Free Verse Collection
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35 total reviews
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
A very well done free verse taking us into the storm with you as it starts show and works its way up to cleansing force. Not only for the city but also for life itself.
reply by the author on 05-May-2017
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A very well done free verse taking us into the storm with you as it starts show and works its way up to cleansing force. Not only for the city but also for life itself.
Comment Written 04-May-2017
reply by the author on 05-May-2017
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Very many thanks, Barb. I always appreciate your reviews. Tony
Comment from Pantygynt
A few minutes of thunderstorm encapsulated in an exemplary free verse poem. The scansion exercise you offered elsewhere (in the free verse class) was an interesting example of an author's own interpretation of his poem. One of the freedoms of free verse is that it may offer the reader the freedom of a different manner of readings and emphases. The scansion "plot" you provided I thought was brilliant, but I fouynd my reading rhythm was slightly different.
I love the poem though. It works like a piece of art photography. So much of our work to date has been with ongoing stories. this is refreshingly different.
reply by the author on 07-May-2017
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A few minutes of thunderstorm encapsulated in an exemplary free verse poem. The scansion exercise you offered elsewhere (in the free verse class) was an interesting example of an author's own interpretation of his poem. One of the freedoms of free verse is that it may offer the reader the freedom of a different manner of readings and emphases. The scansion "plot" you provided I thought was brilliant, but I fouynd my reading rhythm was slightly different.
I love the poem though. It works like a piece of art photography. So much of our work to date has been with ongoing stories. this is refreshingly different.
Comment Written 04-May-2017
reply by the author on 07-May-2017
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Very many thanks for the extra star here, Jim. Appreciated.
Comment from damommy
Great job, as always.
I could picture myself walking along in that scene. The imagery was very vivid, and I like the way you formatted this poem. Free verse is definitely your "thing."
I love walking in the rain, and driving it, too, and I feel that elation from a "primal force.' Rain always feels so cozy, even when it's rough. Go figure. LOL
reply by the author on 07-May-2017
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Great job, as always.
I could picture myself walking along in that scene. The imagery was very vivid, and I like the way you formatted this poem. Free verse is definitely your "thing."
I love walking in the rain, and driving it, too, and I feel that elation from a "primal force.' Rain always feels so cozy, even when it's rough. Go figure. LOL
Comment Written 04-May-2017
reply by the author on 07-May-2017
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Very many thanks, Yvonne. I've grown to appreciate rain much more since moving to this arid country! It is truly a blessing when rain does come.
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I'll bet. I don't think I could adjust to a place that didn't have rain. It could rain every day for my part. LOL.
Comment from bertranclan
I felt like I was there! This is a very descriptive poem that really brings out the imagery. I, too, have felt horizontal rain sting my face due to crazy wind. (When I lived in Iceland). Your poem's varied rhythm is pleasant. Good job here!
reply by the author on 05-May-2017
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I felt like I was there! This is a very descriptive poem that really brings out the imagery. I, too, have felt horizontal rain sting my face due to crazy wind. (When I lived in Iceland). Your poem's varied rhythm is pleasant. Good job here!
Comment Written 04-May-2017
reply by the author on 05-May-2017
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I very much appreciate your review, bertranclan. Many thanks. Tony
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you for sharing this well paced poem. Even before I read your author's notes, I had noticed a change in tempo throughout the piece. You wove the tale expertly and I could almost feel the stinging rain and the breaking sun's warmth on my face,
~patty~
reply by the author on 05-May-2017
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thank you for sharing this well paced poem. Even before I read your author's notes, I had noticed a change in tempo throughout the piece. You wove the tale expertly and I could almost feel the stinging rain and the breaking sun's warmth on my face,
~patty~
Comment Written 04-May-2017
reply by the author on 05-May-2017
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I very much appreciate your review, Patty. Many thanks. Tony
Comment from TAB_that's me
Wow Tony, you should write free verse more often.
Great enjambment and alliteration. Your words create a vivid concrete picture. It also has the sense of feel (wind and rain).
teresa
reply by the author on 05-May-2017
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Wow Tony, you should write free verse more often.
Great enjambment and alliteration. Your words create a vivid concrete picture. It also has the sense of feel (wind and rain).
teresa
Comment Written 04-May-2017
reply by the author on 05-May-2017
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I very much appreciate your review, Teresa, and the six stars. Many thanks. Tony
Comment from Irish Rain
I love storms, so this would be a six if I had one left. I love the scene you paint with your words...the storm awakens us, and suddenly we are alive again. How this makes me feel. Awesome. Blessings....
reply by the author on 05-May-2017
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I love storms, so this would be a six if I had one left. I love the scene you paint with your words...the storm awakens us, and suddenly we are alive again. How this makes me feel. Awesome. Blessings....
Comment Written 04-May-2017
reply by the author on 05-May-2017
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I very much appreciate your review, Judy. Many thanks. Tony
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
Glorious use of the language as you create the sensory stew of touch, sound, sight and smell. I can understand why you avoided taste since it would be British cooking after all. I liked the use of the different feet that wandered the street. It allowed me to find a variety of rhythms to hang the piece on. "Slum-pervaded thought" made me smile as did:
"past London monoliths that rose
dejectedly
towards a glowering sky;
my thoughts like lead,"
Thanks for another beautiful read. Seems you are having great fun in the free verse class. - Wendy
reply by the author on 06-May-2017
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Glorious use of the language as you create the sensory stew of touch, sound, sight and smell. I can understand why you avoided taste since it would be British cooking after all. I liked the use of the different feet that wandered the street. It allowed me to find a variety of rhythms to hang the piece on. "Slum-pervaded thought" made me smile as did:
"past London monoliths that rose
dejectedly
towards a glowering sky;
my thoughts like lead,"
Thanks for another beautiful read. Seems you are having great fun in the free verse class. - Wendy
Comment Written 04-May-2017
reply by the author on 06-May-2017
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Thank you, Wendy, for your review of this and kind comments. Much appreciated! Yes, there is little poetry to be found in British cooking, exept in the genre of humour! Have a good weekend! Tony
Comment from RodG
I know what you mean about getting into an "iambic rut." I do, too. This free verse poem's cadence often sounds like falling rain. Nice use of occasional alliteration and end rhyme. I especially like the fourth stanza where the "glistening sun" reappears. Your message comes through clearly in your final stanza. Nicely done! Rod
reply by the author on 05-May-2017
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I know what you mean about getting into an "iambic rut." I do, too. This free verse poem's cadence often sounds like falling rain. Nice use of occasional alliteration and end rhyme. I especially like the fourth stanza where the "glistening sun" reappears. Your message comes through clearly in your final stanza. Nicely done! Rod
Comment Written 04-May-2017
reply by the author on 05-May-2017
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I very much appreciate your review, Rod, and for mentioning the parts you liked best. Many thanks. Tony
Comment from estory
I thought the free verse in this poem had some great dramatic pauses in it, and the images were really vivid and colorful. We have that drab, wet street, the overcast sky, the mundane day. And then that moment of lightning, that epiphany moment, that shakes us up, shifts us into the light again, when the sun comes out and the world glistens and seems fresh and exciting again. estory
reply by the author on 06-May-2017
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I thought the free verse in this poem had some great dramatic pauses in it, and the images were really vivid and colorful. We have that drab, wet street, the overcast sky, the mundane day. And then that moment of lightning, that epiphany moment, that shakes us up, shifts us into the light again, when the sun comes out and the world glistens and seems fresh and exciting again. estory
Comment Written 04-May-2017
reply by the author on 06-May-2017
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Thank you, estory, for your review of this and kind comments. Much appreciated! Have a good weekend! Tony