraordinary free verse. Exceptional on all counts. It does have a soft rhythm to it like the comforting sounds of a rolling train.
It grabs the soul and places us in the mind of what it is to be a poet. Constantly churning, grasping life in all its providence to see what inspires next...
beautiful work...
jimi
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Many thanks, Jimi. I appreciate your very kind words and award of six stars. Most generous. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from barbara.wilkey
weald (Neat word, I had to look it up) This is a wonderful contest entry. Not only did I learn a new word, but this poem was enjoyable to read. Thank you for sharing. Good luck.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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weald (Neat word, I had to look it up) This is a wonderful contest entry. Not only did I learn a new word, but this poem was enjoyable to read. Thank you for sharing. Good luck.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Very many thanks for your review, Barbara, and for your kind words. Most affirming. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Sis Cat
Tony, even when writing in free verse your poem is filled with rhythm and movement that is rocking and gentle like the ebb and flow of waves. This echoes the brindled thoughts of the narrator whom I imagine to be a person like myself reading poetry in bed late at night and contemplating the poets who came before who
though these poets died,
their fears and loves survive,
He goes on to describe their words as being akin to a bird of prey:
in harmonies that rise
to waft and wheel, then drop
with claws of steel
Falling asleep while reading:
My favoured book now falls,
its meld of life and rage consumed
He awakes in the morning a "lamb anew":
still damp with dew when I arise;
a no-man's land, where lost souls scrawl
Yes, I often do my writing in the morning when others sleep.
The narrator overcomes his lethargy and age when
a gentle breeze
brings life again.
Your poem is filled with rich language and imagery, delighting me.
Thanks again, Tony, for sharing another great one. I wish you contest success.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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Tony, even when writing in free verse your poem is filled with rhythm and movement that is rocking and gentle like the ebb and flow of waves. This echoes the brindled thoughts of the narrator whom I imagine to be a person like myself reading poetry in bed late at night and contemplating the poets who came before who
though these poets died,
their fears and loves survive,
He goes on to describe their words as being akin to a bird of prey:
in harmonies that rise
to waft and wheel, then drop
with claws of steel
Falling asleep while reading:
My favoured book now falls,
its meld of life and rage consumed
He awakes in the morning a "lamb anew":
still damp with dew when I arise;
a no-man's land, where lost souls scrawl
Yes, I often do my writing in the morning when others sleep.
The narrator overcomes his lethargy and age when
a gentle breeze
brings life again.
Your poem is filled with rich language and imagery, delighting me.
Thanks again, Tony, for sharing another great one. I wish you contest success.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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Very many thanks for this review, Andre. Your comments closely mirror my intention. I always find free verse difficult for I think that rhythm and rhyme are fairly central elements of verse. Nonetheless, it can be liberating to use them without the constraints of a formal structure, and the poems that I write in that way usually come closer to what I originally had in mind. Your six stars are a great validation for this one.
Comment from Teri7
Tony, This is a very well written poem with great descriptive words and great imagery from the art work. Best wishes in the free verse contest my friend. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Tony, This is a very well written poem with great descriptive words and great imagery from the art work. Best wishes in the free verse contest my friend. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Very many thanks for your review, Teri, and for your kind words. Most affirming. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I like the message. The photo is exquisite in its portrayal of a wise elder. The wrinkles tell stories of years of learning. I like the flow, and especially the internal as well as external rhymes. Your choice of words to describe the elder poets is well done. You write clever descriptive words, but I must admit, some are lost on me. That being said, I can tell this is well written. Thanks for sharing your complicated thoughts.
Take care, Jesse
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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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I like the message. The photo is exquisite in its portrayal of a wise elder. The wrinkles tell stories of years of learning. I like the flow, and especially the internal as well as external rhymes. Your choice of words to describe the elder poets is well done. You write clever descriptive words, but I must admit, some are lost on me. That being said, I can tell this is well written. Thanks for sharing your complicated thoughts.
Take care, Jesse
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Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Very many thanks for your review, Jessie, and for your kind words. Most affirming. Best wishes, Tony
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You're very welcome, Tony.
Jesse
Comment from RGstar
Apart from, perhaps, noticing the word 'brindled' a few times, this was excellently written. Alliteration in abundance...unforced and delicately placed. Wording fit for a wordsmith, I find little to stop me from awarding a sixth star.
Beautifully written.
My best wishes, Tony.
RGstar
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Apart from, perhaps, noticing the word 'brindled' a few times, this was excellently written. Alliteration in abundance...unforced and delicately placed. Wording fit for a wordsmith, I find little to stop me from awarding a sixth star.
Beautifully written.
My best wishes, Tony.
RGstar
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Very many thanks for this review, Roy, and for the award of six stars. Most affirming. I agree with your comment and have dropped one of the "brindled" words. I think it reads better for the omission. Best wishes, Tony
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Good write, Tony.